The last chapter is unexpected, I like the high-dimensional explanation, and it has a strong science fiction flavor.
However, if we look at short stories, the number of words can be condensed and streamlined. For example: do some of the emotional descriptions in the first two chapters feel like empty talk? Maybe some specific examples can be added? And, appropriately revise the portrayal of Lin Li and strengthen his emotional description of the male protagonist?
In my humble opinion, the beauty of short stories is that they are short and concise and leave a long aftertaste. The article has already tasted a bit of aftertaste. If it is short and concise, it still needs more effort.
——I am stupid, if I make any mistakes, please forgive me.
This novel is quite good. It's been rewritten into a full-length novel!
Good-looking and good-looking. Why haven't you written any articles in the past few years?
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh so sweet
So the male and female characters share the same name?
I really like the writing in big letters. My imagination is so clear.
Squeak (did you ask for a squeak?)
I really like DaDa's writing style. I beg the author to publish a book (?? Dis?`)
I like this feeling very much. The author is really different. I have read all your books.
Um... It's really morbid. If I were the male protagonist, I wouldn't be able to dump her.
The last chapter is unexpected, I like the high-dimensional explanation, and it has a strong science fiction flavor. However, if we look at short stories, the number of words can be condensed and streamlined. For example: do some of the emotional descriptions in the first two chapters feel like empty talk? Maybe some specific examples can be added? And, appropriately revise the portrayal of Lin Li and strengthen his emotional description of the male protagonist? In my humble opinion, the beauty of short stories is that they are short and concise and leave a long aftertaste. The article has already tasted a bit of aftertaste. If it is short and concise, it still needs more effort. ——I am stupid, if I make any mistakes, please forgive me.
This novel is quite good. It's been rewritten into a full-length novel!
Good-looking and good-looking. Why haven't you written any articles in the past few years?
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh so sweet
So the male and female characters share the same name?
I really like the writing in big letters. My imagination is so clear.
Squeak (did you ask for a squeak?)
I really like DaDa's writing style. I beg the author to publish a book (?? Dis?`)
I like this feeling very much. The author is really different. I have read all your books.
Um... It's really morbid. If I were the male protagonist, I wouldn't be able to dump her.