Kayan

What attracted me was the early plot. It's okay to just look at the early plot. It's very compact and reasonable, perfectly reflecting the temperament and personality of the "World Destroyer". There's no big problem with the various fights, but there are a lot of things that weren't written well. First: Liu Qianwen is an important character, but her influence on the protagonist is not obvious. The separation of the two in the end and the small details in the subsequent story can also show the depth of the relationship between the two. Maybe there is no chance. If the heroine does not appear so soon, there may be more opportunities to show it. Anyway, the protagonist's tough personality is very distinct, so it is not a big problem, but it also shows that the relationship is not well written. Second: The opening story tells us about the "cynicism" of the Destroyer, but the subsequent story tells us about the "savior" of the Destroyer. This is very contradictory. The fierce conflict between the two should be written. The subsequent stories should focus on this contradiction, because the novel must have a theme and core. I didn't see your theme and core. This is the problem behind many online novels that make them unbearable to read. It's just off topic. As for some people still enjoy reading it, I think it's because the thrilling escape is interesting. So I think the story should not revolve around Han Xu, but around the World Destroyer. This is my small recommendation. The theme of "Heroes" is troubled times, the theme of "Swordsman in the Snow" is the various aspects of life, and the theme of almost all the novels of Skeleton Elf is blood. These really good novels must have a clear theme. Blood may be the core of most works, but many of them are written as *** instead of ZB ( Pretending), some novels may go off topic just like you. For example, the third young master of the Tang family wrote two Douluo Dalu, and finally Douluo Three was a complete mess. In my opinion, Douluo's failure was because he started to think less. However, I also understand the misfortune of the third young master. Tiancan Tudou is XX. Is Mao Ni's article very detailed? It seems to be quite delicate and very good among famous online writers. Third: It is commendable that you have a broad vision, and the various foreshadowings are very exciting. However, although the foreshadowing is important, what is more important is the control of the entire story. In my opinion, the story was completely derailed after the meeting of the two emperors, and the sliding began at the virtual gate. First of all, you admitted that you are not very good at school, and you don't like ordinary Internet writing routines. In fact, I am very happy, but this will cause the subsequent story to develop very quickly. Campus life is supposed to slow down the development of the plot. Many articles write campus routines. First, the number of words can be mixed for easy writing (this is what most people understand). Second, the protagonist's strength will increase at this stage to the strength required for the next story. In this way, the protagonist will not be beaten while hanging, thus fulfilling the needs of the plot. And in the Xumen Scroll, you went against the grain and directly involved the protagonist in the top-level turmoil. It was really a bold way of writing, but in this way the development of the story will be quickly promoted, so it will be difficult to write many things that should be written. The most important thing is the relationship between Han Xu and Bai Liuyi and the relationship between Han Xu and Wang Moutou, especially the latter who obviously did not pay attention. The world destroyer is not Han Xu but Han Xu and Wang Moutou, but Wang Moutou actually became a minor character during this time? Although Han Xu and Bai Liuyi were slightly ambiguous, there was no big breakthrough in their relationship. I think that at this time, writing more storylines about admiring scenery or talking about love may be more important than studying in school, because the author is the controller of the story and should have the dominant power over the story. I can understand the purpose of writing about card making and learning martial arts, which is nothing more than to pave the way and explain the later Duan Yuan Cards and high strength, but these are secondary. The most important thing about whether a novel is reasonable lies in the failure of character creation, rather than whether there is sufficient explanation for the improvement of character strength. And because of the lack of life stories in Xumen, I feel that Xumen is a dispensable place. The principal and teachers are of course very helpful, and the conflict between the Seven Kings and Shenxuan Emperor is certainly very important in promoting the development of the plot, but these are non-key characters, and the appearance rate of these secondary characters is actually > the protagonist? So starting from the Xumen, key characters such as Han Xu, Wang Moumou, and Bai Liuyi are no longer the absolute center of the story. Intrigue plots are constantly being added, but the protagonist is a character who does not want to be manipulated and vows to get rid of his scheming. However, he is calculated and manipulated time and time again, and his identity is finally revealed. Is this still the World Destroyer? From the extremely smart and strategizing weakling to the one being plotted against, what kind of sequel are you going to write? What kind of world destroyer? The division of the World Destroyer is the biggest failure in my opinion. Han Xu has nothing to do with the "extreme disciples" in the subsequent stories. A more reasonable arrangement should be that Han Xu and Bai Liuyi break through their relationship in the Xumen, while Wang Moumou follows Han Xu around the world. The two of them experience dangers again and again, and then the name of the World Destroyer becomes famous and famous all over the world. The orcs directly overturned the human world. In my opinion, it ruined the rhythm of the article. The World Destroyer is the core! Saving everyone in the world is not! Save humanity! Is saving the world the most important thing? Although the foreshadowing is very good and thoughtful, I'm sorry for the entire article. Your foreshadowing is meaningful enough, but the idea ruins the theme. So what if half of the human race dies? Han Xu is the Lord of Destruction! Perhaps using the power of the beasts to destroy the decaying world is a choice that Han Xu may make as the World Destroyer. He should never be a hero, but a "hero" who is willing to endure the humiliation and bear the burden of infamy. Fourth: I feel the flavor of traditional novels like Jin Yong Gu Long from your novel, that is, a master can never defeat three moves, it all depends on a few key moves. In the early stages of the story, the use of the Mysterious Card was greatly restricted, resulting in unsatisfactory fighting. The Mysterious Card is powerful, but it does not reflect its dominance at all. As weapons and weapons that are not the core of this article account for a much larger proportion in the battle than the Mysterious Card. The Mysterious Card is in a very embarrassing situation. No matter whether masters or rookies, there are only a few chapters where the confrontation between Han Xu and Tianhuo is more about resourcefulness and escape. The Mysterious Card is more often just a foil for escape. I think you are not careful enough about the Mysterious Card. The gorgeous Mysterious Card should appear at the first and second levels. It may not be astonishingly lethal, but it should be able to attract attention. Do it and cherish it. I am just a nobody. I only know so much. I still want to write a lot but I am afraid. It is so difficult to really write a good book.

After reading more than forty chapters, I finally gave up. The writing is very good, and the style of writing is also the kind I like very much. The protagonist, apart from being cool sometimes, is also very intelligent at other times. But, there are many shortcomings. First, there are too many sentences with various modifications. It was okay at first, but it really caused "eyestrain" later on; second, the plot was dragging, such as the part where the male protagonist and Liu Qianwen went to the War History Museum. I personally think that the plot can be covered in one chapter, but it dragged on for several chapters, almost all of which were introducing the background of the story, which made it a bit annoying to watch. Generally speaking, the characters in the novel are well drawn and full, and at least the male protagonist's IQ is online (this alone is enough to kill a bunch of mindless white articles and cool articles); the plot of the novel is anti-routine and innovative 👍👍👍; the fighting part is written in great detail, but it is tiring because of too many rhetoric. It is recommended that in the next book, don't use too much rhetoric; the introduction of the background of the story does not need to be said too much at once, it can be scattered in chapters, and it will be explained later. Although this book has been abandoned, the author's new book has been put on the bookshelf, and I am looking forward to the next book. I'm optimistic about you~~~❤️

In the past, when I read novels, the villain always died because he talked too much. Now that you have so much talk about decency, why don't you die?

All the foreshadowings have been unfolded From the earth dragon to the beast king's plan, such a grand plot is really like a dream. There are fewer and fewer books that focus on the plot and character creation and return to the characteristics of the novel itself. It is vaguely like the feeling and aftertaste of the guest I am looking forward to the author's future scripts. I am about the same age as you and have just entered school. I wish this can be used as a stage and opportunity to make great achievements in the future 🌹

Recently, good books have really appeared suddenly, one after another. The plot satisfies my fantasy of all the plots in the fantasy world when I was a sophomore in high school. It is real, dreamy, and satisfying. Although it is the second grade in the past, it also shows that it is worthy of moving me. Sometimes you may feel that it was something you liked a long time ago, but you probably don't like it anymore. At least the infinite flow and the main god flow have become the mainstream in recent times. Even the mainstream novels themselves find them boring. So what's the difference between what you liked before? But only after reading it will you know that no matter when you read it, the books you like and the stories that touch you will never fade. Some people say, good things, what are good things? Good things are like expensive solid wood furniture. Even if decades or hundreds of years have passed, when you look at it for the first time, the impression it gives you is exactly the same as when it first appeared in front of people. And this kind of thing, we call it timeless.

It's a very good book. Most of the characters are full-bodied and healthy. Everyone has their own path, right or wrong. There are no brainless villains like Xiaobai's novels or repeated slaps in the face like low-level cool novels. It's a pity that this good book is not popular. . . However, compared to the title and introduction, the content is still a bit poor.

One heroine is written to death, and another heroine is introduced. I have only seen one novel of this type that has a good reputation, and the only one is Zhu Xian. If the author just wants to write the story he wants to tell, then that's fine. But if he is making money for a living, I would suggest not doing so in the next book. Stallions or single female protagonists are recognized by a large number of readers. On the other hand, novels with dead female protagonists can only be said to be a niche. After all, most readers read online articles just to be relaxed and happy. Reality is already tiring enough, so why bother to find discomfort in novels?

I feel a little embarrassed () = I'm speechless. I have to say a lot before killing, and I have to explain to the person I killed. I'm speechless😓

After reading dozens of chapters, I was actually attracted to the first few chapters, and there was nothing wrong with the background. I just couldn't understand the meaning of the protagonist's actions? Isn't the top priority now to leave the slums and enter a wider world? Why do we have to do things every day?

I think the reason why this book is not popular is not the subject matter or the writing style or other reasons about the world view, but the author has created a world where monsters eat people and people eat people. When readers enter this world, they fail to vent their anger. Books that do not express their anger are not acceptable in online articles. To put it simply, the author is not ruthless enough in destroying the world, as if mosquito bites make people despair.

It's very beautiful, keep updating, keep up the good work 👍

To be honest, after reading just one chapter, I felt a little embarrassed that I couldn't stand it anymore. The stacked adjectives made the whole character and story feel fat and greasy! Then I came in and looked at the post, and it seemed that the same was true in the middle and later stages! ! I'm new to it, so I can't say whether it's good or bad, I can only say it's inappropriate! Come on, author! I hope I will be lucky enough to read your other refreshing books that suit my taste in the future! !

The situation of this month has been mentioned in the book. I am afraid that some people may not have seen it, so I will repeat it here. Towards the end of this month is the time for the postgraduate exam. I have been preparing for this exam for more than half a year. For more than half a year, I have been busy preparing for the exam while typing, so because of my energy, many places have not been written well, and there are not many updates. As for this December, there must be fewer updates. There may be occasional interruptions without asking for leave. There is no way to update during the two days of the exam. I hope for your understanding. This isn't a sign that this book is going to be a eunuch, it's just that I really can't help it. Waiting for me to finish the last twenty days and come back with full blood, I will work hard to finish this book. I still have nothing to say about my character in the past year or so, right? Haha, wish me good luck and wish everyone good luck.

This book is too cold... After a quick look, it's still tepid Come on, author, it's difficult to write a novel without any means to become popular. This book has some innovations and some writing skills. If you practice and practice, maybe you will become a god in the next book.

In fact, I think the author wrote about what the protagonist did in the previous chapter, and I felt it was a bit like adding drama to the protagonist inexplicably. It was not explained at the beginning, maybe it was written down later, but after reading the previous chapter, I always felt that the protagonist had nothing to do. His most important thing at that time was to pass the college entrance examination, become a fifth-class citizen, and improve his strength. He could just let them eat dog for other things. . .

Being emotionally rich doesn't mean killing many people, it's very disgusting.

666, The plot is really good! ! ! ! !

This is indeed a good book. Every character is full-bodied, has his own story, and has his own persistence. The plot is also quite exciting, not a routine. This book was accidentally written by me when I was short of books. After reading the first 50 chapters or so, I felt that this book was worth subscribing to, no matter what. At that time, I thought, I was finishing it almost every day, why did it reach 700 chapters, and I was lucky enough to finish it. No recommendations, editor? ? ? . . . ! ! ! Finally, let me talk about my feelings after reading 500 chapters. The characters in this book are indeed full-bodied, the descriptions are very detailed, and the story arrangement is very reasonable. But why didn't those touching parts and the parts where I should cry arouse my emotions? I've thought about the plot, and it seems like there's nothing wrong with it. The problem lies in the description of the plot, which may be a little off. Well, this is just my personal feeling,,,,

When I read Chapter 300, I found that the author always likes to write about how beautiful and charming so and so is, how many people fall in love with her, how good her figure is, and so on. He tries his best to highlight how beautiful and outstanding this woman is, and then she falls in love with the male protagonist for various inexplicable reasons. I feel like I am reading a mindless stallion novel. Qian Qian in front of me I can understand the relationship between Wen and the male protagonist. The first love on campus is hazy and you can fall in love without a reason. I can also understand that the female protagonist Bai appears later and is interested in the male protagonist. However, after the male protagonist died and his ex-girlfriend took revenge, it was like she had forgotten about him. She fell in love with Bai out of nowhere. Is it really necessary for Qianwen to exist? The inexplicable emotional drama for the sake of death made me laugh. After reading a lot of cool articles, I had a hunch that Peng Dan, Zhao Feixue, and others would all fall in love with the male protagonist in the end, pay for him for free, and then the male protagonist would have no choice but to accept it.

After reading one chapter, I felt that there were too many adjectives.

To be blunt, your book is a fucking failure. It was okay at the beginning, but the more you write, the more outrageous it becomes. The beginning does not really unfold the background training system of the entire book. The plot is also outrageous, especially the chapters where Liu Qianwen dies. It is obvious that the protagonist will also die. It is outrageous to force the writing to life.

This is the best fantasy novel I have read so far. The first and middle stages are very exciting, especially the part in the slums. In fact, there is a common problem in modern novels. They all like to save the world. Maybe it's because there are so many diaosi in China.

New book has been released! Welcome everyone!

Before reading, ask, is the protagonist a card maker or someone who uses cards to fight?

I feel like there are so many problems, especially with Bai Liuyi, I really can't stand it anymore.

There are really many things to say about robbing someone. . .

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He said he talked too much and didn't know what the topic was. He repeatedly improved the test and didn't even start the test before the test results were released.

The author's writing style is really good. Can he write a strange and ominous novel? I hope it will be based on three flowers, and the three systems of essence, energy and spirit will be engraved on the petals with a magic similar to the perfect world.

Introduction, in this province where human beings are divided into three, six or nine grades