Keeper of the Netherworld

I remember reading Biluo Zhuan when I was a kid. I read it again after I went to college. I really like the author's writing style. Wuhu

I have always loved reading fantasy, and I admire authors who write fantasy. It is not easy to create a complete worldview, and it is even more difficult to create a vivid and rich one. It can be seen from the general preface written before the first chapter that the author spent a lot of thought on setting up the framework of this world. However, if you skip the introduction and go directly to the main text, it does not hinder the smoothness of the article. This is what I think is a very successful point of this article. The story begins in a storm at sea. The huge waves, the ferocious basilisk, the down-to-earth man and the woman in purple with a big smile... From the beginning, the plot is compact and exciting, and the author's descriptions of several sea adventures in the article are also very exciting. From the stormy waves, to the huge eye of the sea, to the brilliant light refracted by the rainbow after the storm, as well as the mermaid and the huge purple carp about to transform into a dragon, etc., Everything is vivid on the page. The feeling it gave me was somewhat similar to the fascination I felt when watching "Pirates of the Caribbean". Like most fantasy novels, this article has many characters, but it is also rich in images, each with its own moving features. It feels like the author put a lot of thought into the character names. For example, the flamboyant woman "Jiu Ying" who is actually a demon, the "Qian Hua" who is a grown-up lotus flower, and the Nian beast "Nian Jinxiu" who transforms into a human form. Because of the hints of the names, the images presented to the readers are more complete. The author adopts a multi-perspective approach when writing, and from time to time inserts the psychological activities of various characters that are similar to complaints. I personally think this is a very clever technique, which adds a lot of interest to the article and makes it less boring to read. In addition, I personally like the pairing of Jiu Ying and Nian Jinxiu - happy enemies? (I guess Miss Jiuying would want to hack me to death if she heard this...) The bickering and slapstick between them always makes people smile and adds to the tension of the article. Here are a few suggestions after reading the entire article. Personal opinions are inevitably biased and are only provided as a reference for the author: (1) Opening narrative and character introduction The author chose the scene of killing the basilisk in a storm to unveil the story. The description of the fight can be said to be extremely detailed: where does the protagonist attack from, how the giant snake twists, how the woman on the side assists, where the sword stabs, how the people on the boat react... I personally think that describing actions is much more difficult than describing scenes and dialogues. Readers must calm down and savor it carefully in order to outline the exact picture in their minds. What's more, the author also interspersed the legend of Si You, the reactions and psychological activities of everyone on the ship, etc. If this kind of description is placed in a later chapter, the reader will already have the image of the protagonist in their mind, and it will be natural and smooth to read calmly. But as the beginning of the chapter, the readers still don't know who is who, where they are and what is happening. I personally think that the scene of killing the basilisk can be written more concisely, so that the readers can leave an impression of the skills of Xuantan Zongyi and Jiuying. That's it. The paragraph explaining that everyone on the boat was looking for Si You could have been moved to a later text, because it was inserted in the tense fighting scene and would have been easily ignored by readers. In addition, when the woman in purple introduced everyone on the boat, the author described it as follows: "The person standing by the window over there is Binglan. The person standing behind the young lady is said to be her bodyguard Wu Jiu. The young lady sitting there - the one you rescued - is named Wangye, and I am Jiuying." I read this passage two or three times before I understood it, because there is a perspective problem here: following Jiuying's introduction, we first see Binglan by the window, and then see a young lady - but this young lady was ignored and skipped. The first person we met was the bodyguard standing behind her. Then, following Jiu Ying's introduction, his eyes returned to the young lady. So, at first I was very confused: Binglan was "that lady", and then Wujiu stood behind her and Wangye sat on the other side? Or are there four people here: Binglan, the unknown lady sitting there, Wujiu, and another lady Wangye? Finally, I realized that it was Binglan, Wangye who was sitting, and Wujiu who was standing behind her. Normally I would not pick on such details when reviewing articles, but this scene is the first time characters are introduced in the article, and several of the people introduced are very important characters later on. Therefore, it is recommended that the author modify this passage about Jiu Ying to make the identity relationship between these people more clear. (2) The relationship between Xuantan Zongyi and Murong Qianhua The love between Zong Yi and Qian Hua connects the main plot of this article, "Two Explorations of Si You". However, I always have a vague and illusive feeling about their love. At the beginning, when Zong Yi saw Qian Hua, he thought of her deceased sister. Qianhua, on the other hand, seems to have a simple yearning for Zongyi like a little sister has for a big brother. When he visited Si You, Zong Yi rescued Qian Hua and lived on the island. This was a good opportunity to develop feelings. But on Siyou Island, from the green sandy beach to the crystal clear Lotus of Light, to Siyan who defied the will of two thousand years ago and survived to this day, everything was so eye-catching that the interaction between Zong Yi and Qian Hua was downplayed. Later, the two fell in love with each other, and Qianhua risked his life and sacrificed everything for Zong Yi, which always gave me an unexpected feeling. In fact, a single spark can start a prairie fire, and the feelings that develop rapidly but can lead to life and death are not incapable of moving people. But I think most of the successful writings in this category are concise and leave a lot of white space, giving people unlimited room for imagination. Or, it is to reflect the sense of compatibility between the two through repeated interactions after the love is established. The relationship between Zong Yi and Qian Hua is the lead for the second detective Si You, and it is also a theme in the article, but I felt that the ink was not deep and only touched on. I suggest that the author consider revising the interaction between the two, and write more clearly that Zong Yi fell in love with Qian Hua not because she looked like his sister (this could be seen when repairing the holes on the boat, but at a glance, I think it is not enough to leave a deep impression). In this way, the ending will be more shocking. (3) Ending: Time flies like water Hmm, I wonder if the author likes to play role-playing games (RPG)? Many classic RPG games end with a relatively large time span. Then we see hero A and warlock C getting married, swordsman B traveling around, mage D working hard to become a well-known scholar... And so on, telling the endings of more than ten or twenty characters. The way the article "Si You" ends also gives me this feeling. However, an RPG game often takes 30 to 40 hours to complete, with countless battles in between, making players deeply impressed by every character who appears in the ending and watching it with gusto. The article "Si You" has a total of 120,000 words including four extra chapters, and most of the plot revolves around Xuantan Zongyi. But in the last two chapters, Zong Yi almost completely faded out of the picture. Instead, he used a method similar to historical records to explain some important events that happened in the next hundred years of the Poor Sang Kingdom as the end of the article. I think the author should be hoping to use this technique to highlight the artistic conception in the article that things are impermanent and that looking back, the world has changed forever, right? However, not many people from the Qiong Sang Kingdom appeared in the previous article, and the characters that impressed me the most, such as Zong Yi, Bing Lan, and Jiu Ying, were not seen at the end, which always made me feel that the ending was a little hasty. Moreover, the talent fell short, and it was too late to feel the sadness with Zong Yi. What followed was an ending that spanned a hundred years. I felt that the appeal of the article was invisibly diluted. Therefore, it is recommended that the last few chapters be added in more length, so that the rhythm of the writing will not be rushed and the article will be more complete. The last thing I want to say is that I really like the article "Si You". The author's writing style is beautiful, the scenery is vividly described, and the characters in the novel are also wonderful. I still like Jiuying and Nian Jinxiu the most... I wonder if the author will write their separate stories? In short, thank you to the author for the wonderful article, keep up the good work! Koukou original commentator──Yan Yu

I'm Yan Yu from the plain clothes group, and I'm reading the adult's article. This chapter is not locked, but when you click on it, it says "The author may have deleted the file, or it may not be open to the public temporarily. Please click the next chapter to continue reading." Oh...

After reading the full text, there is always a vague feeling of sadness, if it were not for the final I am afraid that I will always look at this legend with regret. Whether it is Qianhua, who is silently withering, and the flowers are blooming with sound, or the Xuantan Zongyi who is trapped by love, or the lonely Yingluo, as well as Wangye, Wujiu, Siqi, Siyue, they finally have their own destination, and they will not make people sigh with regret. Throughout the whole text, I felt very cute when I saw the big settings. Different authors write about the same world to build a world. This idea is also what I am trying with other authors now, so I want to read it and try to learn something. The big settings are very oriental, which made me think of the Classic of Mountains and Seas at the first time. This kind of fantasy color, and now J Many of the articles in J are different, and have a slight feeling of "Twelve Kingdoms". I don't know if you have read it. It is very rich in mythology. Such a setting makes people want to read on. It seems to be a huge system, covered with a layer of veil. Fantasy things have always been very appetizing, not to mention an unknown world. The general preface of the Nine Jin Dynasties is easy to be outstanding. With such a poetic introduction, the person who made this preface must have a certain level of classical Chinese skills. Such a preface, like a history book, always reveals the vicissitudes of history, attracting people to dig out the time or characters left in the long river of history. They are shining at the bottom of the river, waiting for people to string them together to become a complete legend. Thus, the big story begins. Judging from the beginning, this story tends to be an adventure story rather than a fantasy. I think that most of the readers on JJ are girls, and I am afraid they will not be interested in adventure stories. But as I read slowly, something seemed to break out of my heart, encouraging me to continue reading. The plot slowly developed, and the emotional story slowly emerged (forgive me for being pedantic, but I just Like reading love stories), Xuantan Zongyi and Murong Qianhua, their union seems to be natural to outsiders, but after peeling away the layers of fog, they discovered how difficult it is for lovers to finally get married, and there is also the legend of Siyan. Originally, he thought he could be with the person he loved forever, but in the end he only ended up alone for thousands of years. Regret is always regret, so there is incomplete beauty, which makes people read slowly with regret. Da Da's writing style is not beautiful, but the picture is very strong. When Da Da describes something, we can naturally associate it with it, and the imagination is affected by Da Da's description. The only drawback is that Da Da does not describe the appearance of the protagonist. In this case, it is not very able to enrich the image of the protagonist in the minds of readers. However, the characters of several people are still very distinct, and the dialogues Da Da adds to them have some humorous effects, which can make up for that shortcoming a little. In fact, Qianhua is my favorite in this article, perhaps because her meaning is very beautiful, and there is always a faint halo surrounding her. After her identity is revealed, the fantasy color becomes more intense. As for Xuantan Zongyi, I can only feel sorry for him. After losing so much, he seems to have nothing but a false reputation. As for Mo Li, most of the profile descriptions of him seem to be a gentle and elegant person. I have always been curious about his identity. However, in the extra chapter, some clues were revealed, the White Dragon King. In any case, it is like reading an ancient legend. After reading a story, I feel quite happy. I wish you better and better on the road of writing. (Also: I have a small suggestion for you. When you write articles in the future, you can leave a line blank between each paragraph, so that readers will feel more comfortable and have more desire to read on.) In June 2009, I was inspired by the article and decided to write a long review. Thank you like the wind. Author's reply: thank you thank you Hug the storyteller brother and chew one Thank you for your hard work

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Damn, I included a long comment~~I'll see you in that post in three days, hehe~~ PS: I will choose a big article, because I am also writing a series of articles, and I am still the one who took the lead~ This one is a bit cute~ O(∩_∩)O~ The setting is good, and the picture is very interesting~ Although commenting is not my specialty, I still mustered up the courage to come here. My long comment is not good, so don't be surprised~~ Author's reply: What's going on This series of articles, what a shame I'm the only one who has finished the novel. I don't know where the others are in the distant OTZ. Comment? It also needs to be practiced slowly

Quickly finding a thick rope and tying Zong Yi to the mast, the old captain was busy directing the overall situation. Zong Yi fell back on the deck and covered his ears hard. What the hell is this thing? His sword can't pierce its scales. This, Oops, seems to have forgotten that Zong Yi's rope was untied~~~~~The author's reply: OTZ It scared me This speed is OTZ I didn't even say welcome.

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