A Cross-Dressing Master in the Apocalypse

Emmmm, I skipped some chapters in the middle, till the end The subject matter is great! I don't think the writing is jerky, but... The plot is really lacking. It feels like the story has ended before it even started. The characters are a bit messy, there are some inconsistencies, and there are many contradictions in the details. In terms of characters: In the previous world of inner demons, Zhao Yao is clearly illiterate and was born in the end of the world. Why did he know the value of gold, how did he know the pawn shop for gold, how did he find the pawn shop, and his family clearly loved him in the world of inner demons. However, the previous article hinted that he had a cold relationship with his family, including his two brothers, and the fact that he was no longer a family member at the age of eighteen will not be discussed later. I mentioned that the little brother rarely interacts with people, so he is not very good at communicating. However, the conversation between the little brother and the bald head at the beginning seemed very experienced, and there was also a slightly provocative behavior such as taking off stockings... In addition, when the stall was selling skirts, the little brother looked like a coquettish girl. He was ignorant but could understand "Are you a prostitute?" And would he get angry because of the bald head's teasing? Lei Yuan actually didn't quite understand what he wanted to express. And then the two of them kissed in the woods, but the little brother didn't understand anything. He didn't even understand how to stand up from a certain part of the legs above the waist, so why... Kissing???? As for Ms. Su, it is speculated that the author wanted to write about a woman who sacrificed her mother's emotions for the sake of mankind. However, since she originally loved her children, she would not be surprised if she asked her children if she felt sorry for them, right? Even if you think the child won't understand it, you wouldn't say such cruel words to the child. It seems like it was written to make Zhao Yao's past story tragic, but it is contradictory and awkward. It feels like Da Da Da has his own plot line in mind, but when he writes it, it doesn't make readers understand. The characters are also a bit confusing. Now let me say that I don't understand the personalities of the two protagonists. Although people have many sides, the various sides that appear in the article are average. As a reader, I can't grasp the characteristics QAQ There is also plot content: there is a little less plot... If it is the main romance, I feel that the little brother appears a little late. There are a lot of words talking about psychological activities, and it keeps repeating, and the relationship progress is not very integrated with the plot, like an independent part; Just... Gone?!!! There isn't much of a problem with the writing style. Occasionally, some of the rhetoric may be a bit sluggish (a complaint: based on the plot content of each chapter, almost every chapter would be weak in a normal V-story). There are also a lot of bugs. It's not that there are many typos, it's just that the character names are confusing. Sometimes the younger brother says "Zhao Yao said" before what he says. In the beginning part of the inner demons section, does the younger brother say "Xiao Yao xxxxxx"? When reading the article, some can be reasonably inferred, while others are confusing. There are many inconsistencies in the details, so I won't point them out one by one. World view: Well, I actually don't think there is anything wrong with the fantasy-tinged apocalypse, but... If the fantasy part exists and is not limited to the protagonist (the protagonist's side refers to the bear and the bow and arrow, not only the protagonist's side to the ugly slave), then why does the fantasy part not affect the technology tree (in fact, I guess there is probably no technology tree). If fantasy is only a very small part of the world view, why is the protagonist not surprised when he hears the magic circle, and doesn't ask what's going on when the Yin Soul and Yang Soul are mentioned? When it comes to the magic circle, I just want to say... The ugly slave died like this??? No... I wrote so much about the bookstore earlier, and also brought out some background about the old man, implying that the old man is a person with a story, but I didn't write about him. The protagonist almost died when he came out?? Since there is a hint of a story, readers will think that he is a supporting role, but in the end... He is not written about, which is a bit surprising. It is not only the old man who is written but not explained, there are many more, including the specific plan content of Bingding later... Just don't worry about killing him or burying him, he looks like a scumbag~ Generally speaking, I like this theme and characters very much (although their images are contradictory, there are some things that really poke me!), And I really like this article, but please give it a try! I hope that one day I can come back to revise the article and add a plot or write it directly as a short or medium story. Don't dig a lot of holes and leave a lot of threads but don't fill them in or remove the threads. The beginning of the long story and various foreshadowings, the content of the short story, the length of the novella... This kind of thing really makes readers feel uncomfortable. In short, cheers and support, this is my first serious evaluation, and I would like to emphasize again that this is because I like this article so much! It's like crumbled biscuits. Although it falls apart and is not a harmonious and complete biscuit, every piece is delicious and I like them all, but I still look forward to eating the whole biscuit.

( ???` ) I feel sorry for Xiaoyao, so he has to go through this

Hey, I'm back again. School is about to start. My mobile phone may be confiscated, and then I have to crazily catch up on my summer homework. I will waste the whole summer vacation~ Of course, save more pocket money when school starts. You will only be given pocket money when school starts. Ah, it's too difficult for me. Also, can you remember my nickname? I won't change it! (Oh, it feels okay but a bit too much.) I collected this article very early on, and updated it bit by bit. Although Dada's writing style is not perfect, it is still very beautiful, so before Dada becomes popular, I will get to know him first, and I will be awesome in the future~

Red and fiery, in a trance

I also want to go to Xiaoyao's inner demon fantasyland, looking forward to it^o^

Are you about to come out of a demonic dreamland?

Chen Chenci vinegar ('? ')

Congratulations on becoming v(?????)

Sweet*▽*

So sweet₍ᐢ⸝⸝›̫‹⸝⸝ᐢ₎ I feel like the old man has a story ᐕ)⁾⁾