Li Yi of Bingzhou

To be honest, since Zhang Ning is the main character, you can mention that she and Liu Yan got together in the later stage. There is no need to write a chapter about this process. It is not to look at her growth process. Even if you write it, many people will probably forget it later. It is not as simple as mentioning it when needed. They all come to see the protagonist's growth experience😄

1: Delete all Zhang Ning's scenes 2: Delete all Xiaobai's scenes 3: Delete the scenes between Qiao Xuan and Erqiao. Erqiao's life experience has also been changed, and she is no longer Qiao Xuan's granddaughter. 4: Increase the plot of party struggle. Is the reason why the late Han Dynasty turned into troubled times simply because of the eunuchs' monopoly? Obviously impossible. 5: Enrich each character so that they are as non-facial as possible. 6: Add some supporting roles and plots, reduce or delete some supporting roles or plots...

The author strives for death because of his strength. The chapter about Zhang Ning being drunk is disgusting to many people. At least a group of people will be removed and some people will be driven to piracy.

Having read the last book, I admire the author's great perseverance. It is not easy to revise a book seven or eight times. Let me share my understanding of why there is no big fire. 1. Thoughts, it's really a drama. For example, those words that ask readers back make me feel a little uncomfortable every time I read them For example, those who make fun of the God of Harmony are unwilling to give up, and the jokes that have nothing to do with the plot are not very cute 2. The paragraphs should not be too long. Nowadays, the paragraphs are basically one sentence or two sentences. Each chapter should not exceed 2,500 words, otherwise you will feel a little tired 3. Subject matter. The previous book was unpopular but the writing was really good (after all, it has been revised seven or eight times). I haven't read this Three Kingdoms yet to comment on it, but the theme of the Three Kingdoms is too vulgar and it's not easy to stand out. 4 characters. The protagonist in the previous book had no brains and a weak sense of empathy. It lacks ambition (of course the friendship with Nobunaga is also a highlight) and lacks motivation to move forward. The characters are too invincible and not exciting. If it is an invincible style, it will not be exciting enough. It's not embarrassing but it's a bit uncomfortable The supporting characters are portrayed very brightly. When Ryuuki Saito died, I got goosebumps all over my body. For an old bookworm, I haven't felt this kind of excitement for a long time. In the later period, I felt weak, especially after Oda Nobunaga changed his name to Lu Xin, he was portrayed like a minion, without any domineering power. He was the Demon King of the Sixth Heaven! 5 heroines. The author naturally has his own judgment, but for now let's forget about the stallion. Just fight and kill, it's good to combine vertically and horizontally, don't drive randomly (I really don't understand why there are many paragraphs in the original book that have not been harmonized, hehe) 6, and what are the Yamata no Orochi and Taotie? Let's make it clear😱Whether it's martial arts or history, it's too ambiguous 7, Golden Finger. There is no pleasure of improvement, and the impact is a little bit better when it reaches the peak all at once Summary. This is the first time I have written a long review to someone, and I just feel that it is really a pity for the author and that it could be better. Come on! By the way, the author really has no talent for naming. Next time I have decided on the subject of my new book, would you like me to help me come up with a name?(•ོ̀ᴗ•ོ́)و

Brother Eunuch, I have changed my mobile phone, and your name no longer has the default spelling 😁 Brother, you might as well finish this book and start a new book, and continue writing about the Meiji Restoration after the Warring States Period 😁

😓 Can you give me some thoughts?

Is the author too serious and responsible? After writing so much, he still needs to revise it? This is one of the rare weird things in online articles, I admire it.

My child was not born when you started changing it, and now he has to register for kindergarten. . .

After reading several versions, the author really cares about what readers think. Author: 1-year-old posing with a stick Reader: Too fake, strongly opposed The author explained it, and then changed it to 2-year-old posing with a stick Reader: Untrue, strongly opposed The author rewrote the beginning in a rage, the mother who had a difficult childbirth survived, and started practicing martial arts and wielding a gun at the age of 3 Reader: gave up, no longer loved it Author: Forget it, I won't write it anymore

The plot is too boring, and the more I write it, the more boring it becomes. The first part is actually okay, but the second part is almost unbearable. . . .