I Am a Villain and I Have a Guide

I am the author of "Seizing the Enemy", which you described as a "junior high school student's self-advocacy essay" in the post forum. Out of a little annoyance and curiosity, I searched for your work specifically to see which stage of the nine-year compulsory education you are in. Each reader's social experience and surrounding environment are different, resulting in different reading preferences. No one can be comprehensive. Authors of my age may have more mature minds than you. Their feelings about your work are really the same as your evaluation of me: at the stage of a junior high school student, naive (without any vindictiveness, to be honest, but this is only my personal opinion). I have carefully read your article and will give you a fair summary of your pros and cons. Let's talk about the advantages first: the writing style is concise and profound, and there are almost no wrong sentences. This is really rare in the world of online literature. Some people's articles are full of wrong sentences, and the descriptions are deliberately artificial. Things that can be explained clearly in two words require a long paragraph to state, and in the end they fail to get to the point, that is, white text. I have to say that your writing style is indeed adequate, which shows that you have written a lot. However, there is one thing. Because I care too much about the writing style, there is a trace of deliberate carving between the lines, and occasionally it feels a little unsmooth. I suggest you read Mr. Chen Zhongshi's "White Deer Plain" and study it, which can improve the writing style to another level. Let's talk about the shortcomings: I don't know the review standards of Qidian editors, but I think that a good book must have rich characters and ups and downs of the plot. People all have emotions and desires. They can be angry, excited, happy, or disappointed. In terms of personality, they can be bold, stubborn, vulgar, wise, cunning, mean, or decent. Only in this way can we be considered a living person, not a puppet with facial makeup. How are these reflected? Two very important points are character language and psychological activities. I can't see anything special about the protagonist in your article, so it's hard to arouse interest. Let's talk about the plot. The plot structure is good, but there are some minor flaws. There is not enough foreshadowing, not enough foreshadowing, the statement is weak, the contradiction is not intense enough, and it cannot arouse the reader's emotions. However, middle school students should like your type of writing, which is simple and direct, and does not require the use of brains. Since I haven't read too much, I'll say this much first. Generally speaking, your book is better than 90% of the authors at the starting point, including some great writers. Perhaps this is an illusion brought to me by your writing. If the masterpiece is out of ten, I will give you a seven out of ten (one of which is encouragement). Of course, if the follow-up plot can focus on creating conflicts, this book is likely to be popular among both old and newbies, and become a big hit. After all, you still have the skills. The above is not intended to offend, it is purely idle chatter. If you feel uncomfortable, please delete the comment directly.