An Autumn Fairy Tale

The writing is pretty good, and the emotional lines are great! However, I feel that the personality of the characters in the back is a little different from the previous ones (it's just a little abrupt when I read the article, and it doesn't feel connected with the image in the previous article), but the rest is great!!!

Speaking of which, if possible, would you write Keanu's novel? My favorite Keanu!!!

Woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo... !!! I remember that I knocked on CP...

The first point is of course to finish the flowers. There is a saying that when I came back from military training and saw the ending of this article, I was very shocked. At first, I thought it was a novella. Of course, this also has something to do with the hard-working daily update of 10,000 people. It's no problem for me to give it 5 stars due to the great sincerity and praise! After reading the whole article, the story line is actually very clear. This is the love story of a man and a woman who are not young anymore in the mainstream novels, can be said to be no longer young in reality, and can be said to be even less young in the entertainment industry. In my eyes as a reader, the intention is not to miss out, cherish what is in front of you, and work hard. I don't need to talk about the great advantages. Everyone can see that the descriptions are very vivid. Some of the descriptions and wordings from some angles are beyond my imagination. Because of the detailed descriptions, we can easily imagine the scenes in the book. However, there are also shortcomings. The first is rhythm. Because the description is too lengthy, the pace is slow. I agree that DaDa's chapter arrangement is reasonable. After reading this novel, I roughly understood the story line arranged by DaDa, and it is true that about 21 chapters are enough. But taking a look at one page, descriptions account for almost 2/3, which makes readers tired of reading. It is too lengthy, and there are too many descriptions that you don't need to read. Whether it is psychological description or physical description, for example, the heroine's thoughts when facing the pursuit of the hero, those complex jumps of psychology, and changing attitudes. Many of them can be deleted in one paragraph. Only some iconic and tangled words need to be left, such as the contradiction that they are most concerned about. This requires a choice. It's not that everyone doesn't like to read Ten Thousand Words chapters, but for most readers, what they want to read is the dramatic development of the plot. In many cases, they don't pay much attention to the psychology and appearance of the characters. The second point is style. Because at the same time, the article about the entertainment industry, the previous article was about Meiyu, and this article is about China Entertainment. Although this article has nothing to do with the entertainment industry, there is one thing that I think we should pay attention to, which is the style of language. I can see that Dadao is trying his best to describe the article in different styles. In fact, the lengthy description is one aspect. In the early stage, I saw Daduan's description, and I already had a hunch that Daduan's style has not changed. In Western literature, especially in movies, Daduan's gorgeous Western-colored words can make people feel more atmospheric. However, the descriptions used by Dadu in the previous article can be said to be much smaller than this one. I pressed Judging from the reading experience, this should also be the reason for the lack of plot line arrangement. The content of the previous article has the richness and content of the movie, but this one is a short and sweet love, a journey, and there are not many ups and downs. This is not to say that there are no ups and downs. Although the ups and downs are not large, you can use emotions to move people's hearts, but the intensity of emotions does not necessarily require blockbuster descriptions. These aspects are interoperable. Generally speaking, when reading novels, 1/3 of a paragraph on the mobile phone reading panel is the most acceptable length, not counting some special needs. Finally, there are actually some opinions. For example, I have been writing that the male and female protagonists are very beautiful. In fact, I think this does not need to be mentioned later, because many things can be highlighted by other reactions. For example, in the part about famous actors, I think it can be expressed simply with the Chinese style "every frown and every smile is amorous feelings." Compared with the whole article, my favorite part is actually the dialogue between the characters. So the next step is my suggestion. If you want to overhaul the text, I think you can first sort out the plot development line in general, consider the important relationships before and after, and then delete and modify the description to highlight what should be highlighted. The number of words in each chapter can be controlled to about 3,000 or even 2,000 words. In fact, this is already very long. Finally, I wish you write better and better, with full enthusiasm. Love the big Xianxi (Bali Chang'an)

After reading it, let me rationalize it. I will start writing at 7 o'clock. It should be out today. There may be both praise and criticism. Don't be unhappy when you see criticism that I feel is insufficient.

??? It's over. I just came back from military training. If you don't mind, I'll finish it and write a long review.

It's over, spread the flowers, it's great, great, great

Congratulations on the completion. It looks great.

The exam is over. The exam is over. Start the catch-up mode o(*≧▽≦)ツ ~ ┴┴

Piu flew over in no time