Trading Life for Money [Entertainment Industry]

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If I were asked to rate it in the first quarter, I would want to give it a 5, but now I can only give a 2. The setting of this article is quite interesting, the protagonist setting is also very likable, the plot at the beginning is interesting, and the overall plot is quite enjoyable. But the more you look at it, the more obvious the shortcomings become. First of all, the author doesn't know what to choose. It can be seen that the author has carefully conceived the plot and lyrics of the article, so he wants to squeeze everything into the article without missing a beat. The result is a poor viewing experience. There is often a long section of the plot that is purely text-within-a-play, which neither advances the plot nor shows the audience's evaluation of the show or the character's performance. I'm here to read articles about the entertainment industry. If I'm interested in the subject matter of a drama within an article, I'll look for it myself. Can you please stop me reading articles on other subjects here? Moreover, the play-within-a-story is not very good. The protagonist's first play has the theme of rebirth, and the rebirth is actually placed in the middle of the plot. It feels like creating a reversal for the sake of creating a reversal. The same goes for the lyrics. Most of the lyrics were thrown into the main text at once, and I don't know why there is a space between each lyric. If you want to write lyrics when writing for the stage, don't put the entire lyrics directly. Instead, describe the character's actions + stage design + the character's psychology and mix in a few important lyrics. If you really can't let go of the lyrics, you can put the full version into the text, but it costs money to put it into the text. I just skipped it. The lyrics without the melody look very awkward and make me laugh out loud. I basically didn't read the comments when I was reading the article. I saw an explanation in the last chapter of the text but not in the hydrology. It must be that other readers have questioned this issue. I think the author is indeed not subjective, but this is really a problem. I hope the author will improve it. I can't just let readers who can accept it continue to read and leave if they can't. What's the difference between that and a traffic star? Second, in the later stage, I felt that the portrayal of the protagonist's "dedication" was a bit too strong. When I saw the protagonist insisting on performing on stage even though he was in shock and needing oxygen, I was really dramatic. In other entertainment industry articles, the most difficult way to portray a character who is dedicated is to sprain his leg/scratches/fall but insist on performing. However, in that part of the plot, I didn't feel that the protagonist was dedicated. I just felt that he really didn't care about his body at all, and felt that he had no ability to judge his own physical condition. The third point is, I don't quite understand why a plot in which the protagonist is confessed by someone else is inserted in the middle. After thinking about it, I feel that it has no purpose other than to fit the label of being a heartthrob. Finally, there is the issue of plot proportion. The draft part takes up too much, with 72 chapters out of 160 in the main text. If this is an article focusing on auditions, then there is no problem, but this is an acting article, with 160 chapters, the beginning of the first 15 chapters + shooting the first play, 72 chapters of the draft, and 9 chapters of the stage play rewards from the draft, leaving only 59 chapters to write and shoot other scenes + being exposed and clarified + becoming more popular + winning awards, and there are also a lot of dramas within the article, which seems unreasonable when you think about it. Moreover, the best part of the entertainment industry articles lies in the fights between fans and the audience's reaction. Slapping and being slapped in the face are the most interesting parts. However, there are some in this article during the draft period, and basically none after that. The ending is also extremely rushed. It doesn't matter. To be honest, I only subscribed because I wanted to rate this article. Please finish it as soon as possible. I feel sorry for my money.

Finished with flowers~ The subject matter and setting are interesting, refreshing, and aroused some interest. It starts high and moves forward, and the rhythm at the beginning is okay. However, the length of the rest of the story is a bit short, which should not be cut. According to your outline, it is no problem to make it a long story. When it comes to entertainment articles, lyrics are one aspect (you can try to put the lyrics as words), but more should be highlighted: the feeling of pleasure. For me, the sense of satisfaction is the drama within the drama, the forum, the audience's feedback, the admiration and praise for the protagonist, and the portrayal of the scene. Instead of lyrics (it's boring, why write so many) In addition, when reading online articles, you should pay attention to the layout - there are many long paragraphs, which are boring and tiring to read. You can see that my comments are divided into paragraphs for each point. Unfortunately, JJ does not display blank lines. But even so, long reviews are divided into sections to make them look simpler, right? The achievements of the protagonist, such as the Best Actor, can actually describe the plot and reversal of the drama within the drama. In addition, there are some places where the author's own thoughts are obviously inserted. Be careful not to preach to the audience in the work. Use your characters and plot to hint at your opinions instead of stating them directly. Overall, the biggest problem is the pacing. There are some long comments in the comment area, but I think their expressions are a bit messy and may not be professional. For this part, you might want to find yourself an editor or teacher to write it down. But you still have thousands of collections with such a bad rhythm, and I read all the comments in the comment area, which proves that you still have some work and strength, what do you think? Because it is a completely bad article, I will not read it in full, let alone be in the mood to comment. It is precisely because it is good but not good enough that it arouses some interest in readers (as you said, disgust and yearning are one and the same, and criticism is precisely because there have been parts that you like and parts that you don't like that will be criticized). I think this means that you have a lot of money. Come on!

After reading the whole article, I felt that it was finished in a hurry. I feel that the line with the actor could be expanded a little more, and then more activities, live broadcasts, variety shows, etc. All go by very quickly. I feel that this article is very simple, and there are many things that can be written in detail. The writing is still very smooth, but it is a pity that it is still too simple.

A director's novel that I followed next door requires more than ten chapters to make a movie or TV series, but here I can make several movies in one chapter 🐶

This way of playing... Is quite unhealthy. The sequelae are terrible

The rhythm is very chaotic, and the more you watch, the more chaotic it becomes. My feeling is the same as many reviews. Full booking really makes you feel sorry for your money. In many chapters, it feels like the author is just enjoying himself, without considering how the readers will read it. It is really tiring to read. The separation between the first half and the second half of this book is extremely serious. It can be said that when reading the second half, the expectations accumulated in the first half are consumed bit by bit, so that you can stick to it until the last chapter.

Ah, is this the end?

I'm going to become a CP fan. I know it's fake, but it's so exciting 🤩

Very idealistic protagonist and utopian entertainment circle ~ but I like it very much🥰