An Encounter

I'm still touched, it's so well written.

The opposite sex he met for the second time helped him pay with his credit card, but the heroine didn't respond?

Yao Yao actually likes Hibiscus. Does Deng Xi'an know that? . .

It was frustrating to watch. When did the author abuse his ex-boyfriend?

This is A Yuan, commenting in his own name. He is not a professional commentator. If there are any deficiencies, you can point them out, but please do not make personal attacks. Let me explain in advance, since the questions are not very big, but very trivial, so I have adopted a list of items. The relevant items will be explained in parentheses. It may be a bit confusing, so I apologize in advance. [1] The writing is a bit tight, I suggest it be better to separate it, but it's not a big problem. [2] There are too many supporting characters, and they all have individual names or titles, which can easily confuse readers. Therefore, it is recommended that if it is not necessary, for example, if it only appears a few times, don't add too many supporting characters or names, and at most give it a title. For example, for the heroine's ex-wife, don't write the name. Just know that she is the ex-wife. It's good to be detailed, but you don't need to be so detailed for less important parts like this. Sometimes it will confuse the reader's memory of the article. (The advantages of the characters can be found in [3].) [Reference] The rhythm of the plot is so fast at the beginning that people can't figure it out, but it gets a little slower around the second plot part, but it's not particularly obvious, so I'll just mention it a little bit. (The advantages of the plot can be seen in [1].) About the copywriting, 'When we first met, she had a big wave perm, looking charming and pretentious. The person across the table doesn't like each other. ' This sentence in the copy is not expressed clearly enough by the author in the text. In particular, the sentence "they dislike each other" may be due to the influence of the overall writing style, and the expression in the article is much understated. Readers' focus is mainly on the first few sentences of the copy, but the first three sentences of the author's copy are completely inconsistent with the style of writing, the title of the article, and the main plot. There are too many elements of a scumbag, which makes the copy unglamorous and cliched at first glance. However, the content is not like that, but fresh and refreshing. So here is a suggestion, put these words: "We are going around in this world, but we just want a warmth that will never be abandoned." /The heroine is occasionally cute and not a noob. The male protagonist... Well, he is a very reasonable and reasonable person. /Note: The article on cute pets has been moved to the front as the focus. Although it is not the type that is very popular in JJ now, and it is not eye-catching enough, it is closer to the style of writing. After all, the copywriting depends on the type of reader who reads the article. If a reader who only reads the article by a scumbag man opens the first chapter, there will be a problem of inconsistent taste, thus reducing the click-through rate. As long as the right people are reading it, otherwise no matter how good the article is, the click-through rate will naturally be low if it is read by the wrong people or has different tastes. [1] The writing and writing style look very comfortable. Although the plot has little ups and downs, it evokes a warm and slightly sweet taste in the plainness. The "warm writing" alone is sufficient and well-executed. It does not deviate from the main axis and is very suitable for changing the mood. (For plot rhythm issues, please see [Reference].) [2] The logic is smooth. For example, the part about the fish bone necklace is very clear, making the article more realistic and immersive. [3] The emotions of the characters are handled carefully. The heroine's personality is not bright and eye-catching, but it is very warm and calming, which is in line with the main axis of the writing style and plot. And the priorities are clear, and the supporting roles are well added, and they are closely related to the protagonist and the plot. (See [2] for supporting role issues.) A Yuan's comment ends here. Author, please continue to work hard. Personal review [A Yuan] comments

The male protagonist gave me the feeling of central air conditioning...

17+9=26, Why did the heroine turn 24 after we met when we were seventeen?

After reading only one chapter, I thought that boy was the male protagonist... Turns out he was just the male supporter.

Huahua, come on~

Some people don't understand, why is it said that the basketball game is chaotic?