You might like my next novel, The Bystander Gets a Secret Identity Script in a Comic. Add it to your collection if you're interested.
Blurb:
When Dorota was told that the world she lived in was being broadcast to other dimensions as a comic, she was locked in a tense standoff with her enemy.
The unfamiliar voice offered her a deal: take on a new identity, gain popularity, and help it fulfill a "wish."
After a lifetime of dull routine, she didn't rush to refuse. Instead, she grew intrigued.
Disguises were her specialty.
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The capital, nicknamed "Fantasyland," was the Federation's most advanced city of the elite: prosperous but hollow, a place where power and suffering were born side by side.
And the protagonist was in... some outlying district near the capital.
But that wasn't a problem. He'd go through all kinds of hardship before eventually making his way to the capital.
Dorota thought for less than a second, then promptly made up an excuse under another identity and smoothly tagged along, getting herself some screen time.
The protagonist diligently competed in the league while she sneaked into the archives.
The protagonist carefully slipped into a secret research institute while she simply posed as a researcher and spoke with the director.
The protagonist was implicated and about to be thrown in prison, so she turned herself in and made herself a big shot behind bars.
Comments: Wait, where did this new character come from?
[It's happening... I'm fighting the BOSS? For real?]
[Why are you villains so ruthless that you even kill your own people?!]
Dorota: I overdid the act... Just kidding. Being a villain is so liberating.
The academy's promising new star basked in thunderous applause. After winning the final match, he stood brimming with confidence and spirit, the center of everyone's attention.
The representative of a third-party faction roamed the blood-soaked night, arrogant and unrestrained, while shadows circled her like obedient monsters, waiting for their chance.
The powerful executive sat high above everyone, cold and arrogant. Nothing could catch his attention except the one thing he cared about: his interests.
[More handsome men and beautiful women, please!]
[Who says villains are no good? This villain is amazing! I'm defecting right away!]
The only hitch was that she acted so ostentatiously and never bothered to hide herself. Before she knew it, she'd accidentally revealed her identity.
"Teacher."
The young man's trembling pupils reflected her image. His voice was strained, and the title he'd called out countless times seemed to bleed.
The leader of the Source organization, once famous and now rumored to have vanished long ago.
His teacher. His family.
[...! Who?! Who did you say that was??]
[Teacher...! I'm just glad you're back, Teacher!! I don't care, I don't care. She must have had her reasons for doing this TT]
Observer: "...Is this part of your plan too?"
Dorota: "..."
No, this was just an accident.
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Some say she's a revolutionary who rose up against oppression. Some say she's a contemptuous, freewheeling egoist. Others say she's a rebellious woman who plays with the world and has a silver tongue.
But there's no need to dwell on what kind of person she is. Even her name, her past, and her allegiances don't really matter.
Nor does it matter whether she's a "she" or a "he."
On the wasteland, roses wither. The heavy clouds of the long night lift, heralding the fatal romance of the eve of dawn.
Welcome back.
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Please Note:
1. The female lead isn't a good person in the traditional sense. She's chaotic neutral, and everything she does is for herself.
2. She's the strongest around and uses multiple secret identities. The executive is a woman disguised as a man; her identity is revealed later. Includes fake deaths and mastermind-behind-the-scenes plotlines.
3. This is an edgy teenage fantasy and may be a little embarrassing. Leave your brain at the door.
4. No CP. The female lead has a bunch of one-sided attachments, meaning friendship, admiration, dependence, and other such feelings.
5. The author is a sucker for describing people's looks. Everyone is gorgeous.
Blurb for the next novel, The Bystander Gets a Secret Identity Script in a Comic:
As everyone knows, people around the protagonist are rarely ordinary bystanders.
But Bei is an exception.
As the protagonist's older brother, he's just an awkward background character.
After urban legends invade reality, Bei always happens to show up at dangerous haunted sites, yet he walks away without a scratch and never sees a thing.
The comments sum it up: NPC bro.
[NPC bro is here! Bro, you look handsome today too.]
[There's a monster right there and you still didn't see it. Just like you, NPC bro.]
The System thought so too.
Until one day, Bei accidentally fell into the domain of a newly formed haunted phenomenon.
It was about to explain the truth of the world to Bei and take the chance to trick him, but the next moment Bei struck, suppressing the monster.
He didn't seem like an ordinary bystander at all.
The System was dumbfounded.
It watched Bei leave without a hitch, casually pass the Operations Bureau as it arrived a moment too late, and successfully catch a bus.
He straightened his slightly rumpled collar, picked up a snack on the way, then returned home as usual and ate the fried food while his little brother rambled on.
It was so ordinary that the earlier events seemed like a mere illusion.
...But the mysterious figure "Fei," whom the Operations Bureau and the protagonist's group were desperately searching for, was indeed him. He seemed to have precognitive abilities and could easily deal with high-risk haunted phenomena.
The only person to clear the haunted-world game and return to reality.
The highest-privilege holder in the Abnormality Monitoring Bureau, "Jadeite."
Bei, who slips away right under his little brother's nose every day: Now this is what I call a thrill.
But they were all wrong about one thing. His ability to deal with those haunted phenomena ahead of everyone else had nothing to do with prophecy.
It was because of the comments revealing information about the future.
But to the commenters, it looked completely different.
[The protagonist's group and the Operations Bureau only just got the news, so they had no time to act. So... it's that powerful big shot again!]
[Whoa, this is a high-risk haunted phenomenon! What ability does this big shot have?! His power level is totally off the charts!]
[No wonder he turned down the Operations Bureau and the protagonist's group. The big shot clearly couldn't care less.]
Bei, who couldn't care less: Thanks for the invite. I just don't want my identity exposed.
With that, Bei successfully made his own way through the world of transformations and thrived.
He occasionally teased the protagonist's group and the commenters, cleared haunted phenomena, and searched for a way to restore the world. This three-part routine went on for a long time.
Until one day, the special management organization belonging to the haunted world arrived in reality and took control of the highest authority as mediator between reality and the game.
And Bei and Fei vanished at the same time that day.
The similarities that people had overlooked, the things that hadn't quite added up, finally began to make sense.
Bei never appeared again, but no one gave up looking for him.
A few months later, they finally saw that familiar face in the first announcement video from the Abnormality Monitoring Bureau.
As the Bureau's representative, he was aloof, cold, and arrogant.
He spoke coldly of the world's hopelessness, then announced that the Abnormality Monitoring Bureau would formally intervene, and everyone would have to follow its orders.
Perhaps this was the way he was always meant to be.
After clearing that seemingly endless game of haunted phenomena, Bei received a reward.
[Rule Nullification]
The domains of haunted phenomena overflow with terror and death, and are constructed from all kinds of rules.
He was the only one who wasn't bound by those rules.
The game was already over, wasn't it?
Read Before Starting:
* The cover uses the original title. The blurb has been revised, but the core story remains the same.
* Contains lots of comments, but no comic panels.
* Includes highly intelligent haunted phenomena. Bei knows some of them, and they get along well. The haunted phenomena in the story are all from games Bei has cleared. It's like a max-level player going for a speedrun (not).
* No faked death, but there will be a disappearance trope and an identity reveal later.
* The System isn't a golden finger. Bei is the strongest in terms of combat ability.
Theme: Never give up hope, even in the most desperate situations
A small suggestion, ma'am, you throw out too many definitions/codenames in the first ten chapters... And only a few of them are explained.
For example, in the middle of the first chapter, there is "Yongye District Executive Officer". What is the definition of this word? Which of the fifteen districts does "Yongye District" refer to? Or is it a street name in a large area? What does "executive officer" mean? Is it to kill weird people? I searched for a long time and couldn't get an accurate answer.
When I thought about putting these aside and looking at the back, many new concepts came to me: "The wilderness of the fifteenth district." What does this wilderness refer to? No man's land or a garbage dump? What is Zhuwang District? Going forward, why is there a branch agent in the wilderness? Does this refer to the gathering place of this organization? Going forward, the college is ok and I can understand it. Then this college is probably a promotion channel. It can also be found later that it is the only college connected with the Imperial Capital - so the question is, what is the concept of "Imperial Capital"? Is it the concept of a big city or the concept of a planet? If it is the size of a big city, why is there no connection? Is there a barrier between District 15 and other districts? The word "Imperial Capital" that is always mentioned in the fifteenth district refers to the first district or the other fourteen districts? If it is the size of a planet, then is this world only the "Imperial Capital" and the rest of the world where humans live is no man's land?
There may be answers to these later, but by Chapter 10, there are more and more similar concept words, and the explanations are still stingy. As a result, I have to look at the context after reading a word to try to figure out the definition on my own. This reading experience is really not comfortable.
Of course, this is just a suggestion. Madam, your writing is very good, but my understanding is not good enough.
I think the dialogue between characters can be marked with double quotes, and the observer's words can be marked with single quotes. There were times when I couldn't figure out who started the conversation and who was talking to whom...
The information gap between the protagonist and the reader is too big. The author knows that the protagonist knows but the reader does not. It makes the reader confused.
Tied, so how many people did Nana promise to [dog head]
In just the first few chapters, a lot of settings are thrown out, which is probably why not many readers read it...
Ahhhh! Finished reading!
Everyone is really nice!
The only fly in the ointment is probably Lan Jiyue and her brother TT
I really want the three little ones in the institute to be neat and tidy qwqq
Lan Yue in the extra story is not alive either, her eyes are filled with tears
Observe that you are so cute, shed tears quickly for me, Kangkang [dog head]
A small suggestion, ma'am, you throw out too many definitions/codenames in the first ten chapters... And only a few of them are explained. For example, in the middle of the first chapter, there is "Yongye District Executive Officer". What is the definition of this word? Which of the fifteen districts does "Yongye District" refer to? Or is it a street name in a large area? What does "executive officer" mean? Is it to kill weird people? I searched for a long time and couldn't get an accurate answer. When I thought about putting these aside and looking at the back, many new concepts came to me: "The wilderness of the fifteenth district." What does this wilderness refer to? No man's land or a garbage dump? What is Zhuwang District? Going forward, why is there a branch agent in the wilderness? Does this refer to the gathering place of this organization? Going forward, the college is ok and I can understand it. Then this college is probably a promotion channel. It can also be found later that it is the only college connected with the Imperial Capital - so the question is, what is the concept of "Imperial Capital"? Is it the concept of a big city or the concept of a planet? If it is the size of a big city, why is there no connection? Is there a barrier between District 15 and other districts? The word "Imperial Capital" that is always mentioned in the fifteenth district refers to the first district or the other fourteen districts? If it is the size of a planet, then is this world only the "Imperial Capital" and the rest of the world where humans live is no man's land? There may be answers to these later, but by Chapter 10, there are more and more similar concept words, and the explanations are still stingy. As a result, I have to look at the context after reading a word to try to figure out the definition on my own. This reading experience is really not comfortable. Of course, this is just a suggestion. Madam, your writing is very good, but my understanding is not good enough.
I think the dialogue between characters can be marked with double quotes, and the observer's words can be marked with single quotes. There were times when I couldn't figure out who started the conversation and who was talking to whom...
Brain storage, foreign persimmon? , Cp++++, xp, n,,,
I'm alone now, let me let it go for a while ()
The information gap between the protagonist and the reader is too big. The author knows that the protagonist knows but the reader does not. It makes the reader confused.
Tied, so how many people did Nana promise to [dog head]
In just the first few chapters, a lot of settings are thrown out, which is probably why not many readers read it...
Ahhhh! Finished reading! Everyone is really nice! The only fly in the ointment is probably Lan Jiyue and her brother TT I really want the three little ones in the institute to be neat and tidy qwqq
Lan Yue in the extra story is not alive either, her eyes are filled with tears
Observe that you are so cute, shed tears quickly for me, Kangkang [dog head]