When Wind, Flowers, Snow, and Moon Fade Away

The writing is great and the story is so sad. I love Xue Yue's story, keep going!!!

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It's very well written, when will the second half be released? Wait for the update

I would like to give you a piece of advice. If you want to sign a contract or want more readers to pay attention to this article, please rewrite it. This style of writing is definitely not suitable for web writing It's better to observe the popular themes of LJJ. The most important thing is to be cute and the writing style is cheerful.

Finished reading. The first comment is spot on. The writing is very good, but the author has some stream-of-consciousness writing style. Many people who read online articles read novels on the subway and bus and do not have the patience to read long paragraphs of text. It's better to have a clear structure, either flashback or sequence, the time is too messy.

Because I don't read much about romance, you can think of me as farting, and it's just a cold-hearted comment about life, so I'm not ashamed to say a few words. First, it's not that this copywriting is bad, but it's out of date. Brush Bishui found that this kind of copywriting is a thorn in the side of many readers! Basically, I don't want to continue watching "She Said, He Said". Moreover, some time ago, the bloody Mary Suwen liked to use this kind of thing the most. If she used it too much, it would not attract people. Nowadays, it is popular to be cute, or to be simpler, to make it clear and point out the point of the article, whether it is revenge or love, refreshing or heart-wrenching. Second, the subject matter is cold, and martial arts is very unpopular in JJ! So cold and speechless, looking at the sky. Unless you are at the level of a great god, basically no one cares about you. If you just want to write it, of course there is no problem. If you want to be popular, well, it's very, very difficult Third, your writing is better than mine, but I don't know why it just couldn't catch my attention. After reading the first chapter, I thought I had to finish it before I could comment, so I read on. It may also have something to do with the typesetting. It's too dense. You know it's convenient to read pictures on the Internet. The typesetting must take into account the readers' habits. It's better to leave a blank line in each paragraph. Fourth, I have read physical books of a similar style, and I know what feeling you are pursuing. But this is no longer popular in JJ, or it used to be popular. But if you write it well, it will be very popular if you write it well. The most popular articles are those that make people feel like they are immersed in it, like, ah, ah, ah, I want to fall in love with this handsome guy, and so on. And your article makes readers feel like they are watching a play, without a strong sense of immersion. But this is also a way of writing. If the stage is better set up, the setting is richer, and the plot structure is better, there will be people applauding a good show. I'm also a newbie, so don't pay attention to me if you don't like me.

I've only written four chapters. Just take your time and get better. I've written seven chapters. Just two comments. One is from Bishui. The newcomer is miserable.