[Wuxia Crossover] Wandering Through My Homeland

The story is a good one, but the writing is too straightforward. When describing the plot, it feels like you are reading a narrative rather than a novel. When describing key plot points in detail, there are always unnecessary complicated descriptions and explanations that repeatedly interrupt the plot. This way of writing makes the heroine feel like she is doing things with a lot of ink and nonsense, but the character she wants to create is a character who is quick and decisive in doing things. There is no distinction between "the", "land" and "get". He has a serious oral habit, and he incorporates his oral habit into the character's lines. He always says "why", "what are you doing" and "what are you" regardless of the character's mouth, which is very dramatic. When the heroine talks in a long way, she always uses "and," to take over what is going to be said before and after, which is very strange in spoken language. Many reviews said that the fighting scenes were well described, which is why I watched it. After reading it, I found that it differs from person to person. In my opinion, the description is too lengthy, and it is the same problem. There are too many explanations and interrupt the plot. This is even more fatal in a fighting scene. But the most fatal thing is the large paragraphs of explanations and descriptions that keep appearing during the conversation, interrupting the coherence of the conversation. Most of the explanations are unnecessary. Not fully ordered, the last story before the main world skipped half way. So I can't give stars, just post them in the comments.

Shu Da, are you coming back? Shu Da, the martial arts and horror movies you wrote are really good. Please come back orz

The writing skills are really good. I love Su Mengzhen's BG the most.