Adventures in a Strange Ancient World

It's not a Qiong Yao drama, it's too boring.

Isn't it time travel? Why write so many useless things in the first few chapters? There is no important plot. Do you want to highlight the innocence of the protagonist or do you want to tell us what kind of person the protagonist is?

If you don't let me make the headlines, I'll blame the editor 😏

Didn't the heroine take her IQ of 300 with her when she traveled through time? I feel so stupid, and her intelligence is not shown at all 😰

The writing style is childish, like it was written by a primary school student. Every thought comes out, and I write whatever comes to my mind. I can't understand it.

After reading the previous chapters, I felt that the plot description was too rough, the characters had few inner activities, and the plot developed too quickly, making it unattractive. It's really hard to watch. But the author works hard, work hard, he will make progress! At first, the writing style of Lin Jiacheng's early works was not very good, but later he became better and better as he wrote more.

Is it NP? I looked a little bit like that, but I didn't dare to look at it.

Okay, it turns out it was a mistake at the beginning, but after reading the comments, I realized that more than 300,000 words were already on the shelves. Probably many readers, like me, lost interest after reading the opening chapter. The opening chapter was not written well, and even the best subsequent writing did not arouse people's desire to read, so I hope to change the opening chapter to make it less uncomfortable. The beginning is really important. Without a good beginning, there is no way to attract people to read it. It's like a lot of packaging nowadays, which is flashy, but it turns out that there is a bag of straw inside, but many people are still fooled and buy it. It's the same when you write an article. Anyway, I feel that every time I start an article, I am ambitious, but I can't continue writing at the end, but the article is still barely read. Although many people scold me and say that my brain is damaged, but they paid to read it, so just scold them. But speaking from experience, the opening is very important, it can be weird, it can be stunning, it must be eye-catching, but don't forget to write the opening with your mind. No matter how weird it is, it must make people feel reasonable. If it is unreasonable, forget it.

Dear, 20-year-old is an older leftover girl, so there are no leftover girls in our country. Five years of hard pursuit, one month of dating, and abandoning the girl he has been pursuing for five years because he can't sleep. This man is really free. I don't know the author, but do you know what is the best thing that you can't get? The more you can't get it, the better. Hand, the more you want to get it, this is the bad nature of human beings. If you design such a joke, it is more believable than designing a scumbag to make a bet with others, instead of a girlfriend who wasted five years chasing after you. After a month of dating, he found another woman just because he refused to sleep with her. How many five years did he have to waste like this? Life and time are so worthless? It would be better to change the 20-year-old setting to a 30-year-old setting, or 25. Really, 20-year-old girls are the most beautiful, and they are completely incompatible with leftover girls and older people. Please give the author some thought, otherwise please modify the beginning, it is too careless.

Why do I think the theory at the beginning is so strange? Is 20 years old a leftover girl? They broke up after dating for a month without holding hands and kissing each other? It's just so weird