A Lesbian's Performance

The in-depth ideological description and worldview of this article, as well as the innovation of the characters, are worthy of recognition. However, compared to "Just Around the corner", which was lowered in completion due to its anticlimactic end, this article always gave me a sense of tearing between the lines. 1. The story of the rabbit sniffing the detective for the first time, and even licking it later, feels like the portrayal of the relationship between the two is not very good. When I read the story, I even had a sense of absurdity. How come the two of them saw each other right??? 2. Maybe it is very popular for online novels to add some so-called jokes or lyrical descriptions at the end of the article in daily updates, but as a reader who has finished the novel in one go, maybe two people were looking at each other in the last chapter, and suddenly jumped to a new map in the next chapter. Maybe the continuity between chapters is not so important, but in the previous chapter two people still looked at each other affectionately, and in the next chapter they suddenly went to the mountain??? Unlike catching up on new serials, where you can spend a day reminiscing about the last look at each other, readers who read the supplement in one go will have to turn to the next page in the next second. The connection between chapters is really weak. 3. Then there is the connection between stories. As a unit drama, the buffer between units is sometimes only one chapter. It feels like rushing to schedule. Moreover, as the glue between unit dramas, the adhesion is a bit weak. I am still reminiscing about the plot of the previous unit. After reading one or two chapters, I will not stop and even fly directly to the next unit drama. After seeing this, I feel that some readers may be ready to curse, but the purpose of Kamijou's discussion is to prove a point, which is the sense of tearing and incongruity between the writing, as well as the connection between units, as well as the foreshadowing of the emotional drama between the two. And as a crime-solving novel, the detective knows everything throughout the story, and Rabbit silently gives us eighteen ways to solve the case. However, a large number of settings are always added to the few narratives for clues to solve the case. Even the appearance of the League of Lost Property appears in one chapter. Later, the detective mentions a few words, and the amount of information in the text explodes, which greatly increases the reading cost of the reader. If the reading cost is 1, most of Jinjiang Lily's novels fluctuate between 0.1 And 0.6. As a detective novel with its own pursuits, and even a detective novel in which 20 words may become the key to solving a case, the explosion of information is really too difficult for readers. Take the first case as an example. First, clues to the three thieves were given, and then the detective pulled out the hostess's son like a deus ex machina and named the second wave of thieves (the son's life and death were even reversed for a time), involving Yang who was looking for his daughter, and then talked about a mole. The problem is that Wu is the boss's nephew, which reader would know? Two male researchers have an underground affair, and there is no description at all. Do readers know? And who knows the identity of the actor if you, the author, don't tell him? Even the descriptions of the last two bosses are all personal psychological descriptions, but the problem is!!! What was the foreshadowing before? It's not that the author has no foreshadowing, but the foreshadowing and foreshadowing are like a dragonfly's glimpse of water. Thinking back, the answer is indeed the optimal solution (you, the author, may know it, but the reader may not know it), but the question to me is like a rabbit being pushed away by a detective. Rabbit At least I could see the scene for myself, but I was pushed away by a detective who wanted to hide his hand. Not to mention seeing clearly, the writing simply relied on the "detective" point, and this detective is always the person describing it, and the detective who knows everything in the article. In short, I seem to be criticizing this article, but in fact it is because as a novel with relatively great potential, it is really sad that these flaws, big and small, affect the completion. In short, the above is just one opinion, the author can just read it, and I hope to see the author's next works get better and better. P. S. Like a rabbit jumping into a puddle, the detective's narration to her at the end of the first unit was not exaggerated in the previous article, but relied on the third-party perspective of a character later to point out the anomaly. At this time, these characters have a stand-in messenger - the author.

After seeing this paragraph, a lot of things flashed through my mind. A bit of a sci-fi background, still homophobic, Yangtze River Delta (developed area), physical constitution, fertility rate... My wife's accusation is really angry and gentle at the same time.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Really like this story. Romantic and cute. It's just that Xia Gongdang felt a little regretful that he didn't wait until he got down to business.

Is it sugar or kisses, is it sugar!

It's just a couple's trick

Like! What I thought turned out to be not what I thought it was.

I guess the author is a serious thinking, lovely and gentle person.

I just discovered such a beautiful article today, and I couldn't bear to read it in one sitting. It's been a long time since I've seen this kind of novel, no matter what the sexual orientation. I learned about this treasured author from Bibo and Bilibili. I hope you can continue your reading lessons and keep writing. Thank you for writing so many excellent works!

It may not be clear at first, but in fact, the main plot becomes clear from the end of the first case. It is very interesting and attractive. The author will have a secret at the end of each case so that we can understand it.

Sprinkle flowers here, and leave the last one for me to come to N and write a long review one day in the future. I admire the author, from the conception of the framework to the connection of the plot, it is really powerful.