Pokemon: Ye's Journey

The writing is a little light, there is not much description of Pokémon, the emotional line lacks some development, and it feels like you are playing a game rather than actually traveling into the world of Pokémon. But overall it's still smooth and okay.

I feel like the author finished the story a little hastily, and the emotional line is not very clear.

It's okay, but the relationship line is almost non-existent. There is a lot of data at the beginning, but there is no data at all later, and there is not much introduction to the elves. I feel that it would be better to write more

It ended so quickly, I thought there would be a side story about the two of them together.

The author's concept is too game-like. From my own point of view, it has no sense of reality. He treats the elves as nothing, trades them at will, and discards them after studying the evolution process. He completely ignores the feelings cultivated. From my own point of view, this is not a qualified trainer, at least from the perspective that Pokémon is a real world. The above personal opinions do not represent everything, but you can refute me and we can discuss it. You are welcome.

It was written in a hurry, it's all about the career line 🐰, and the intermediate process can actually turn the short film into a full-length feature, just need to add a little more content

Author, I think your setting is good, but there are too many things narrated, the story develops too fast, and there are no exciting details. You should slow down the story, slowly observe and integrate into this fantasy world from the perspective of the protagonist, and describe the process and details of the protagonist's interactions with others. Or interactions with elves. People use less language in their conversations, and the content needs to be more detailed and substantial. Now when I watch it, it feels like an outsider looking at the world and watching the protagonist travel on his own. I didn't really get into this character mentally and spiritually. Come on, I believe you will write better and better, and I look forward to your progress.

This kind of golden finger that can see the elf's qualifications is really great

This Scorpio, tsk tsk tsk, cheating is so cool.

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