Junior Brother, I Suggest You Be Kind

The ending came unexpectedly

This car drives so well

Selling your waist, Xiaoxiao is a professional

It's still our Ye Xiaosao who is cool

Suddenly everyone started tearing off their vests regardless of themselves?

It looks good, but there are no extras

I was attracted by the copywriting. The novel is not long, more than 100,000 words. The writing was pretty good in the early stages, but as you get to the end, you feel that the author is a little out of his depth? The character traits are relatively straightforward and quite distinctive, but aren't they a bit too straightforward? People are naturally complicated, but Ye's subsequent transformation makes people feel really embarrassed. The later language descriptions are obviously not as good as before. There are too many positive descriptions of Ye's psychology. The ending was also very rushed. After reading the next few chapters, I thought: That's it? That's it?

I would like to share my overall thoughts on this article. First of all, I was attracted by the copywriting, it is my favorite type. Secondly, the author spent a lot of effort on character setting, psychological description, and plot foreshadowing. Although the novel about cultivating immortals in the next year has always been an old joke, the author has written new ideas. One thing I particularly like is the detailed description of the author's psychological journey and memories. This made me full of curiosity in the early stages of reading the article, and it was hazy and interesting. As a short article, it is really good. It constructs a world view in a small amount of space, and you can see the author's writing style. Let me talk about a point that I think has the opportunity to be improved. In the last few chapters of the article, the language description of Shou seems lengthy. In fact, readers are more willing to enhance the sense of reading through a small amount of direct description and an appropriate amount of side effects, especially the detailed description of the story. It is precisely the lack of this that makes the world view of the article not diverse enough. In terms of the hatred between humans and demons, especially the ending of the story caused by a single person, it seems not generous enough. The ending is a bit rushed. In fact, the author's shaping of Gong in the early stage is very good. If the expressiveness is properly enhanced and the character of Shou is enriched later, the readers will actually be more inclined to the protagonist's world view when reading the article, and will be more inclined to love and hate, instead of blindly giving and eventually regretting what he has done. The author lacks the experience to create a character who has a sense of responsibility and manages love reasonably. Of course, this is just my personal opinion. The overall setting of the article is very interesting. The author has great potential. I look forward to more excellent works from the author. By the way, the imprisoned play is very exciting hehehe, and there is no doubt that attacking the little wolfdog is not a scumbag at all. This article avoids most of my red flags, like?

Extremely beautiful! I really love it when I challenge Jin from time to time!

It's over, let's spread the flowers