There Is Always a Junior Brother Who Makes a Name for Himself in One Fight

After reading it, the characters are great, but the author's writing style cannot support these characters. Except for the cold dialogue, it feels like everyone else is talking alone. Moreover, I forgot about some of the plot and so on as I was writing it down. I quickly wrote it out when I needed it, without any foreshadowing. For example, it was said before that the token would die or assimilate if worn for a long time, but in the end it just said what it was integrated into, and it was simply taken out without any problems. The same is true for the Forgotten Sword. When I met the master, I said it couldn't last much longer. Isn't it a continuous deficit, but that it needs to be used once to burst out the damage? [Then if you tell me that it was because Gong was a sage that he solved them all, then I would be really speechless about the settings I originally wrote. Then, the details of the battle forty years ago were not written, nor was the reason why the master failed to recover. Many of the plot foreshadowings felt like they were written based on what they thought. The ending was very bad. The senior brother mentioned many times that he didn't believe in Wudu and why did he entrust his junior brother to him? Someone breaks into the Ghost King's base. The protagonist actually doesn't want to run away with his junior brother or find a safe place to wait and see what happens. Instead, he follows the enemy and hides in the enemy's lair? ? It makes me feel like they are a family. The endings of many characters have not been written, such as what happened to everyone in Hanshan Temple, why the master accepted the fifth junior brother, and why Wudu appeared in the Cui family. There are still many shortcomings, so I won't list them all. I can only say that Shou's character design is very attractive, which can support me to read the whole story. I hope that my wife will continue to work hard and practice her writing skills.

There are many holes left unfilled. 1. How did Han Zhao become possessed during the Demon-Slaying War forty years ago? What did you do again? What role did the company play in this? 2. Where did Lianshengmen come from so many treasures? Even the Divine Sword Wangchuan can be obtained from Tianhe. It's too cool. 3. Han Zhao used Wangchuan to exchange his life. It is said that his life will not be long? 4. Fohai has just passed the first test, what about the next five tests? At worst, I entered the second level of the door. I have to get through this, so why did I get out? 5. The era of Wudu and the era of Xuanshui obviously do not match up. 6. Why do Jiuxian and Wudu fight? Why did Wudu frame Jiuxian like this? Just hate the Brewmaster? The author's writing style is quite good, but I hope the plot can be more rigorous. Come on^0^~ Looking forward to reading this book

Ah, I'm back after a long absence. The emotional line progressed too fast and the main line was unclear. I originally thought it would be a grand development, but I didn't expect it to end in such a hasty way. At first I thought Han Zhao was a Jiuxian (.), And I thought there would be a big twist. Many things were not explained clearly. For example, about the original truth, a lot of words were used to describe it before, but in the end it was just hurriedly mentioned? In the end, the whole story seemed to be shrouded in a layer of fog, hazy, and only the person who created the fog knew what was inside... This was probably the situation. All kinds of threads are mixed together like yarn balls, and they cannot be untangled or sorted out at all. The author did not try to sort them out. He even buried so many foreshadowings, but in the end he did not completely connect them together. Just one sentence was made by the big villain Ghost King? I thought I would reveal the truth step by step, but I didn't expect that it would be a one-time recycling of foreshadowing. Most of the time, doing this usually gives people a sense of transparency and refreshment, but I only saw a sense of suffocation. The rhythm at the front is obviously very good, but why is it so fast at the back? Where is the foreshadowing about Yan Bailiu being the Jiuxian and Wudu being the Ghost Immortal? (Look through it carefully) Each character has a different story. You have prepared good settings for them, but you don't intend to write them out. So is there any need to prepare characters? In short, looking at the overall situation, you didn't mention the junior brothers mentioned in the text earlier. You didn't even clearly explain what the villain Guixian was thinking and the reasons for doing so. The whole process is like a background person serving the protagonist Han Zhao. Even the protagonist Han Zhao failed to become three-dimensional. Let's not talk about the love line. It was clearly labeled as pure love, but in the end the love line didn't progress at all. In the end, he just confessed his feelings... Me:? ? ? When did they start to like each other? When did you understand your own feelings? What do they think of this relationship? Yan Bailiu is not described much and is a background character, so I will let him go for now. After I read Han Zhao's feelings for Yan Bailiu, it was really inexplicable. I didn't trust him much. I was worried that his love for Yan Bailiu was just like his love for ordinary junior brothers. Every time I saw the description of Han Zhao's feelings for Yan Bailiu in the later stage, I suspected that I had read a few chapters less. I haven't seen much description of Yan Bailiu's love for Han Zhao. In short, I was completely confused after reading it. I hope you will try harder.

Dei can't afford it, I'm 36 and I can't help but jump over_(:з∠)_ The characters are great, but I don't know why I'm so confused when I enter V that I don't know what it's talking about… I'm confused. Thanks to my wife, it's free for a limited time

... Junior brother has changed too quickly. It would be nice if there was some foreshadowing ahead... I always thought that junior brother was just being naughty, why would he want to get something for nothing?

? ? ? Junior brother is actually dead? Or is Shu Bai going to kill him if he comes out of his body? ? Junior Brother is such a troublemaker. The article doesn't show how ambitious or motivated he is. Why on earth would Shu Bai help him win the Spring Banquet? ? Just because the lottery number is Fu Sheng Nian? ? How big of a wish does he have to realize in Fu Sheng Tuan? ? ?

It's so short_(:з∠)_

There are so few emotional scenes between the two of them.

Finished? ? ? ? Any more? ? ? Still not finished

… (??? Shocked beyond words) Okay, finish spreading flowers! Let's talk about heroes over wine, and the overlord will come from my generation. One represents my true love that will last forever!