The Immortal Entertainment Producer

Hey, the whole story would be better without this conspiracy behind it. It's superfluous.

Congratulations on the completion, thank you for your hard work. But it actually feels a bit pity. It was originally very attractive and exciting at the beginning, but then it felt a little off track? As for the entertainment industry, although there are many programs arranged, the pace is very fast and it is easier to jump into scenes. . The emotional line of attack and reception is not clear. The character's appearance and subsequent performance are slightly unrelated. For example, Cailing Fairy, I should have felt enchanting and proud when she appeared. However, the tone of the conversation with the protagonist later did not show that. It is not appropriate to say "little lady, take leave first". Alternatively, you can add a little tone or expression description, and write such words with an arrogant face, which may be more suitable for the character. Xiao Gong's character design gave me a cool and crazy aura at first, but the conversation with the protagonist in the cave was too polite, and the title "I'm here" doesn't fit the character's personality. Moreover, the paragraph where the protagonist is in a coma and Xiao Gong takes him to the cave can be written about Xiao Gong's inner activities and external performance, such as "Jiang Mo looked at the person in front of him, obviously..." This kind of expansion can make the characters and plot more complete. There were too many words used in the scene where the protagonist and the wine-making wine fairy Bo were scolding each other. . In fact, it makes people feel a little bit off-kilter. Too many programs also give people this feeling. The scene where Qian Jianjian's father breaks off the relationship with him was actually too hasty. You could have described his father's back as showing sadness or tired eyes or something. The ending was a bit too hasty, and later required additional explanation at the end of the article, which shows that the shelf is too big to be filled with anything. The overall plot is too fast, and some subplots and foreshadowings are not handled carefully enough. It would be easier to write about the entertainment industry if the frame is not too large. If the frame is too large, the theme of the entertainment industry will not be highlighted. The above is just my humble opinion. If you have any different opinions, please don't tell me 23333?

The subject matter of this article is very novel, but unfortunately, whether it is a movie or a variety show, this kind of thing can be talked about in a long and slow way, and the feelings can be written down conveniently, and then it is over... The conspiracy that was released in the middle is too unrestrained...

Finished? ! Is this the end of woc? !

What's the point of such a life?

Should tearing off name tags turn into tearing off personal charms? Who is undercover?

Come on, I thought you had stopped updating!

It's a very good subject. The previous article was also very good. Unfortunately, it was ruined by a forcibly inserted conspiracy. So now when I return to the topic, I can't light it up.

Urgent, urgent, please update soon.

Love progresses slowly, slowly, slowly