Daomen Damendao

Self-evaluation: This is the first book for a newbie. It has quite a lot of bad points and bad points, and there are also many bright features. It is known as "the rain hits the beach with a few pits". It starts slowly, with ancient meanings and modern words intertwined, and it has all kinds of taste/charm/interest. It should require patience and careful reading. The author calls it "a touch of density". In fact, there is no shortage of fighting and blood...

The author is very insistent, so let me say a few words. The writing style is quite good, and the description is very fascinating. But Yu doesn't hide his faults. First of all, the second half of the introduction should not be better. As the saying goes, the good-looking skin is worth three thousand and one night, and the interesting soul account violates the rules. The first half of the introduction is very brilliant, making people very interesting, but the second half falls into the cliche, which in turn erases the expectations generated in the previous part. Did the wandering toad say that? There should not be more than 3 characters in the first three chapters, just clearly describe the priorities. The author is ready and ready to write 3 protagonists Looking at the works of masters, there are generally two main lines, one light and one dark, and the two lines are intertwined. For example, in The Deer and the Cauldron, the light main line revolves around Wei Xiaobao, and the dark main line revolves around the forty-two chapters, and the two lines are intertwined. The author is going to write 3 protagonists, so there are at least 3 main lines. It's easy to get messed up, but not easy to control. This is my feeling after reading the first few chapters, above.

The writing and ink are fragrant, and the wonderful pen is full of flowers. The harmony of slenderness and the flow of clear springs. The beauty of mountains and rivers, the wishes of flowers and birds. How profound it is, my heart gradually appreciates it.

Bai Yinmeng made me discover this book😁

I admire your persistence, 👍👍👍your literary talent makes me envious! 😭 After reading dozens of comments, I found that the author knows how to reply, and the reply is very literary. A bold guess would be that the author should be over 45 years old! 😜😜😜

Happy New Year and may you become a god soon! ! !

A hundred battles and galaxies have been forged, and the snow has greatly increased.

This article is different from ordinary Internet articles. It must be savored carefully, slowly, and has endless charm. The author's literary skills are not ordinary!

It's different when you look at this introduction. The author is very powerful. I always believe in looking at the creativity in the early stage, the writing style in the middle stage, and the structure in the later stage. The level of this introduction can guarantee that this novel can be read for at least a long time. Decisively accept it first. If the structure is good in the later stage, it will become a god.

The author Jun's writing style is like mirror flowers, like flowing water, and it feels comfortable to read. It is indeed a high-class old white prose

Can I accept one from the woman occupying the building?

2018.12.24, The night of the left egg, after ten months of pregnancy protection, I lowered and raised again, staggered and refused to fall, and finally broke out of the shell! Within 24 hours of signing the contract and changing status, 1 protector! 3 Hall masters! 5 Helmsmen! So gelivable! ! ! (In tears) Thank you to every book friend who has rewarded me, and thank you for your never-ending companionship, encouragement and support! Love you! With you along the way, I am willing to suffer even a little bit. I also thank myself for not giving up. Do it and cherish it; Let it go and be free! The rustling west wind fills the courtyard with plants, The pistils are cold, fragrant and cold, and it is difficult for butterflies to come. If I were the Qing Emperor in another year, I would be rewarded with peach blossoms!

This book is really all-encompassing, I really like this flavor... The most important thing is that I feel that this book contains a lot of life philosophy, so it's good to read it if you have time.

Lanting Zizai Xiaoyao Building has enough spicy hot pot. If you are visiting from all over the world, please stay! 🙏🙏🙏

If you don't know that there is a way to practice, it will be in vain no matter how hard or tired you are. May I ask where the door is? Please look at the big door!

It's so beautiful. The antique world of Xianxia and the orthodox classical flavor are so attractive. Vote for it and give it your all. Thousands of rewards will support it~👏

It will be released on the 1st tomorrow, please order first 😰😠

Looking back on the past years Tianjishu Numbers Storm Enemies Misty Snow Night Boudoir in Chinese I heard this piece of Lanting narrative weekend Pleasurable

The reason why I feel so emotional is probably because of time. Companyship is the longest confession of love 😌 Since I wrote a book, my second brother should be the author who has accompanied me the longest from the beginning to the completion of a book. There is no one... I secretly looked at my first comment. If it is correct, it was in March 2018. Therefore, in less than two months, I have known my second brother for three years, and this book has been with me for almost three years. Three years, it's a long time. My hair has started to thin 😭, and I have forgotten how I came to be called Second Brother. I was deceived into going astray and persisted in writing, but the journey was full of twists and turns... In about four months, I will enter my fifth year of writing books. I have not finished a book yet, and the number of words has been surpassed by my second brother this month. I don't know if the second brother will continue writing this book after it is finished. Judging from other comments, it seems that he will. I also hope that he will. After all, single-player authors are lonely and can only warm each other up... Of course, the second brother is still much better than me. If not talking about other things, let's talk about self-discipline. The second brother can not only run a good career and take care of the family, but also allocate time to write a book. Although it is not updated daily, it can be updated every two days for several months, and the number of words in a chapter is about 4,000. This quality is obviously lacking in me who can feed the whole family without worries. Although salty fish's character is hard to change, the existence of my second brother will still chastise me salty fish from time to time. I should really work harder. Okay, that's it for my remarks, Don't spread the flowers, send the little ginger to dangle the flowers~

Many people write books for their ideals, and this is true for the second brother Yuan Geng and the idle Hua Jie. As long as I am happy writing, and occasionally a few readers can listen to me tell this story, that is enough!

The name change gift is presented to you: Don't be afraid of the big door The mountains are long and the rivers are wide and the roads are far away Why should you cherish your youth Wine and meat go through the intestines and you are free

Give me some perspective. 1. The writing is very old-fashioned, and the readership will be limited. 2. There is a big problem with paragraphing. However, I am also a newbie and my understanding is limited. I suggest you search on Baidu for the writing characteristics of online articles. 3. The dialogue content in the first two chapters is too long, and the introduction content is too long, which is a bit boring and will drive readers away. You must know that the readers are here to read the story, not the textbook, so don't be afraid that the readers will not understand it and start to introduce it in a long paragraph. As the saying goes, half of the story must be hidden, and there must be a sense of suspense. Male videos are all about plot, and the introduction should advance within the plot so that it doesn't make people feel boring. It is recommended to read more books by great masters. I like Tomato's books. You can read his opening chapter. 🤭 I am not taking this opportunity to promote my favorite author. The above is my small opinion after reading two chapters. The first three chapters are the most important and I suggest modifications. However, I am a female reader who has read few male-channeled books, and I am also a female author who is obsessed with reading. I may not be able to agree with many of the comments made by the author. If I think it is biased, I will delete it after reading it. There are also several chapters left in the first two chapters. If you feel it is not good after reading it, please delete it 😁😁 Let's work together↖(^ω^)↗

The white pines have not yet grown across the streets of Pyongyang Snow on the pines In a flash, they turn into feathers and chase the light Xiao wants to dream and ride on the clouds and waves together I never thought about it Thousands of people have passed through the world without knowing the details Spring and Autumn are the same as usual Invincible against the vicissitudes of life The vastness produces glimmers Dare to outlast the heaven and the earth In the chapter of the great road I don't know the five colors How cold it is to become a feather It also teaches the heart to be crazy

In the quiet cold night, a storm arose in Lanting. The path to immortality is vague and dim, but self-study can illuminate it. Outside the pavilions, towers and pavilions, why have they ever been destroyed? The river flows eastward, the makeup of eternal regret, the three-foot sword, in the world of mortals. Let me see how many times you can eat it. . Abominable

Come on, I saw a sentence today that the first step to becoming a great master is to finish writing a book. Can you give up on it just because your child doesn't look good? Later training is very important. Training can help you become talented 😡😡😡

Make a suggestion, highlight the protagonist, and write the main line clearly.

The first book, as far as wenqian is concerned, is already excellent. Segmentation and grasping the rhythm require a process, come on!