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Si Jue, known in the yuri author community as the famous Jueyu, lives a quiet, comfortable student life at university. Every day, she writes and updates her stories, and uses her secret identity on Weibo to follow updates from her goddess, Zhang Xinran. She looks at photos of her goddess on set every day and thinks about how much she wants to marry her. What Si Jue doesn't know is that the goddess she thinks about so often is a devoted reader of her novels, and her stories have already turned her gay as a spring. When Si Jue's university invites Mu Qingxue to give a talk to the students, Mu Qingxue brings her best friend Zhang Xinran along. This chance encounter brings two parallel lines together and kicks off a flurry of public displays of affection...
One of Si Jue's readers sees the posts Si Jue and Zhang Xinran share on Weibo and quietly reposts them through tears: "Aaaah! Jueyu, you're showing off your love again! I can't go on!"
A Zhang Xinran fan quietly comments: "Goddess, is it really okay for you two to be like this?!" (Wails)
Please don't flame me if the writing isn't good. I'm working hard to improve! Suggestions from all you cuties are welcome~
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DaDa, can Jueyu DaDa counterattack?
What do you say about this one? It's a bit disgusting. Xinran knew that Li Sian had drugged Yu, but instead of rushing to save her, he actually watched him take her clothes off in a hotel, take intimate photos of them kissing, and post them on Weibo! This chapter is really disgusting and makes people depressed!
Author, are there any middle-aged people like me who can read this? Haha, I have been staring at your novels every day.
Author, are there any middle-aged people like me who can read this? Haha, I have been staring at your novels every day.
I quite like this ending~
It's okay, keep up the good work!
How to put it this way, I think the plot arrangement of this article is okay, but the writing is not polished enough, that is, the emotional expression is not extreme enough. For example, Si Jue was drugged, and the anger of Xinran and the others cannot be conveyed to us. It is like watching a news network reporter only dictating the general story of the incident. Generally speaking, it feels like reading an outline. There are some places where I personally feel like I have set an ambush, which can be used to add some short stories to sublimate the emotions. There are also minor roles that are not utilized enough. For example, in the school performance, they can actually be used to tease Si Jue, "Si Jue, if you are trying to evade like this, you are trying to monopolize the goddess's autograph and appreciate her beauty." Things like this made Si Jue feel embarrassed but sweet and proud of his lover; and Xinran's excitement before the announcement. If you are excited and a little naughty, you can wink at Si Jue and curl your lips. Small movements like this will make Si Jue's heartbeat and speculation gradually increase. When saying "announce something", you can break up the paragraphs to make the atmosphere a little serious and tense. When wearing the ring, Si Jue can slightly shake his hands to express the feeling of being happy and excited, but a little unable to hold back, but forcing himself to be calm. Mu Qingxue's fiancé's character distribution was not very clear when she broke off the engagement. The breakup of the engagement was very straightforward. Did he accept the truth, or was he unable to accept it? Perhaps it could be described as 'Is this a test for me? I know you like the same sex, but I still want to save it. What should my parents do? Okay, I understand, wish you happiness' kind of gentlemanly character; or 'Why? I don't believe it! I can give you happiness. Huh, really? I'll play along, let's let each other go. ' This character who is unwilling to let go of his pride and breaks off the engagement as if the two of them are just not suitable can be used as a reference. Many paragraphs would be easier to integrate if they were broken up and polished. This is my personal opinion and my first long review. I hope the author of the next book can continue to work hard, come on!
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