A Tragic Love in Black (Revised)

At the end, the plot seems a bit weird

Not bad, keep up the good work

The forum is here, and the flowers are here. I was shocked as soon as I came in. It was completely reorganized~

I'm here, it seems that the hotel is undergoing a comprehensive overhaul... My English must be very good, but I didn't understand any of it and said, sweat... In the lonely world!

Uh-huh. . What do you mean it's a good thing he did... I think this chapter is weird.

It cannot be scored twice, so I can only give it 0 points. There is progress than before. . Looking forward to what comes next from you,

The first chapter seemed a bit heavy, and the heroine's character seemed a little inconsistent (personal feeling, please don't blame me~), and the second chapter made people feel that her character suddenly changed a lot. After reading the first chapter, I thought she would be a cold and indifferent person, but I didn't expect that the second chapter's style changed drastically, and she suddenly became so lively, and she seemed to have done some great things in the past two years. This seems a bit heavy for a nine-year-old girl, unless the author is sculpting a genius child. Okay, it's just the beginning, I'll keep reading... Also, nine-year-old Zifeng is the godfather. This man took a liking to her at first sight and thought she was a malleable talent. How did he go from using her to loving her in two years? A Zhuo is a talent who has stood out a long time ago, right? He should be able to gain some respect. Why was his position replaced by Zifeng within two years? Moreover, his status has plummeted. If he failed in his mission, it would be fine for Zifeng to be with him, but he could not even be injured? If Zifeng's so-called godfather still had some sense or dignity, he shouldn't have behaved like this. He was still called godfather, and he was clearly a child whom he recognized. Why did he change so quickly? Phew~~~~~~~I haven't finished my thoughts yet. After reading Chapter 4, the question came up again. Is this old man giving A Zhuo a whip and a candy? My personality is a little split... Okay, I'm afraid that the more I read, the more problems I will have, which will hit the author. Originally, I read the articles silently, and I don't like to discard the ones I like. I only said this because you said you wanted some opinions. Please don't take offense. I know that it is inevitable to have some problems when writing an article for the first time. I just hope that my random remarks will not damage your confidence. Generally, writers have to go through these immature processes, and it is inevitable to be criticized. I hope you can go better and better on the road of writing. I will silently bless you... Come on!

I plan to watch it again I'm here… The author's reply: OK then

Meow ~ Author's reply: ... What does this mean?

Zhuo Yu≠? A Zhuo My Chinese proficiency is relatively poor, and I read the previous article very quickly, so I was a little dizzy~~~The author's reply: Zhuo Yu is Zhuo Yu, not Zifeng's Zhuo brother