This is an exceptionally scientific cultivation novel.
The focus is firmly on the plot. Everything is very scientific: there are absolutely no stories about the protagonist killing their way through every obstacle or mindlessly murdering people for their treasures, nor any inexplicable inheritances, forced seizures, or anything of the sort. Every cultivation level, spell, and technique is explained in detail, with an in-depth exploration of the mysteries of true qi. The villains are no longer just window dressing. Some even have their own backstories and plenty of screen time, and they are incredibly powerful. Most of the good stuff is in the villains' hands, and the protagonist can't steal it. They also often take pleasure in toying with and beating up the protagonist.
There are lots of characters, too. The protagonist has plenty of companions, and they aren't just there to make up the numbers and cheer them on. The protagonist has a somewhat mysterious background, but isn't invincible. Also, the protagonists don't have a golden finger, they aren't all-rounders who can do everything, and this isn't a story about underdogs making a comeback. Most importantly, this is a cultivation novel told from the protagonist's perspective. The protagonists are merely one of countless living beings in an infinite world, so the world doesn't revolve around them or do anything inexplicable for their sake. Keep that in mind.
This is also a devoted romance between women, with no harem and no Mary Sue.
If you're interested, click in and take a look.
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I wanted to give up as soon as I saw Morningside. But the plot is really good. Well
It can be simpler! A bit chatty!
I almost didn't finish what I said last time. After you explained it, I felt that I didn't know how to say it. The words didn't express what I meant. But I've written it down, so I might as well send it out. You can take a look.
1. It is the relationship between the technology side and the cultivation side mentioned earlier. This relationship must be reflected in every aspect of daily life. I hope you can weigh it carefully and don't treat the previous ones carefully just because the subsequent plot has just begun. It feels like the plot starts after you have been saying don't enter. So what is the purpose of the previous one? And if I can't keep people in front of me, at least I personally can't stand it anymore. I feel that there are too many bugs (including private settings that you have not written out. Since it is a private setting, you should write it out, or if you think it is not good to have too many introductions at the beginning, then at least the writing does not feel inconsistent. There is still a problem of the plot advancing too fast. If you have a lot of private settings, you should not advance so fast. Slow down the pace and slowly popularize science. The time when they go out is very suitable.
Instead of pushing it all to the back, or you can change the rhythm of the narrative, just write the don't go into the paragraph at the beginning, and then insert the world view in flashback) It's not like I can just ignore it and ignore it.
I have felt that this problem is very serious since Wang appeared. I feel that you have not thought about what the life of a richest man should be like. Otherwise, like me, I think their daily facilities are very problematic. Since the richest mortals can afford cultivation-side transportation, why are the equipment inside completely technology-side? Why did the escort team only clear one cultivator? If she was so rich, why didn't she hire a few more? If we can't afford cultivators, why can we use Qing? If her defense was so weak, how did she become the richest man? Is it inherited in the family? I think if she plays like this, she will be taken away and used as a meat ticket in a matter of minutes.
2. Personality. I don't know if it's because I haven't seen this kind of thing too often. I feel that the characters written are very superficial, like a label, and they are always emphasized with dialogues and the like, which is too much.
I think Qing gave me the feeling of split personality. Is she not interested in the outside world? Why are you so interested but don't seem to have any psychological fluctuations? If you are not interested, why do you frown, shake your head, laugh, etc., And also emphasize that you have never laughed before...
The same goes for Wang's character design. You should want to write that the scheming is not exposed at the beginning, and then reverse it later. The prerequisite for pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger is that you really won't be eaten. I can't feel her security at all. It all depends on luck. Is this really scheming?
3. The combat power setting is confusing. What is the level of Wang's strength and Qing's strength? This will be reflected in every battle, but I think it is not written out. There are three battles in the first five chapters, and each time it happens, it makes me more confused.
4. I am also very curious about this, which is why two people crash-landed on a planet that Wang knew about, and they knew it so clearly.
5. There is a restaurant on this planet, but as soon as I left, I walked to a small forest. Is this a rural setting... Aren't I going to rent a hotel? And there is no transportation? Wrong frequency to martial arts again.
First of all, my views only represent my personal views. Maybe it's because I don't see much of this type of writing, so I just give my opinion. I'm not a writing guide, I'm just giving suggestions! ! When I say "must", please automatically replace it with something like this when reading. It may be better to write it like this.
1. I feel that this is more important. Let me mention it earlier, it is the writing style (should it be included in this? It may also be a matter of description habits, but that's what it means). Reading it gives me the feeling of running a running account or writing a diary, not like telling a story.
It is difficult to change this aspect, but it is very important. It affects whether readers can continue reading and whether they can retain people (it is recommended that you try to change it at the beginning to trick people into a trap~)
Give a few examples
① When switching scenes/perspectives in the same chapter, you can use dividing lines, which not only serve as reminders, but also look cleaner;
② You can describe the scene more, don't mention it in one sentence (to heighten the atmosphere and reflect the details, readers need to feel involved and get involved in the drama);
③ Write more about the protagonist's psychological activities (to prevent the protagonist's actions from seeming inexplicable);
④ Avoid the whole article being filled with nonsensical dialogues. What if you want to write a very grand world, but the main characters are arranged in a dull way? So maybe I want to write less serious, but this is too much, and it is very plain and has no content. It is just for the sake of being silly. If you want to create a silly character, you can insert some into the plot, but don't set the plot and dialogue for the sake of being funny. At least I don't find it funny.
2. In fact, the following can be considered as extensions and supplements to the first point.
First of all, this is an imaginary world, so everything about you is constructed by you. Whether it is identity, power, maps, products, etc., It must comply with basic logic. People are not symbols and have their own thoughts. Don't suddenly create two people just to write a plot. It feels like There is some facial expression, that is, looking at a person seems to be a label. After giving him a label, there is only this label. People are very complex and can have the most important things, but it does not mean that nothing else exists (I don't know if you can understand what I want to say, facepalm)
3. The plot advances too fast. It feels like it is advanced in order to advance the plot. In the end, it feels like nothing is explained clearly (especially at the beginning, if you don't intersperse popular science into the plot to explain clearly, at least explain some of the most basic things, the reader will look confused) and some plots are inexplicable.
Examples can also be given here
① You created a particularly powerful force at the beginning, and even held a conference. You also wrote a lot of words to describe it. However, because it involved the heroine, you started to introduce the heroine. The content of the conference was not mentioned at all... Not at all...
Here we either simply click on the content of the conference, which is very suitable for inserting world views, or we don't mention the policies of the conference and directly describe the scene of the heroine meeting here. Then because she is a high-level wage earner, she just follows orders, so she spends the whole meeting in a daze, bypassing the conference, and so on. Explain clearly, don't start with an anticlimax, and once you write it, don't let it turn into nonsense. The readers are also confused.
So when will the sequel be released??♀?…
I want to see how the two bricklayers are doing now...
Where is the yandere girl Xiao Jiangjiang! It hasn't made its debut yet
It's really awesome (? ??_??)?, It's so long, can I write thousands of chapters?
It probably hasn't been swallowed. This is the sixth comment I posted today. It seems that if it has been swallowed, please tell me and I will repost it (actually, I am just trying to accumulate points).
I thought about it again and felt that there should be many plots such as horse carriages. In fact, they were not well balanced. In the beginning, you set that cultivation was not very powerful (that should be the case, as you said that it was not a real cultivation at the beginning). What does the integration of cultivation and technology look like at this time? Technology, cultivation, and martial arts all seem to have a little bit, and in the end it gave me a feeling of four different things. In fact, you only need to really put it into a world you set to think about the people with different status in it. What kind of life should be like? It should be easier to find the problems (refer to the paragraph about the carriage). There is also a similar problem that I just raised about the sword being sucked by the cultivator, because Qing is set to be a high-end killer in a very powerful killer organization on the capital planet. As a result, her sword was sucked, and then her combat power dropped to the point where she could not beat the opponent. The balance here is not good, it is too simple and crude, it is so easy for Qing to fight, so the organization has not discovered such a problem? And it seems that it already has experience against the ascetics. Is this a recent invention on the technology side? Is it popular? If it is popular or not, why? Such an invention seems very targeted, is it trying to cause trouble? If it's so easy to fight Qingdu, does that mean it's the same for fighting other people? Why can these two mercenaries get it? I think you may not have written it out when you were setting it up, but you must have thought about it, instead of just creating a plot just to let the protagonists get to know each other and let Chen come out to save the beauty.
And in the end, Qing didn't feel any sense of crisis after this incident! ! The sword was sucked and almost went cold. Aren't you going to find a way to solve it? ? It was so comfortable that it almost made me think that this incident never happened.
I wanted to give up as soon as I saw Morningside. But the plot is really good. Well
It can be simpler! A bit chatty!
I almost didn't finish what I said last time. After you explained it, I felt that I didn't know how to say it. The words didn't express what I meant. But I've written it down, so I might as well send it out. You can take a look. 1. It is the relationship between the technology side and the cultivation side mentioned earlier. This relationship must be reflected in every aspect of daily life. I hope you can weigh it carefully and don't treat the previous ones carefully just because the subsequent plot has just begun. It feels like the plot starts after you have been saying don't enter. So what is the purpose of the previous one? And if I can't keep people in front of me, at least I personally can't stand it anymore. I feel that there are too many bugs (including private settings that you have not written out. Since it is a private setting, you should write it out, or if you think it is not good to have too many introductions at the beginning, then at least the writing does not feel inconsistent. There is still a problem of the plot advancing too fast. If you have a lot of private settings, you should not advance so fast. Slow down the pace and slowly popularize science. The time when they go out is very suitable. Instead of pushing it all to the back, or you can change the rhythm of the narrative, just write the don't go into the paragraph at the beginning, and then insert the world view in flashback) It's not like I can just ignore it and ignore it. I have felt that this problem is very serious since Wang appeared. I feel that you have not thought about what the life of a richest man should be like. Otherwise, like me, I think their daily facilities are very problematic. Since the richest mortals can afford cultivation-side transportation, why are the equipment inside completely technology-side? Why did the escort team only clear one cultivator? If she was so rich, why didn't she hire a few more? If we can't afford cultivators, why can we use Qing? If her defense was so weak, how did she become the richest man? Is it inherited in the family? I think if she plays like this, she will be taken away and used as a meat ticket in a matter of minutes. 2. Personality. I don't know if it's because I haven't seen this kind of thing too often. I feel that the characters written are very superficial, like a label, and they are always emphasized with dialogues and the like, which is too much. I think Qing gave me the feeling of split personality. Is she not interested in the outside world? Why are you so interested but don't seem to have any psychological fluctuations? If you are not interested, why do you frown, shake your head, laugh, etc., And also emphasize that you have never laughed before... The same goes for Wang's character design. You should want to write that the scheming is not exposed at the beginning, and then reverse it later. The prerequisite for pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger is that you really won't be eaten. I can't feel her security at all. It all depends on luck. Is this really scheming? 3. The combat power setting is confusing. What is the level of Wang's strength and Qing's strength? This will be reflected in every battle, but I think it is not written out. There are three battles in the first five chapters, and each time it happens, it makes me more confused. 4. I am also very curious about this, which is why two people crash-landed on a planet that Wang knew about, and they knew it so clearly. 5. There is a restaurant on this planet, but as soon as I left, I walked to a small forest. Is this a rural setting... Aren't I going to rent a hotel? And there is no transportation? Wrong frequency to martial arts again.
First of all, my views only represent my personal views. Maybe it's because I don't see much of this type of writing, so I just give my opinion. I'm not a writing guide, I'm just giving suggestions! ! When I say "must", please automatically replace it with something like this when reading. It may be better to write it like this. 1. I feel that this is more important. Let me mention it earlier, it is the writing style (should it be included in this? It may also be a matter of description habits, but that's what it means). Reading it gives me the feeling of running a running account or writing a diary, not like telling a story. It is difficult to change this aspect, but it is very important. It affects whether readers can continue reading and whether they can retain people (it is recommended that you try to change it at the beginning to trick people into a trap~) Give a few examples ① When switching scenes/perspectives in the same chapter, you can use dividing lines, which not only serve as reminders, but also look cleaner; ② You can describe the scene more, don't mention it in one sentence (to heighten the atmosphere and reflect the details, readers need to feel involved and get involved in the drama); ③ Write more about the protagonist's psychological activities (to prevent the protagonist's actions from seeming inexplicable); ④ Avoid the whole article being filled with nonsensical dialogues. What if you want to write a very grand world, but the main characters are arranged in a dull way? So maybe I want to write less serious, but this is too much, and it is very plain and has no content. It is just for the sake of being silly. If you want to create a silly character, you can insert some into the plot, but don't set the plot and dialogue for the sake of being funny. At least I don't find it funny. 2. In fact, the following can be considered as extensions and supplements to the first point. First of all, this is an imaginary world, so everything about you is constructed by you. Whether it is identity, power, maps, products, etc., It must comply with basic logic. People are not symbols and have their own thoughts. Don't suddenly create two people just to write a plot. It feels like There is some facial expression, that is, looking at a person seems to be a label. After giving him a label, there is only this label. People are very complex and can have the most important things, but it does not mean that nothing else exists (I don't know if you can understand what I want to say, facepalm) 3. The plot advances too fast. It feels like it is advanced in order to advance the plot. In the end, it feels like nothing is explained clearly (especially at the beginning, if you don't intersperse popular science into the plot to explain clearly, at least explain some of the most basic things, the reader will look confused) and some plots are inexplicable. Examples can also be given here ① You created a particularly powerful force at the beginning, and even held a conference. You also wrote a lot of words to describe it. However, because it involved the heroine, you started to introduce the heroine. The content of the conference was not mentioned at all... Not at all... Here we either simply click on the content of the conference, which is very suitable for inserting world views, or we don't mention the policies of the conference and directly describe the scene of the heroine meeting here. Then because she is a high-level wage earner, she just follows orders, so she spends the whole meeting in a daze, bypassing the conference, and so on. Explain clearly, don't start with an anticlimax, and once you write it, don't let it turn into nonsense. The readers are also confused.
So when will the sequel be released??♀?…
I want to see how the two bricklayers are doing now...
Where is the yandere girl Xiao Jiangjiang! It hasn't made its debut yet
It's really awesome (? ??_??)?, It's so long, can I write thousands of chapters?
It probably hasn't been swallowed. This is the sixth comment I posted today. It seems that if it has been swallowed, please tell me and I will repost it (actually, I am just trying to accumulate points).
I thought about it again and felt that there should be many plots such as horse carriages. In fact, they were not well balanced. In the beginning, you set that cultivation was not very powerful (that should be the case, as you said that it was not a real cultivation at the beginning). What does the integration of cultivation and technology look like at this time? Technology, cultivation, and martial arts all seem to have a little bit, and in the end it gave me a feeling of four different things. In fact, you only need to really put it into a world you set to think about the people with different status in it. What kind of life should be like? It should be easier to find the problems (refer to the paragraph about the carriage). There is also a similar problem that I just raised about the sword being sucked by the cultivator, because Qing is set to be a high-end killer in a very powerful killer organization on the capital planet. As a result, her sword was sucked, and then her combat power dropped to the point where she could not beat the opponent. The balance here is not good, it is too simple and crude, it is so easy for Qing to fight, so the organization has not discovered such a problem? And it seems that it already has experience against the ascetics. Is this a recent invention on the technology side? Is it popular? If it is popular or not, why? Such an invention seems very targeted, is it trying to cause trouble? If it's so easy to fight Qingdu, does that mean it's the same for fighting other people? Why can these two mercenaries get it? I think you may not have written it out when you were setting it up, but you must have thought about it, instead of just creating a plot just to let the protagonists get to know each other and let Chen come out to save the beauty. And in the end, Qing didn't feel any sense of crisis after this incident! ! The sword was sucked and almost went cold. Aren't you going to find a way to solve it? ? It was so comfortable that it almost made me think that this incident never happened.