Echoes Lingering in the Cool Breeze

How did the copywriting become like this? Is this happening because my copywriting is so poor?

After seeing this chapter... I really squirted! Ha ha…

It's already great to be able to write like this when practicing writing! I only wrote 30,000 words and gave up!

Very happy article! Whee…

Haha... Quite an interesting story! Support, support! Come on, author!

Haha... It's so cool, but everyone has a different personality! It's fun too!

This is my first long review. I have never written it before. Please bear with me if it is not good! Moreover, if something was said that was unpleasant to listen to, I believe the author understood it! As you said in the first chapter, everyone is welcome to tickle you! (The author may be from Northeast China) Okay, let's get down to business. I finished reading this article from beginning to end. No matter how I finished it, I persisted from beginning to end even though my head was in severe pain. I watched Twelve O'Clock last night, so I want to say a few words to the author. (In order not to waste my little feelings) Let's talk about the key points first. The key point is your article. The first few chapters really make people abandon it! Of course, everyone's cuteness is different. Fortunately, I watched it while lying on my bed with my phone, and it wasn't as impetuous as watching it on my computer! Moreover, it is indeed easy to read in the dead of night. I originally wanted to give up, but after seeing that the author actually had more than 300,000 words, I thought, what is the reason that allows the author to persevere? He actually has the confidence to persevere? Just click and save it... Haha... Author, just hold on, the things that will make your heart unbearable are still to come. Let's not talk about typos or anything like that. You may have seen it yourself, so let's talk about the writing first. What about your writing style? I can't say it's bad, but it's definitely not good either! The writing style of my classmate who is in high school is probably similar to yours. Of course, she doesn't have your perseverance. That girl gives up after writing tens of thousands of words every time! In terms of writing style, I can't say much. I suggest you read more works by great writers and study more about how they write. One of your weaknesses is that you don't describe the situation in depth enough. When you first wrote about the restaurant where it appeared... You just laid out how luxurious the restaurant was, what the architectural style was, what the furnishings were! I have read that person's work. She is already a very good author, but she still tries hard to improve her ability to describe scenes and characters' appearance! So, you still have a long way to go! Come on! As for the plot, I would like to make some comments... The characters who appeared at the beginning... To be honest, they really felt stupid! It doesn't make much sense! Moreover, from the few funny articles I have read, this is not a brilliant place, just like who said it is a bit false! I feel the same way! However, after reading the story later, I felt that the author actually arranged it this way on purpose. You wanted to use these funny comparisons to show how comfortable college life is and how helpless it is to enter social life. I understand... Okay, it's time to spray and I've almost finished spraying. I'll talk about the reasons why this article keeps me going. The further I look back, the more I realize that everyone's appearance is actually useful, and almost no character is wasted. From roommates to Wei Qing to Lin Kaien to his little playmate, to Xiao who appeared later and so on... I can't remember the name... Although you did not grasp some parts well. You were too brief during his internship. I just skipped the parts that I couldn't understand. Generally speaking, let me tell you the general story. Even when Xiao Shou was a teenager, his brother disappeared from the world. Later, he was admitted to college. When he was a senior, his brother came back again, and ended up with a girlfriend. Then he became envious, jealous and hateful! Later, he confessed to his brother, but his brother refused, but he still persisted. Later, he was caught by his brother's enemies, and then he was rescued. Then... He got into a car accident when he was about to send him abroad, and he was saved by a man who had always liked him... Right, I didn't miss it! I basically read this story. Is the main emotional line correct? As for the whole story... It's actually not very new! To put it bluntly, it's quite vulgar! Nowadays, this kind of story about falling in and out of love is rubbish! Fortunately, the author did not use too much writing power here. In fact, what I like most is what happened when he returned to K City, his childhood friend... I didn't expect that the author's imagination was quite big, and there was such a miraculous thing! Author: Are you a theist? And the part about Xiao... I feel like I'm watching a vampire! Although it is a bit confusing, the whole story is smooth! It has a beginning and an end, and the clumsy writing style... Well... You need to practice more. Actually, I quite like the man with green eyes! Quite charming and mysterious enough! Strongly aroused my curiosity! The author might as well open a new pit to write specifically about him! Haha... Just mention it casually! The sentence that touched me the most was what the author said, 'Everyone wears a mask to be a human being...' Well, actually I feel the same way! You spoke from the bottom of my heart. The funny jokes in their dormitory at the end, and the tragic ending... Anyway, I felt very sad. Anyone who has experienced college graduation should feel this way! I think you must have entered society... Otherwise, ordinary students wouldn't be able to understand it. The most depressing time was when I was watching the ending and the extra episode. I tossed and turned and couldn't sleep! Oh, it was really uncomfortable... I felt so heartbroken! Fortunately, they are finally together, so there is nothing to regret. Of course, there is no Rourou... It's still... A pity! What I want to say most is, author, do you want to insinuate something in your article? If you're not insinuating, forget it! If so... It's best not to say anything! These are all sensitive issues! Although, your writing is quite humorous, and I agree with it. It all hits the point! But... Hehe... You understand! Okay, I didn't expect to write so much! It's time for me to take a rest. I have been writing for more than three hours and have held back more than a thousand words. Who told me that my typing speed is slow? Come on, author! Hope you write better stuff!

This... I found that there is only one protagonist. I read a few chapters and basically didn't see Xiao Gong appearing. Indeed, the article is really straightforward... Xiao Gong and Xiao Shou seem to be just joking? There is no ambiguity at all. What types of Xiao Shou and Xiao Gong did the author write? Do you think you are a cute guy or a straight guy? When it comes to danmei writing, the easiest things to point out are those with offensive and passive personalities, such as yandere, facial paralysis, tsundere, monster, etc... The author is a man but he also writes danmei, so he is pretty good...

Hmm, I just want to say when I see this, too many people came out at once, and then, as an online article, readers basically just flip through it (at least I am Jiang Zi) As I flipped through the pages, I didn't quite understand who the protagonist was or what kind of story it was telling, so I wasn't too patient and continued reading... I think that if you want to express something through some scenes or small dialogues, it is better to let the readers understand who is who, what is the relationship between who and whom, and what the story is about, and then describe it in detail (but this is my personal feeling, I don't write articles) Then start with a small scene, but this scene is not very attractive. The above

Halfway through Chapter 2, I really can't stand it anymore. It feels like a bunch of fujoshis pretending to be men are acting out stage plays. One word: fake, two words: noisy.