Guo Zixin ate his ice cream and said, “This isn’t fun. You’re imagining things again.”
I was mortified, but had no words to argue with him.
Tang Heng looked me in the eye and said, “Are you coming with me or not? If you don’t, I’ve got other people.”
I was anxious, but I didn’t know whether he’d still have someone else if I went with him.
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Title of work: Three rooms and one living room without ambiguity Author name: Yishi Article address: □//www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=627471 Article type: Now ~ BG Floor: 9L Reviewer: Dahe Zijin Review: Holding the Moon Score: 1 point Ambiguous history of strangulation First of all, at the beginning of the review, I have something to say with emotion. I have not seen such an honest author for a long time. It is called "Three Rooms and One Hall without Ambiguity". The article is really free of ambiguity. Any small seedlings of ambiguity will be immediately killed and quick-frozen. If you want to blush and heartbeat, you will have to look elsewhere. Until ambiguity has become the eternal aria for the readers of this article. It is so difficult to be ambiguous! The subject matter of this article is actually the best hotbed of ambiguity. Two men and one woman live under the same roof. The first man may seem to be a playboy but is actually timid in love. The second man may seem gentle but is actually emotionally distant and alienated from women. In addition, there is also a heroine who although looks tough and chic, has always been unable to let go of the first man. Such a combination really has the potential for ambiguity. Unfortunately, this potential has become a thing of the past due to the author's stranglehold. The three sides of the triangle are already present, but unfortunately they still cannot be connected to form a complete triangle. There is a subtle distance that makes people feel frustrated. The full text is less than 70,000 words, and the story has already come to an end. To what extent can such a space add a love triangle narrative? Can you give readers a complete story? The author is curious, not only about the content of this story, but also about the reason why this story is so short. At the beginning, the author said that this article lacks ambiguity, and the reason why the ambiguity is stifled is actually very simple. The author's detailed work is not done well. To make a romantic text moving, it is natural that the word "love" cannot be separated. How to express this word "love" well is the key. As for the author's literary character, although the male lead is loose, carefree and childish, his awkwardness and vulnerability are also the weaknesses of many female readers. The second male lead is gentle and elegant. Although he has the shadow of another woman in his heart, it is rare that he can overcome himself and love again. The images of the two male protagonists written by the author are not thin. In terms of shaping, they can be considered to be the type that readers can like. They have remarkable cuteness or highlights. However, due to the weak details, the characters are not thin, but the emotional image is very thin. It's not that the man and the heroine don't love each other, but they don't dare to love. Such a contradictory feeling is written to the essence, which makes readers want to die following the author's writing. However, the author allows such a man to perform a living room love action scene at the beginning. It is really an impactful scene, but after this However, the first male protagonist has always maintained a state of being independent from the heroine's life. In fact, the first male protagonist has been absent for a large part of the story, and the author is not willing to spend some words on him in this limited playing time. This also makes the author helpless. I want to be ambiguous but there is no space and time for him to develop. However, in the second half of the story, he suddenly became more energetic and poured out all his past childhood memories and feelings for the heroine, thus changing his image as a playboy and becoming an innocent little lamb. It's a pity that the wolf's skin was so impeccable that even if the wool was exposed, I still think it is still a wolf. Maybe the author should occasionally let him make some "bleating" noises accidentally or show his little horns at the right time? The second male lead had a woman in his heart, but he got out of that relationship bit by bit while getting along with the female protagonist, and tried to open his heart again. This kind of plot is time-consuming and laborious at first glance, so the author silently reviewed the plot. What impressed me most was the elegant man carrying a computer bag and the light dialogue... So the author realized the reason for the length of this article. Apart from the semi-open ending of the suspected eunuch, the remaining reason is the lack of details. The concept of this article is actually considered complete, and the character creation has become more mature. However, due to the lack of details, the article has always seemed to be insufficiently emotional. As a result, the original ambiguous potential of the article cannot be released, and the effect that the character setting should bring is minimal. The author thinks that the author may be able to expand the plot appropriately and not end it hastily. At the same time, he can describe more details such as expressions, movements, eyes, etc. When writing, and further divide the emotional levels of the article more clearly, which may make it easier for people to understand the bond between the characters in the article. The above is just one family's opinion and is for discussion only.
Um, that's it? I'm still not finished!
I think this ending is the best!
Yishi~~Updated really quickly! Sure enough, pressure is motivation!!! The ending is a bit hazy, but haziness is the beauty of writing~ Come on! I also updated after that day~Stress is indeed a good thing~
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It seems that Mao Zedong or someone once said: Love without marriage is a hooliganism. I think this makes sense. In this case, the relationship between men and women that is not for the purpose of love... Becomes even more unbearable. Such a man is extremely selfish and irresponsible. There is no value in even being friends. No matter how attractive this kind of man is, you should still stay away from him.
Yishi... You haven't updated your article for a long time... Do you know that giving up is a very bad habit... Did something happen that made me not in the mood to write? Recently, I finished my make-up classes during the summer vacation before my senior year. Well, my senior year of high school, which I avoided and resisted, has just come. It feels so annoying. I don't like the classroom of my senior year, I don't like the extremely cold air conditioner in my senior year, and I hate the numerous mosquitoes there... But life still goes on like this... Remember to reply when you see it, there is someone waiting in your pit!!! ^^
I feel very awkward. To be honest, I experienced a big event today, at least for me, it was very affecting. Looking at classmate Guo's family, I feel more and more that this society is too... Last night, or rather early this morning, a pervert actually entered our school and ransacked our class. Finally, he provocatively left a line of words on the blackboard and posed for the camera... I was the fool who forgot to lock the door, and I felt very uncomfortable. The notes that some people had summarized for a long time were also given to me by that hateful guy... It's so sad... I feel so blocked... You shouldn't say this, you should say "Come on! Come on!" !
Phew~ I finally waited for the update~~~Happy!!! I feel more and more who will Xiao Yu end up with in the end? It's confusing, confusing… and difficult…
^^It's good to be back~~ Why do I feel after reading this chapter... Xiao Yu, the soft persimmon, has been pinched again... These three people are so entangled, one only knows how to avoid, one waits with a wounded heart, and the other... Hesitant and can't understand himself... Oops, what will happen... Suddenly I imagined reading the ending first and then continuing like I did when reading novels, although I know it's impossible... That way will not make me fall in love with the character who failed in the end... Come on!!!