I didn't go to class again. I was so frustrated that I stopped mentioning it. I haven't written for many days, so I will write one for this post.
Let me first talk about my acquaintance with this article...
From here I found Lele, we are just two people who said a few words on the Internet many years ago. I was very touched when I saw you saying that you thought about it later.
Because I had just started reading this article, I read it every day during those days at home. Slowly going to school, it became a lot emptier. When I came back, I just glanced at it in a hurry. There are highlights and flaws, let me explain them one by one.
Undoubtedly, this article brings up old things and greatly subverts the direction of the story in "Water Margin", which is a good starting point. However, the beginning is not exciting and makes people feel a bit vain. It suddenly makes the entire article fall into a pit where it is impossible to become a classic, but it does not prevent continued reading.
In the initial portrayal, Pei Jin did not expect that he would be the person entrusted by Pan Yu. I guess Lele temporarily handed over the heavy responsibility to him after seeing that everyone thought that Pan Yu would marry Wu Zhi even after going through all kinds of hardships and even being humiliated. If this is not the case, then the portrayal of Pei Jin at the beginning is too simple, not three-dimensional enough, and the space is too small. Admittedly, laying the groundwork so that no one is aware of it can be called... How to use that idiom, I am increasingly forgetful. I'm sad.. I'm really sad.. I hate my useless self now.
Moving on, the foreshadowing has another very significant feature, that is, no one would have thought of it at first, but when the mystery is revealed, the viewers will suddenly realize that if they fail to do this, they have failed.
Furthermore, I personally think that some characters are not distinct enough. For example, there is not much difference between Pan Yu's parents and Pei Jin's parents. Even though they are both good people and are doing their best for their children, their characters should be more thoughtfully portrayed, and even supporting characters should be treated with caution. (This reminds me of what I saw on the forum a few days ago. Someone said that the eight pieces of crabs in the first episode of the 1987 version of Red Mansions were made by Wang Fulin and many people on the production team after asking experts to restore the history. It is understandable how difficult it is. But even under such circumstances, only the eight pieces of crabs in the first episode were used. After just a few minutes, I no longer felt nostalgic, and I wanted to take it out to support the table, so my mother and I discussed it. I said that very few TV people nowadays can do this, spare no effort to portray everything, but never miss it because of their so-called hard work.)
Furthermore, everyone has a heroic dream. Whatever the heroine likes (or is related to) must be talented. Let's talk about Wu Zhi first, who is handsome and good at martial arts and honest; then Zhao Huan, needless to say his identity, also made a fake imperial edict; then Pei Jin, who was originally a weak scholar, suddenly became a master because of his relationship with Pan Yu, and started to benefit the people, and naturally there was a reason for Ximen Qing to use his fists. However, if the article is to be good, the characters in the article must come alive and have their own lives. The less the author manipulates, the more successful the article will be (I am also a mess on this), but I would like to give Lele some advice, this must be grasped well. I know Lele has opened a new pit, so I look forward to your breakthrough.
The writing is great, but the plot is too simple and seems hollow, making it feel like reading a comic book.
I want to say that even ancient literature must be combined with modern life rules. Many things have changed. This article later gave me a very unrealistic feeling, just like watching some Chinese cartoons. It can talk about the past, but it is not profound enough. It makes people unable to feel the breath of life - it is the sense of reality. For example, the ending is rushed on one side and ethereal on the other. In fact, they have faced too much and experienced too much. Regardless of whether they can be together, their mentality will also change. It's not that we no longer love each other, but we can be together in this world without falling in love. Sometimes human psychology is so awkward and terrifying that bystanders may think it's nothing, but only those involved can appreciate the helplessness involved.
I've said a lot of things like that, but I actually can't see myself clearly. Sometimes my goals are too big. What I wrote one day feels good, but the next day I can't stand it.
Let's talk about the highlights in a relaxed and cheerful way——
I mentioned it just now, and it's a good footing. Moreover, Lele's articles have always been very graphic and the writing style is concise and appropriate.
Moreover, as long as a trap is opened, it will always stick to it. This is a trap. It's worth bowing down to learn…
I have also read Lele's "Li Ke". Compared with "Li Ji", this film has improved both in terms of plot and writing style. This is the most gratifying thing. Looking at Lele's two articles, we can see that this is a very kind person and even has a little fantasy. While he longs for true love, he also doubts his own fantasy. But the article still satisfied myself. . . I believe that you will be complete in the end. I said that I will wait for you to tell me that you are XXXXXX.
Finally, I would like to mention something. People are like this, and most people don't like others. Therefore, when you are not a VIP, no one will say anything. Once you become a VIP, some people will jump out and say that it is not worthy of such a level, such a bad writing, such a stupid protagonist, and such an unexciting plot. Go back and take a good look in the mirror. . I just saw that in Lele's other articles, some readers said below, I know you must be sad, after all, this is a story created by myself, but we can't ask others to do anything. You just need to remember that some of people's behaviors can be forgiven intellectually, and don't bother with them. If what is said is correct, listen; if what is said is incorrect, ignore it. Calm down, what most people say is just some psychology at work, and there is not much malice. And, there are so many people who support you.
Did you see my title?
Do you still remember the dream you had when you were young?
Like a flower that never fades
Accompany me through the wind and rain
Look at the impermanence of things and the vicissitudes of life
The price paid for love
It's something I'll never forget
All sincere and infatuated words
Always in my heart, even though he is no longer there
Let's go, let's go
People always have to learn to grow up on their own
Let's go, let's go
I really like listening to this song recently. We are all the same, we stick to what we like. As long as you persist, you will never be poor.
To Lele, my most critical piece, and to Sylvia Chang's "The Price of Love".
How can it be so easy to give birth to a child who comes out feet first?
Uh... What, the ending was too hasty, I felt like it was anticlimactic...
Congratulations on finishing it. Overall, this is a good and innovative article.
Han, this is so embarrassing!!
The author wouldn't tremble in his hands and allocate Pan Yu to Wang Bo in the last chapter.
What kind of writing is this?
Xiao Yang died like this? Are you still cheating?
Congratulations, good looking, good luck
Sprinkle flowers~spread flowers~~!!!
Well written, although the writing style is a bit immature and some parts are not very reasonable, but overall it is a good article!!
Keep up the good work!!!
Bye, after the update, I will insert it again. Haha, sofa
Embarrassing... I was disconnected from the Internet for N days, and as soon as I climbed up, I saw that this story has developed to this point...
How should I put it, Pei Jin's ending was not unexpected, Ximen Qing... Didn't expect there would be a good ending, but he didn't expect it to happen so soon. Even if he didn't die this time, he might not end well if he practiced that evil skill.
But Pan Yu was really in trouble, so he couldn't live a peaceful life for a few days. Next, it's time for the original male protagonist, Wu Zhi, to appear.
Ximen Qing will not die like this. Li Ping'er is indeed not a good person. He has long disliked her.
I didn't go to class again. I was so frustrated that I stopped mentioning it. I haven't written for many days, so I will write one for this post. Let me first talk about my acquaintance with this article... From here I found Lele, we are just two people who said a few words on the Internet many years ago. I was very touched when I saw you saying that you thought about it later. Because I had just started reading this article, I read it every day during those days at home. Slowly going to school, it became a lot emptier. When I came back, I just glanced at it in a hurry. There are highlights and flaws, let me explain them one by one. Undoubtedly, this article brings up old things and greatly subverts the direction of the story in "Water Margin", which is a good starting point. However, the beginning is not exciting and makes people feel a bit vain. It suddenly makes the entire article fall into a pit where it is impossible to become a classic, but it does not prevent continued reading. In the initial portrayal, Pei Jin did not expect that he would be the person entrusted by Pan Yu. I guess Lele temporarily handed over the heavy responsibility to him after seeing that everyone thought that Pan Yu would marry Wu Zhi even after going through all kinds of hardships and even being humiliated. If this is not the case, then the portrayal of Pei Jin at the beginning is too simple, not three-dimensional enough, and the space is too small. Admittedly, laying the groundwork so that no one is aware of it can be called... How to use that idiom, I am increasingly forgetful. I'm sad.. I'm really sad.. I hate my useless self now. Moving on, the foreshadowing has another very significant feature, that is, no one would have thought of it at first, but when the mystery is revealed, the viewers will suddenly realize that if they fail to do this, they have failed. Furthermore, I personally think that some characters are not distinct enough. For example, there is not much difference between Pan Yu's parents and Pei Jin's parents. Even though they are both good people and are doing their best for their children, their characters should be more thoughtfully portrayed, and even supporting characters should be treated with caution. (This reminds me of what I saw on the forum a few days ago. Someone said that the eight pieces of crabs in the first episode of the 1987 version of Red Mansions were made by Wang Fulin and many people on the production team after asking experts to restore the history. It is understandable how difficult it is. But even under such circumstances, only the eight pieces of crabs in the first episode were used. After just a few minutes, I no longer felt nostalgic, and I wanted to take it out to support the table, so my mother and I discussed it. I said that very few TV people nowadays can do this, spare no effort to portray everything, but never miss it because of their so-called hard work.) Furthermore, everyone has a heroic dream. Whatever the heroine likes (or is related to) must be talented. Let's talk about Wu Zhi first, who is handsome and good at martial arts and honest; then Zhao Huan, needless to say his identity, also made a fake imperial edict; then Pei Jin, who was originally a weak scholar, suddenly became a master because of his relationship with Pan Yu, and started to benefit the people, and naturally there was a reason for Ximen Qing to use his fists. However, if the article is to be good, the characters in the article must come alive and have their own lives. The less the author manipulates, the more successful the article will be (I am also a mess on this), but I would like to give Lele some advice, this must be grasped well. I know Lele has opened a new pit, so I look forward to your breakthrough. The writing is great, but the plot is too simple and seems hollow, making it feel like reading a comic book. I want to say that even ancient literature must be combined with modern life rules. Many things have changed. This article later gave me a very unrealistic feeling, just like watching some Chinese cartoons. It can talk about the past, but it is not profound enough. It makes people unable to feel the breath of life - it is the sense of reality. For example, the ending is rushed on one side and ethereal on the other. In fact, they have faced too much and experienced too much. Regardless of whether they can be together, their mentality will also change. It's not that we no longer love each other, but we can be together in this world without falling in love. Sometimes human psychology is so awkward and terrifying that bystanders may think it's nothing, but only those involved can appreciate the helplessness involved. I've said a lot of things like that, but I actually can't see myself clearly. Sometimes my goals are too big. What I wrote one day feels good, but the next day I can't stand it. Let's talk about the highlights in a relaxed and cheerful way—— I mentioned it just now, and it's a good footing. Moreover, Lele's articles have always been very graphic and the writing style is concise and appropriate. Moreover, as long as a trap is opened, it will always stick to it. This is a trap. It's worth bowing down to learn… I have also read Lele's "Li Ke". Compared with "Li Ji", this film has improved both in terms of plot and writing style. This is the most gratifying thing. Looking at Lele's two articles, we can see that this is a very kind person and even has a little fantasy. While he longs for true love, he also doubts his own fantasy. But the article still satisfied myself. . . I believe that you will be complete in the end. I said that I will wait for you to tell me that you are XXXXXX. Finally, I would like to mention something. People are like this, and most people don't like others. Therefore, when you are not a VIP, no one will say anything. Once you become a VIP, some people will jump out and say that it is not worthy of such a level, such a bad writing, such a stupid protagonist, and such an unexciting plot. Go back and take a good look in the mirror. . I just saw that in Lele's other articles, some readers said below, I know you must be sad, after all, this is a story created by myself, but we can't ask others to do anything. You just need to remember that some of people's behaviors can be forgiven intellectually, and don't bother with them. If what is said is correct, listen; if what is said is incorrect, ignore it. Calm down, what most people say is just some psychology at work, and there is not much malice. And, there are so many people who support you. Did you see my title? Do you still remember the dream you had when you were young? Like a flower that never fades Accompany me through the wind and rain Look at the impermanence of things and the vicissitudes of life The price paid for love It's something I'll never forget All sincere and infatuated words Always in my heart, even though he is no longer there Let's go, let's go People always have to learn to grow up on their own Let's go, let's go I really like listening to this song recently. We are all the same, we stick to what we like. As long as you persist, you will never be poor. To Lele, my most critical piece, and to Sylvia Chang's "The Price of Love".
How can it be so easy to give birth to a child who comes out feet first?
Uh... What, the ending was too hasty, I felt like it was anticlimactic... Congratulations on finishing it. Overall, this is a good and innovative article.
Han, this is so embarrassing!! The author wouldn't tremble in his hands and allocate Pan Yu to Wang Bo in the last chapter.
What kind of writing is this? Xiao Yang died like this? Are you still cheating?
Congratulations, good looking, good luck
Sprinkle flowers~spread flowers~~!!! Well written, although the writing style is a bit immature and some parts are not very reasonable, but overall it is a good article!! Keep up the good work!!!
Bye, after the update, I will insert it again. Haha, sofa
Embarrassing... I was disconnected from the Internet for N days, and as soon as I climbed up, I saw that this story has developed to this point... How should I put it, Pei Jin's ending was not unexpected, Ximen Qing... Didn't expect there would be a good ending, but he didn't expect it to happen so soon. Even if he didn't die this time, he might not end well if he practiced that evil skill. But Pan Yu was really in trouble, so he couldn't live a peaceful life for a few days. Next, it's time for the original male protagonist, Wu Zhi, to appear.
Ximen Qing will not die like this. Li Ping'er is indeed not a good person. He has long disliked her.