The Abyssal Dragon Is a Total Sweet-Talker

Pure gold shouldn't be soft. That's why people take a bite when identifying gold coins.

Hahahahahaha, I thought I would hold him and coax him when I found him wanting to cry, but in the end I punched him and knocked him out (?ω?)Hiahiahia

I've finished reading, Spreading Flowers ~ But I don't know if I missed it or what, what is Li Fu's identity?

Give it a try, there are no more places to save it.

First of all, thank you very much. This article has good ideas and a good experience. After reading it, I probably know why the number of favorites of this article is not very high. This is just my personal opinion. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. One logic. A. If you want to be a good article, first of all, the logic must be strict, interlocking, and the logic must be deep. The author's logic is not rigorous enough. For example, Li Fuyi's motivations in the article, what Shen Shen said before about being in Haiyang, and how easy it was for Liu Liu to die, what is Shen Shen's so-called undercover agent, and the plot of Little Rabbit and Yin Bai was just to give away that necklace? If Silence is treated like this, why do you want to save the world? (Because I ran out of money, I didn't buy the Wise Man episode. If what I'm talking about is in the Wise Man episode, I'm sorry.) Many things are not explained clearly. They are neither pointed out implicitly in the previous article nor hinted in the later article. The whole article feels a bit groundless. And I also think that in an article, he needs to round out this logic in the main text. In the main text, readers can understand the reasons and motivations of what the characters do (this is very important. A good article must let readers know the reasons for what the characters do so that they can complete the logic) or vaguely guess, instead of There are piles of descriptions in the extra chapter, which are procrastinating and cumbersome. This will make people feel that they have finished reading, but the logic is not perfect. Besides, there is actually a big contradiction in this. The Lord of the Abyss, the Lord of Alien Species, the Law of the World, and the Wise Man. This kind of role is really very, very grand, but the place where their activities are described by the author is too small. What a Northern sect. Such big figures as Xuecunsuoshan and Haiyang are only limited to these few small places. There is not even a world perspective or a planetary perspective here. This is typical. After watching it, you just feel that you can't imagine that they are on a big planet in the world. It just feels like they are just wandering around in a province or even less than a city. The entire story is completed there. The character design is too big but the focus of the conflicts is too small. It is difficult for readers to get involved in the drama and experience that feeling. If the author has seen Little Mushroom, he will understand this feeling better, because Little Mushroom's theme is to save the earth, and it rises to the entire earth, to the entire human race, and to the whole world. But I think the author's writing has not risen to this level. It is just limited to the struggle between these characters. It is obviously about saving the world. Let alone ordinary people, even except for the protagonists, there are not many people who can participate in the whole incident and break away from the masses. If the author has read other world-saving genres with such a big theme, you will find that the masses (multiple supporting characters, multiple locations) are very important. This is not a one-man show by a strong man, but the truth and love of many people saving the world. In short, a big identity requires a big place to do big things, and a high class requires a corresponding class environment. The protagonist is the lord of a country, and you need to rise to the perspective of the country. The protagonist is the god of the planet. You need to rise to the perspective of the planet. The protagonist is the god of the world. He can rise to the perspective of the world. It can be abbreviated, but it cannot be absent or rough. I found that the author's steganography is also quite problematic. It's the author's steganography that gave me a feeling of no beginning or end. There are some parts that the author didn't want to write too obviously, but he didn't explain it clearly enough. The so-called lack of control over the details caused a kind of discontinuity in the plot, which made it easier to disconnect the logic. I was confused when I read it, and I felt like it was hard to tell what the author really wanted to express before and after reading this kind of steganography. This is a bit superfluous. If the author's writing style is not yet complete, it is recommended that the plot and characters be refined. As for the writing methods and steganography, you can read some Infinite Flow to ponder it and make the whole text smoother. Second, about the characters. It can probably be seen that the author wants to write a group article. This is indeed a group article. Not to mention the protagonist, Xia Wenqing, Xia Wenqing and the silver-white rabbit, it feels like they have been written with flesh and blood by the author. From the plot, we can get a glimpse of their characters and experiences. This group is really well written. However, the author can add a little action and demeanor to some group characters, or profile descriptions spoken by others, rather than just verbal expressions. For example, Ye Bai helped the little rabbit go to the city of death. In one sentence of the article, he said a few words in the little rabbit's ear, explained it, and then it was finished. But the author You can handle this detail better, for example, describe the dangers of the Death City in a few sentences, and then write about the little rabbit's hand (clenching it), his eyes, his expression, whether he paused, and Ye Bai's reaction to him and her thoughts. In just one or two hundred words, you can completely describe the little rabbit's love for Silver. Bai Zhiqing's writing is profound and touching, and the experience on the road to death should be more focused on describing the little rabbit's psychology, his confusion and fear, but not giving up, and his relaxation at that time, crying in surprise (crying is not a big cry, you can write that his tears have dropped, and his mood should never be the same) Adjectives are used instead of verbs or psychology. Actions and psychology can best express a person's character), coupled with silvery tenderness (wiping tears, gazing at and rubbing fur), a pair of gentle and touchable CPs appear on the paper. This group portrait only needs a few more strokes to become plump and perfect. Therefore, I think the author of group portraits needs two more strokes, trying to use the simplest language for each character and giving them the fullest flesh and blood. Above the three emotions. In fact, it is similar to the group elephant above. There is emotion between attack and feeling, and it lasts for a long time. But as mentioned, the author's description of the characters' movements and demeanor is not enough, so the relationship between the attacker and the subject is not very deep, that is, there is no very affectionate feeling between the attacker and the subject. Especially Shou's feelings towards Gong, there are some, but I think the description of Shou is a little less. His feelings are not obvious in the description. Just like the sentence in the article about Shou's heart, "The person he likes should be very happy" is very well written. It describes the beginning of Shou's emotions in one sentence. But in the snow village and Haiyang of Suoshan, apart from the plot, this should be the best advancement of the relationship between Shou and Shou. But I feel that the author's writing of the quantitative to qualitative changes in their emotions is not good enough. In these parts, I feel that they do not have bright sparks and are too bland. For example, if you write about spending the night at your friend's house, you can write about the sunset in that place or the starry sky in that place. They need a romantic or quiet place to communicate their feelings. For example, when Jae Gong sees this small wooden house and the sunset, he will feel sad. He will wonder what the days were like before silence. Will he be in pain and despair? He will feel depressed, he will hesitate, care, and want to ask about what happened before the silence. His expression will be unnatural. But after he notices it, or you write that he doesn't notice it, he is just looking at that home, and then he slowly talks about it, adding a pause, unfinished words, expression, and Ye Bai's reaction, and adding a sentence to express his inner feelings. At the end, write about them being close to their heartbeats, the last turn of the camera, and describe in one sentence how beautiful the sunset is. A perfect artistic conception and a beautiful spiritual communication are completed. From that moment on, the feelings of attack and pain can get a qualitative improvement. It is logical that their feelings become deeper and deeper, sincere and touching. All in all, the imaginative world view setting of this article is very good, but the writing style still needs work. I hope the author can write more and better works ヾ(????)???~ This is just my personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it ヾ(????)???~

Surface: The dragon of the abyss wants to destroy mankind Inside: He is a stupid dragon cub with a beautiful heart and a kind heart.

Rabbit: bear the unbearable weight of life (suffocation)

Nothing is explained, the author's logic is not tight

Shen Mo has high blood pressure at a young age

I still quite like this kind of humorous and plot-driven writing. The author writes it very interestingly ^_^