Black Bomb Rescue Journey

I quickly browsed through it and gave the author some suggestions. I apologize if I make you unhappy. The currently selected worlds, as the composition of the basic Naruto world, have become the most outstanding among the current worlds. It's a bit embarrassing to say that the author's performance has indeed gone from bad to worse. This situation was most obvious during the Fourth Holy Grail War. At least the author had a big shortcoming in searching for information. Hassan's abilities were misstated, and the idea of ​​the King of Knights was misrepresented. In all aspects, it felt to me that the author's book was not written for the readers, but for his own persistence. There are also many problems with the dialogue and plot settings. For example, the protagonist often has the problem of having no sense of presence even though he is on the scene, and the dialogue that expresses the protagonist's existence always feels a bit stiff. This should be caused by the failure to design the dialogue well. I hope the author can regain his passion and original intention and tell the story more excitingly. I won't say much more, keep working hard.

In fact, it is better to change it to a lottery system. You can write fate after black bullets, inherent enchantment loli army, etc., And then add a loli king status to the restraint force.

After flipping through the catalog, it turns out that it sells dog meat, but I still want to express my opinion before I write anything else. The most important issues in the black bomb are racial conflicts, discrimination, social conflicts, and the construction of girls' own three perspectives. It's not something that can be solved by killing anyone today. 1. In the cognition of human society, girls no longer belong to the human race. They are already another race. There is naturally a subconscious sense of opposition or competition. What's even scarier is that the girls themselves think so. 2. The positioning of this emerging race in the current society belongs to the enemy and the oppressed class. With reference to our own history, if we want to adjust this issue, the time it will take to adjust it will take two generations. How to deal with this. 3. The age and education of girls. This is a very embarrassing age. Their own three views have been initially established, but they are not fully formed. It is impossible for them to establish a formed system by themselves. Let adults take the lead and establish this system, but I don't feel confident. 4. How to establish a system for two races to live together, and what kind of system should be established. If these four points are not clearly explained, then it is better to go ahead and ask the system to buy a personal world for all the girls to take away. A matter of a few lines

It would be better to say that this is selling dog meat with a sheep's head.

"Jet Black Bullet" is well written. It's rare to see such a good Black Bullet fanfic. I don't want other novels to cheat others, so I give it a thumbs up.

He came in the dark, but ended up selling dog meat. Naruto is too old at the beginning

Coming from Hogwarts on the tip of your tongue, are you free? ! Post "I really like Bai Mao Tuanzi" in every paragraph. This will affect other people's comments.

This is like a black bullet. . . . Does it matter?

In fact, I came here because of this subject, but this author's book is the only one that made me unable to survive the first one. Sorry, is it not strange for the Hinata family to be so mature at the age of two? This is really poisonous to me.

Does the author want a eunuch? I just watched it, don't

Will it be over after writing Black Bullet?

Is your book about darkness?

Hold on, author, many people give up on black bullets in the end, hold on?

Do you want to write about a gray paradise? Or gray fruit?