Blazing Sun

Burning Sun: Women and Innocence (To those cautious girls) (To the good girl Xiaodan who never stops writing) Hello little egg! Congratulations on writing another book! It took me three months to write, which was not easy. Thanks for your hard work! "Burning Sun" is something I pretty much grew up watching. I made a book cover for "Scorching Sun" and I also listened to Xiaodan's original inspiration for the story. Little Dan took one step at a time, and finished the story about the belt that first appeared in her mind while struggling and considering. In the summer, she told me this story. I was very interested in it and I said I would definitely read this article. On August 18, I said I would write a long review for "Scorching Sun". She said she would "completely | give it my all." Now that she's finished, it's time for me to fulfill my promise. I have never written a long review. The long review I understand may be similar to reading notes. I asked Xiaodan, what kind of long review do you want. She said that she wanted to know what she wrote well and what she wrote poorly. Xiaodan told me before about her troubles in writing articles. She seems to lack the intervention of a perspective, and this perspective will tell her where she writes well and where she needs to improve. When it comes to writing online articles, I am also a beginner with many problems and flaws. But I am willing to use my limited knowledge and experience as a perspective for this intervention. The following are some of my feelings after reading "The Burning Sun", only from a personal point of view, focusing only on the text itself. I will use "author" to call my friend Xiaodan, so that I appear objective and polite! One: Yang Let's talk about the good stuff first. "Burning Sun" is a story full of subplots, full of fireworks and human touch. While I was reading, I was always curious about what meatballs tasted like. (1) The author obviously pays attention to the tragic mother and daughter, and the several depictions are very profound. For example, Fan Qian said: "Mom, the last time I ate meat was when you gave birth to your younger brother. Would you like to have another son?" For example, Tian Xingchun's paragraph: "For a very long time, Tian Xingchun defaulted to being the new mother in this family. The mother who ran away had to do housework, and Tian Xingchun also had to do housework; the mother who ran away had to take care of her father and grandma, and Tian Xingchun also had to take care of his father and grandma; the mother who ran away had to be beaten, and Tian Xingchun also had to be beaten. She didn't complain or shed a tear, because her mother ran away, so she, the new mother, had to bear everything." (2) The second is the portrayal of female characters. Mother and daughter and single daughter seem to be the author's creative themes at this stage. She put in a lot of effort. There are a few excerpts that I like. The first one is the passage where I personally entered the situation of "Fan Qian" - [The water basin swayed and slipped from Fan Qian's hand, and the clothes in the basin flowed to the ground along with the water. Fan Qian hurriedly threw the basin and grabbed her clothes. She stepped on her right foot with her left foot and sat down in the basin. Fan Qian's back and buttocks were hurt by the wooden basin. She fluttered her hands and feet twice in the basin. Her world followed the fluttering and then began to spin. The lunch bowl of wontons had long been digested. Fan Qian's hands and feet were weak, and she could hear her stomach growling. She stopped struggling, endured the pain in her back and butt, and lay in the basin looking at the sky. The sun has completely set, and tonight is a cloudy day without a moon. The stars are not big, but they are very dense, twinkling in the night sky. Fan Qian couldn't tell whether the stars were spinning or whether she was dizzy from hunger, but the stars were dancing in circles in the night. They are carefree, they know no pain. The second is where I understand the huge differences between the character "Duan An" and Fan Qian, Xu Jie, and Tian Xingchun—— [The moonlight is still hazy. But they had already walked through the dark alleys without street lights and arrived on the main road. The still-lit red signboard of Mangyxing Hot Pot Restaurant appeared in front of them. Fan Qian held Wang Rui's hand, and Wang Rui took Tian Xingchun to a door on the second floor of the hotpot restaurant. Wang Rui opened the door, and a vague and sleepy voice came from the dark room: "Huh?... Mom." The smile that Fan Qian had been wearing was frozen by the air conditioner in the room. She let go of Wang Rui's hand and hugged her arms. (3) Tian Xingchun's situation [She asked again: "Why are you sitting at that door? Do you want the police to help Xu Jie solve the case?" Tian Xingchun replied "Yes" again. Fan Qian tilted her head and looked at Tian Xingchun, her eyebrows furrowed, and her expression was quite confusing: "Then why don't you go in? The police are all inside, who can see you sitting outside?" Tian Xingchun lowered his eyes and looked at the belt around his waist again, "Don't pay attention to me inside."] "You don't pay attention to me inside." This sentence happened to hit Tian Xingchun's situation. She is a person who is not bright enough in the public sense, and a person who is persistent enough in a niche sense. Many people can ignore her. During the two long years, Tian Xingchun was like a roadblock, guarding the abandoned section of road overgrown with grass in Xujie, trying to attract the scorching sun to illuminate the fog along the way. Due to a strange fate and good intentions, Fan Qian stayed for Tian Xingchun due to an occult incident in renting a house. She ran for Tian Xingchun, calling for help for her and Xu Jie, and finally attracted Duan An. The hidden pain of the characters is captured by the author. Her insight makes her good at portraying delicate emotions. What is very precious is that she has the power of writing to convey her observations. The first major point to conclude is that from my perspective, the author is good at grasping the texture of the characters and has a talent for finding "nodes of deep-seated pain". Two: suppress Next, let's talk about the parts of "Scorching Sun" that I think could be better. First of all, the length of the text is about 100,000 words, which is the size of a short story. The subject capacity of short stories is best to focus on one. The author was a bit ambitious and stuffed two of them. Domestic violence. Chasing the murderer. The social issues and story associations behind these two themes are worthy of lengthy descriptions of each one. The author seems to be aware of the cohesion that these two themes must appear in a book, so he chooses to use an old case and a character (Tian Xingchun) who has both themes to connect them. In fact, the priorities of the two were not clearly distinguished, which led to some mentions from both sides in the end, but neither was written clearly. Failure to write clean representations can be seen in two ways. (1) Chasing the murderer: Duan An's case Duan An is the turning point of the story. The emergence of law and justice represented by her changed Tian Xingchun's 20-year futile pursuit of the murderer. She took over the case and decided to investigate the murderer of Xu Jie. This is the story of "Scorching Sun", the most important line of action in the "present tense". If the protagonist in the previous history is Tian Xingchun, then the protagonist in the present tense is Duan An. However, the author seems to use Fan Qian's perspective to describe Duan An's actions. Duan An is actually a protagonist who has been deprived of his power. What makes her very different from Tian Xingchun, Xu Jie, and Fan Qian is that she is a pillar of talent who grew up in a healthy and loving family. The author assumes that she graduated from college, which is the bright fruit of elitist education. She is the detective in "The Case of Xu Jie in Yang County", but she does not show the abilities that a detective should have. I took a rough look at the nodes that could be called "actions" in Duan An's investigation, and found that there was only one - Aunt Gui said that there were "difficulties" in Xu Jie's case. A detective investigates a mysterious case from 20 years ago, but only one action is taken. And the murderer who knew the truth unexpectedly had an accident at the critical moment, and before he died, he told the truth and admitted his sin. There is no particularity about Duan An. She is here to resolve the case, but whether she comes or not, Tian Xingchun will be called to Zheng Degong's bedside by Aunt Gui. Zheng Degong will definitely confess his crime before his death and pray for Tian Xingchun's forgiveness. Duan An is here to solve the case, she is not here simply to listen to Tian Xingchun's stories. Her perspective must be higher than that of Tian Xingchun and Fan Qian, and the author writes that she is the "smartest" among the three, but she does not show intelligence, but passiveness. In this part, the author seems to have not sorted out how to trace the occurrence of a tragedy, and the proportion of Fan Qian and Duan An in the pursuit of the murderer. Zheng Degong's appearance is too coincidental, the author is being lazy! Not next time! (2) Domestic violence: the shaping of three levels: "Tian Xingchun-Xu Jie", "Tian Xingchun-Fan Qian" and "Tian Xingchun" "Tian Xingchun-Xu Jie" To be honest, when I first heard this story, I was very curious about the history of Xu Jie and Tian Xingchun. What kind of two girls chose to run away from domestic violence and start a family of their own. But I was a little disappointed because Xu Jie's writing was too smooth. Her character performance is all one-dimensional. We know that she is tenacious and that her life is extremely tragic. But these are all adjectives, not "people". Xu Jie, who got to know Tian Xingchun through his mouth, was too embarrassed. What we know is Tian Xingchun's Xu Jie, not Xu Jie's Xu Jie. Xu Jie is miserable, but she is the largest iceberg under the sea in the book. A big iceberg is huge and heavy in legends and imaginations, but when we really dive under it, we find that it is just a thin piece of ice. The left side is written with bravery, and the right side is engraved with misery. I often wonder if Xu Jie was not so good, if Xu Jie regretted after bringing Tian Xingchun out, and even had the same idea as Tian Xingchun's mother: to run away and abandon Tian Xingchun. But Xu Jie didn't run away in the end. She chose to come back, accompany Tian Xingchun, and be Tian Xingchun's eyes. She hugged the blind Tian Xingchun and comforted her that she would be fine. At the same time, she ran outside and squatted on the ground, yelling, "Fuck!" His dad's! Let them all die! If Xu Jie has such a side, then in the "present tense", when Duan An hears "Xu Jie is so vicious" from Aunt Gui or someone else, I think the effect will be twice the result with half the effort. That is, using very little pen and ink, he writes about the sorrow and struggle that cannot be summarized in words in the story lines of Tian Xingchun and Xu Jie. Just imagine if a deceased person who tried his best to survive would have a greater impact if Aunt Gui said the following in that ward many years later. (I tried to write it myself, please forgive me if I am offended! Private Marseille!) "I..." Aunt Gui's throat was pinched and she lowered her eyes. Xu Jie's lips lying on the ground had turned blue-purple. Xu Jie's hands and feet spasmed, and his chest heaved violently.  She is going to die. But she still has a chance. Xu Jie prayed as she lay on the ground. Her throat was suddenly very full, and there might be a lot of blood. She didn't dare to cough, so she could only shout with all her strength: "Zheng Degong! Zheng Degong! Save me!" But Zheng Degong turned aside. Xu Jie scolded: "Damn you Zheng Degong! You are eating shit!" Every word she spoke was splashed with blood on the ground. Aunt Gui looked down and saw that it was Xu Jie, Xu Jie who cared about everything, Xu Jie who worked hard and never complained, Xu Jie who protested loudly just because he was assigned to the night shift for a few more days. She was dying, but she still refused to accept her fate. Xu Jie's throat and hair were filled with blood. She is like an erupting volcano. Her still-unfocused eyes were locked on Aunt Gui, "Save me! I can't die! Sister, sister, please... I still have people in my family..." I still have people at home. Tian Xingchun, whose face was covered with a layer of cloth, turned to look at Xu Jie in the clear blue light. Xu Jie wanted to raise his arm and point to Aunt Gui, so that she would know that someone was waiting for her at home and that she was not lying. But she was too tired. She tried many times, many times. Aunt Gui couldn't help but ran down. She knelt on the ground in a pool of blood, stretched out her arms, and made several moves in the air to try to pick Xu Jie up, but she couldn't find a good way. The back of Xu Jie's head was probably broken, and her cervical vertebrae and spine were also damaged to varying degrees. "Save me..." Xu Jie's eyes moved with difficulty. She looked at Aunt Gui. Blood overflowed from her mouth and nose and poured into her ears. She couldn't quite hear what Aunt Gui said. Boom—— Boom— Boom. Xu Jie heard the heartbeat, her own. She saw a majestic red. Someone pulled her waist up and tied something around her. She vaguely heard something. The redness grew bigger and bigger, like a beast made of fire, charging towards her with its teeth bared. Xu Jie understood that no one would save her. She struggled to squeeze out a few words from her lips and teeth, "No..., No." What don't you want? No belt? Twenty years later, Aunt Gui looked at Tian Xingchun kneeling on the ground. It was extremely hot that day and there was a power outage in Feihong Mall. Tian Xingchun grabbed her and knelt on the ground to beg her. She said, I beg you, please... You must have seen it, you must have heard it. That's Xu Jie, it's my Xu Jie!! Tian Xingchun's pleading face slowly overlapped with Xu Jie's face. Aunt Gui thought, Xu Jie wanted me not to tell Tian Xingchun. In this part, the force of Xu Jiezhi's death becomes stronger. A person who is unwilling to die and Tian Xingchun who has insisted on her death for 20 years have made a two-way journey in the life dimension. This is the story of Xu Jie and Tian Xingchun. "Tian Xingchun-Fan Qian" After reading the entire book, I don't quite understand some of Fan Qian's later performances. She is the introduction perspective of the text. She is sensible, keen, and cautious. She is the control group set up by the author. Half of them are successful samples of Tian Xingchun and Xu Jie who escaped from their families, and the other half are defective samples of Duan An's happy family. Fan Qian is also a victim. From Tian Xingchun's perspective, Fan Qian's eyes look like Xu Jie's for a moment. [Fan Qian looked at Tian Xingchun and said, "Lawyers can really help. Can you believe me for once? Anyway, they don't charge money anyway, so just give it a try!" "What if it happens!" Fan Qian's eyes were illuminated by the sun. She looks a lot like Xu Jie at this moment. Tian Xingchun's hand holding the belt tightened, and the other hand touched the banner of "Return My Innocence" in his arms. Tian Xingchun licked his chapped lips and said, "Okay."] The author made a comparison between Xu Jie and Fan Qian, but because the difficulty of solving the case was greatly weakened - I don't know whether it was the author's insistence or because the author thought it was not important - I did not see the part where Fan Qian rose up in the process of chasing the murderer in the later stages. The role of Fan Qian is to "Scorching Sun" just like a new sun is to Yang County. After entering the pursuit of the murderer, she should not only be a reflection of the goodwill of Wang Rui, Duan Ningting, and Duan An's family. She cannot be "collected" by good intentions. She must stand up and be another "Xu Jie" of Tian Xingchun in the next twenty years. "Tian Xingchun" Tian Xingchun is undoubtedly the character that the author writes the most in the book. Her character and arc were adequate. I just want to say something that is not enough. Perspective. For example, the moment of witnessing Xu Jie's death should be directly introduced from Tian Xingchun's perspective, so as to support her 20 years of persistence. Twenty years is too long, and there must be a heavy enough bargaining chip to suppress Tian Xingchun. [The night when Xu Jie's accident happened, I smelled prune cakes outside the factory. It tastes like the plum and vegetable pancakes my mother made for me back then.  "I didn't go see it that year, so my mother left." "I went to see him later. But Xu Jie died." Tears fell from Tian Xingchun's eyes one by one. They fell into the porridge and were shattered into pieces without leaving a trace. "I killed him." Tian Xingchun sobbed, "Xu Jie, I killed him." "I shouldn't go and see it - why should I go and see it?!"] The direction was vaguely found here, but it was not accurate enough. The small gray words in this article are, "They are each other's friends, sisters, lovers, and mothers." Four identities, four entanglements. Xu Jie must be a chaotic and entangled existence in Tian Xingchun's place. This place is a third-person perspective, which Tian Xingchun told Duan An. But I think that the third perspective can be used when Xu Jie and Tian Xingchun met and ran away together. When it comes to the most important thing, Xu Jie's death, the causes and consequences must be clear and written in a solid way. Tian Xingchun could forget many things, but when she thought about them later, every detail was vivid. Zheng Degong's attitude towards them. The relationship between Tian Xingchun and Xu Jie changed in private. (It must have changed. For example, this sentence: "After Xu Jie appeared, she relied on Xu Jie to stand up for her. After Xu Jie died, she relied on learning Xu Jie to make a living." But the twist is that Tian Xingchun did not fully understand Xu Jie. She did not know that during the days when she was blind, Xu Jie carried her and was tortured beyond recognition by the world outside of domestic violence.) Tian Xingchun smelled the prune and vegetable cakes and went out to take a look. After Tian Xingchun came back, Aunt Gui took him to identify the body. After being severely hit, he signed the contract and later regretted it. The details of each and every one of them must be solid, so as to be worthy of the emotional mood created throughout the text. What the author needs to improve is the sense of structure and the clarity of the narrative perspective. The issue of choice is too delicate and needs to be adapted to local conditions. Three: Conclusion I seem to have said a lot, but I am definitely not here to find fault. The author has very good creative inspiration and a delicate and nuanced approach. She can endure loneliness and insist on writing the stories she wants to express without following the mainstream and the market. She deserves to move to higher places, and she will reach higher places. The title of this article is Women and Innocence. Let me casually talk about why it is named like this. Women's stories are written by women. Although there are many dark places, in the whole story several characters give each other some toffee, eat some snacks, and talk about some food. This is the author's tendency. She tries to use light, childlike elements to dilute the overly heavy and suffocating reality. This is cute. My analysis was rough and incomplete. I can only give her a criticism from a few basic points (comment, one word) from a mixed perspective of "receiver" and "creator", hoping it can be of help. Finally, I would like to say that "Scorching Sun" is very good, everyone is welcome to watch it!