Faithless

My first impression of the heroine was not very good. The mistress deserved it no matter what. If she didn't sympathize, she deserved to die.

Oh my god, this finale is even more shocking.

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Sorry to say, this novel was a failure. The author has good writing skills, but his storytelling skills need to be improved. Huadeng speculated that before writing the article, the author only had an outline of the story at most, and did not even resort to writing. The lack of outline and the unrestrained writing style resulted in this article - long and drawn-out, with a slow plot and a messy structure. Another fatal factor is that it is bland and uninteresting. The opening chapter is more literary and artistic, with rich prose and too much attention to details. The description of the environment, the heroine's psychology, movements, expressions, etc. Is too specific, to the extent that a child learning to draw can describe the scene in various details based on the author's description. Therefore, the infinite elongation of various details leads to a sharp reduction of the main plot. Apart from introducing the heroine, hero, and best friends, the first chapter is basically ineffective (attractive) content in terms of plot. The subsequent writing follows the style of the opening chapter, and the narrative is extremely lengthy and procrastinating, causing the plot to advance slowly and slowly, to a considerable extent without effective support from suspense and cuteness. This will undoubtedly cause readers to abandon the article in large numbers. In the second chapter, many characters pop up. Except for a few supporting characters, the rest are all passers-by: A, B, B, D, and W. They are the kind who may appear in this book. Such characters should be condensed as much as possible, otherwise it will be a waste of pen and ink and it will easily confuse the line of sight. In terms of character description in this article, except for the main character who has a relatively distinct personality, the existence of other people is basically like a vacuum. This illustrates a problem. The author is not skilled enough in portraying characters. Except for the protagonist who spends great efforts to describe the characters with large strokes and details, the other characters cannot even leave a facial expression. In view of this, it is recommended that at the beginning of the chapter, there should not be too many characters. Too many characters not only test the reader's memory ability but also the author's control ability. It can easily weaken or confuse the protagonist's sense of existence. Speaking of characters, let's talk about the heroine here. Frankly speaking, this heroine is special, but unlovable. She is special because she is a patient with depression. Perhaps because of this, she is always obsessed with problems that ordinary people think are unnecessary, and she will commit suicide due to sudden emotions. There was clearly an affectionate man waiting for her, tolerating her, and loving her, but she stubbornly resisted him, treated him harshly, and was unable to extricate herself from her past. Such a woman is very similar to the kind of character who begs for food from a golden rice bowl and feels immersed in sadness every day despite being happy. She is contradictory, hypocritical, and has a bad temper, which makes it difficult for people to like her. Based on the above, let's talk about the biggest contradictions and conflicts in this article. So far, it can only be said that it is a war between the heroine and herself. When her depression is lighter and her sense of reality is stronger, she will realize that the male protagonist Jane is good to her, and she will have a warm relationship with the male protagonist; when the past things are mentioned and the depression worsens, she will have a bad temper and anger the male protagonist, which will lead to a tragic episode; when the male protagonist fights back out of misunderstanding or intolerance, it is the most intense conflict and highlight of this article so far. Such a setting is undoubtedly monotonous, repetitive, and easily tiring. Let's talk about suspense. The suspense of this article mainly revolves around the death of the heroine's ex-boyfriend in a car accident three years ago. It was this incident that affected the heroine's mood, causing her to suffer from depression, and it has always affected the heroine's subsequent life. The heroine's ex-boyfriend is bisexual. He was gay before he got together with the heroine. Later, he probably also fell in love with the heroine and is expected to become a straight man. But before he became straight, he was betrayed by his "boyfriend", and his identity as gay was suddenly exposed in front of the heroine. The heroine couldn't bear it and ran out, and her ex-boyfriend chased her, leading to a car accident. Not to mention whether this plot is a bit old, but to say that the suspense has been basically exposed, and there is no new foreshadowing revealed in the subsequent chapters, and no more interesting contradictions and conflicts appear. Therefore, under the impact of such a lengthy narrative, a slow pace, various characters with soy sauce, monotonous and repeated conflicts, suspense that has been almost exposed... Etc., What else can support the readers' motivation to continue reading? In summary. The author was too free-spirited in the writing process, resulting in large-scale details that were blurred and laid out. In addition, there were no obvious cute points in the lengthy writing, which made it impossible to attract readers. Generally speaking, it is still the same old saying: "Writing seems to look at the mountains and dislike the flatness. If it is like the square stones in the well field, what is there to see?" The above opinions are inevitably biased and the author may refer to them as appropriate. Don't be so glassy as to be cautious.

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The heroine, can't afford to pick it up, can't let it go But the portrayal is quite realistic, but there seem to be a lot of people who like her... Yuanmu

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