Fated ties from a past life, immortal heroes and grudges.
When heaven and earth first emerged from chaos, she was a little peacock who knew no bounds. Out of pity for the demon clan, who were denied the sun and moon's essence, she pleaded on their behalf. For that, she fell from heaven and became a demon, leading her followers to run rampant across the six realms.
He was the merciful Bodhisattva Ksitigarbha. To guide her toward godhood, he willingly sacrificed himself and plunged back into the cycle of reincarnation.
In her second life, he became the son of the Fox Lord and an immortal of Penglai. To repay a debt of love from ten thousand years ago, she took the form of a mortal woman named Kong Xuan and entered Penglai to cultivate. She fell deeply in love with him, but the karma of their past lives led her to unleash a new Demon Lord and make a terrible mistake...
When they meet again, he is still the carefree immortal of Penglai, while she has become the supremely revered Goddess Mohe. After a reunion spanning ten thousand years, is this fate or a calamity?
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To wield it, become a True Warrior, purge corruption and uphold justice. Who dares stand in my way? In my fury, my sword qi splits into three.
To guard it, cultivate the heart. Clouds gather and disperse; walk the Way in Heaven's stead. My sword turns, and what are demons and monsters to me?
The sun and moon cross, the Two Principles alternate, and the Taiji unfolds. All four directions bow in submission!
The heroine is an impatient Demon Venerable with overwhelmingly high combat strength, now reformed.
The hero is aloof and haughty, with a face that could outshine anyone. He's both solemnly proper like a Daoist and pedantic like a bookworm, and can lecture people with eight different idioms in one breath without repeating himself...
The author's lifelong guilty pleasure is having the hero and heroine switch roles. For thirty years, I've been devoted to an evil view of love: you love me, I love you, and we have to be together. If we can't, then the whole world can be buried with us!
I can't help making the hero look good whenever I get the chance. It's practically become part of my life...
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It's so well written~~Awesome. Let's participate in the fantasy novel competition.
The thrush scene feels a bit like two or three people!
No borrowing, no borrowing, no borrowing! Cut you!
Why can't you just say what Phoenix said directly and play the trick of making love hard to say?
Rabbit, the article is great! Update soon
Long live the sibling relationship! Come on, rabbit
Dear Erfeng! After a thousand years, you are still so charming... Σ( ° △ °|||)
So charming. . . Moko, hold on! All right! (^V^) I admit that I still want to watch the intimate scenes, haha
Ahem, please delete the first comment, what the hell is that...
Below is the eye-catching version of Bandit Jun's review.
Hello, author, I am Shamao Pingwen Shop Bandit Jun. I am very happy to receive your order. Since my style of writing tends to be venomous, of course, the content I express only represents my personal views. If there is something that I feel is wrong or that I cannot accept the venom, please try to ignore it.
First of all, look at the title. There is no doubt that this title is too literary and cumbersome for today's online articles. If you don't read the text, you won't know what the title means. The copywriting is also too literary, too long, and it just feels like a summary of the story. For today's online articles, concise and warm and cute copywriting is the most attractive. Take the Demon Lord of the Fairy God Jiulu Feixiang as an example. Her copywriting is very concise, clear, and cute. It captures the cuteness of the readers and makes them want to read on. The title and copywriting are the face of an article and are the key to attracting readers to click. Obviously, yours is not particularly attractive, but for Yu Xianxia, your copywriting is not bad.
Let's talk about the title and copy, and let's talk about the main text. After all, the main text is the key. I have to say that at first glance, I thought it was a good light-hearted fairy tale, but the more I read it, the more I felt that it was not the same thing. It was lighthearted, but the arrangement of the sentences and plot was not very reasonable. First of all, the first part is too colloquial. There are many colloquial monologues by the heroine in the article, as well as frequent words like "hey hey". What makes me feel bad is the Arabic numerals such as 5555 that appear later. These really make this article lose a lot of points. The humor written by Xianxia is currently the mainstream of attracting people, but it does not mean that it is colloquial. The words and sentences of the Xianxia light-hearted romance genre, which represents the Three Lives, Three Worlds, Jiulu Feixiang and other great gods, are very humorous and make people feel relaxed, but they are not modern colloquialism. Also, the first person appears in many places, mostly in the heroine's monologue, and after a while it becomes the third person. Such alternation makes me confused. Is it the first person or the third person? I hope the author can go back and revise it. The latter ones are much better.
The secrets in the author's novel seem to have been revealed too early. The past and present life of the male and female protagonists can also be guessed a little. When reading, I don't have much expectation for the rest of the story. It is recommended that when writing the novel, pay attention to arrange the revelation of these plot secrets. You can write foreshadowing in the front, but it is not obvious and does not reveal it. Let the readers guess, for example, what happened when the heroine became a demon and the hero became a bodhisattva can be used as a foreshadowing and written bit by bit. However, since a lot of it has been revealed earlier, there will be no desire to read on. Of course, this does not mean that there are no plots that need to be revealed in the author's novel, such as what happened when the heroine was Kong Xuan, but the description of this point is not strong enough, and when I read it, I didn't have the desire to see what happened.
Then there's the plot. I found the previous plot very boring, but I can't say what's wrong with it. If I jump back and watch it again, it's not a big problem! It just looks tasteless and unappealing. Then in the later Demon Realm Competition, many characters appear, and supporting characters appear one by one. There are so many characters that I can't tell who is who. I watched it for a long time and watched it over and over before I could tell. But this one was very boring to watch. I just had to tell who is who. What was said needs to be watched over and over again to understand. It can be said that I still don't understand it after watching it over and over again. As for the interaction between the male and female protagonists, some plots feel like they were written just for the interaction between the male and female protagonists. Some of the interactions between the male and female protagonists also seem to be for the sake of interaction, which has no real meaning and seems boring. Moreover, the time and place of the story changed a little quickly, and a character and a plot were introduced at once, but I didn't see anything in this story that highlighted the main line of the emotional drama between the male and female protagonists. Take the Demon Lord I am chasing as an example. There is a main line in the emotional development of the male and female protagonists, that is, the male protagonist wants to resurrect his enemy, while the female protagonist has a powerful soul and can flexibly breathe in a body made of soil, and then unfold a series of subsequent stories, and the emotional development of the male and female protagonists. But the big one, how should I put it, the main line is unclear. From the heroine attending the party, to the hero going to the Daming Palace, to the Donghua Emperor's party, to the demon clan competition, and then the attack on Penglai Fairy Mountain, etc., There is no clear main line connecting the series of plots before and after. They are very scattered and incoherent. The author can easily find a main line to connect these plots.
Also, there are too many psychological descriptions of the male and female protagonists, especially in the previous part. In many places, the psychological descriptions of the male and female protagonists are re-written without any substantive content. It is taboo to describe too much in the mind when writing an article, as it feels like trying to make up the word count. After all, what readers are looking for is the plot, not the psychological analysis of a blockbuster movie. Moreover, the inner thoughts are written too clearly, and a lot of fun is lost. It is difficult to resonate with the story, and it is difficult to think and feel from the perspective of the protagonist.
Let's talk about the characters. I have to say one more thing. In just 90,000 words, there are too many characters. Whether you can remember them or not is one thing. But what is the significance of these characters' appearance? I feel like the male and female protagonists have to interact with each other in terms of recognition, and there are so many characters, which will make readers irritated. I suggest the author greatly simplify the characters! Then there is the characterization, the image of the male protagonist has become more facial-shaped. Except for the initial descriptions of the front and side, it is not clear from the plot that the male protagonist is like that. The characterization needs more plot to portray, rather than describing it, other people describe it, and it is more about the deeds that make readers feel like this, so they will really like this character. The same goes for the heroine, whose personality is fiery and willful, but there are also contradictions in other aspects. For example, the heroine doesn't like to practice, but later it is said that she is among the top ones. This is a contradiction! Or maybe I'm remembering it wrong. As for the dialogue between the male and female protagonists, it is even more difficult to tell their personalities. Sometimes, it feels like there are still two people in front of them. I hope to put more effort into characterization, not to be too facialistic, but to integrate it with the plot and highlight the character through dialogue and actions. Let me mention that Xiao Ru has a good image and is cute, which is a must-have cuteness tool in fairy tales. The author can write more about him, make him more cute, and he can also be an important role in regulating the relationship between the male and female protagonists.
Overall, the author's writing style is very good and attractive. The writing style is also good. There is no cluttering of words or descriptions of novices. The descriptions are just right and the writing is smooth, so you can read it naturally. I hope that the author will write better and better in the future, and this book will be on the gold list.
——Simmiao Changpingpu Bandit Jun places the order
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It's so well written~~Awesome. Let's participate in the fantasy novel competition.
The thrush scene feels a bit like two or three people!
No borrowing, no borrowing, no borrowing! Cut you!
Why can't you just say what Phoenix said directly and play the trick of making love hard to say?
Rabbit, the article is great! Update soon
Long live the sibling relationship! Come on, rabbit
Dear Erfeng! After a thousand years, you are still so charming... Σ( ° △ °|||)
So charming. . . Moko, hold on! All right! (^V^) I admit that I still want to watch the intimate scenes, haha
Ahem, please delete the first comment, what the hell is that... Below is the eye-catching version of Bandit Jun's review. Hello, author, I am Shamao Pingwen Shop Bandit Jun. I am very happy to receive your order. Since my style of writing tends to be venomous, of course, the content I express only represents my personal views. If there is something that I feel is wrong or that I cannot accept the venom, please try to ignore it. First of all, look at the title. There is no doubt that this title is too literary and cumbersome for today's online articles. If you don't read the text, you won't know what the title means. The copywriting is also too literary, too long, and it just feels like a summary of the story. For today's online articles, concise and warm and cute copywriting is the most attractive. Take the Demon Lord of the Fairy God Jiulu Feixiang as an example. Her copywriting is very concise, clear, and cute. It captures the cuteness of the readers and makes them want to read on. The title and copywriting are the face of an article and are the key to attracting readers to click. Obviously, yours is not particularly attractive, but for Yu Xianxia, your copywriting is not bad. Let's talk about the title and copy, and let's talk about the main text. After all, the main text is the key. I have to say that at first glance, I thought it was a good light-hearted fairy tale, but the more I read it, the more I felt that it was not the same thing. It was lighthearted, but the arrangement of the sentences and plot was not very reasonable. First of all, the first part is too colloquial. There are many colloquial monologues by the heroine in the article, as well as frequent words like "hey hey". What makes me feel bad is the Arabic numerals such as 5555 that appear later. These really make this article lose a lot of points. The humor written by Xianxia is currently the mainstream of attracting people, but it does not mean that it is colloquial. The words and sentences of the Xianxia light-hearted romance genre, which represents the Three Lives, Three Worlds, Jiulu Feixiang and other great gods, are very humorous and make people feel relaxed, but they are not modern colloquialism. Also, the first person appears in many places, mostly in the heroine's monologue, and after a while it becomes the third person. Such alternation makes me confused. Is it the first person or the third person? I hope the author can go back and revise it. The latter ones are much better. The secrets in the author's novel seem to have been revealed too early. The past and present life of the male and female protagonists can also be guessed a little. When reading, I don't have much expectation for the rest of the story. It is recommended that when writing the novel, pay attention to arrange the revelation of these plot secrets. You can write foreshadowing in the front, but it is not obvious and does not reveal it. Let the readers guess, for example, what happened when the heroine became a demon and the hero became a bodhisattva can be used as a foreshadowing and written bit by bit. However, since a lot of it has been revealed earlier, there will be no desire to read on. Of course, this does not mean that there are no plots that need to be revealed in the author's novel, such as what happened when the heroine was Kong Xuan, but the description of this point is not strong enough, and when I read it, I didn't have the desire to see what happened. Then there's the plot. I found the previous plot very boring, but I can't say what's wrong with it. If I jump back and watch it again, it's not a big problem! It just looks tasteless and unappealing. Then in the later Demon Realm Competition, many characters appear, and supporting characters appear one by one. There are so many characters that I can't tell who is who. I watched it for a long time and watched it over and over before I could tell. But this one was very boring to watch. I just had to tell who is who. What was said needs to be watched over and over again to understand. It can be said that I still don't understand it after watching it over and over again. As for the interaction between the male and female protagonists, some plots feel like they were written just for the interaction between the male and female protagonists. Some of the interactions between the male and female protagonists also seem to be for the sake of interaction, which has no real meaning and seems boring. Moreover, the time and place of the story changed a little quickly, and a character and a plot were introduced at once, but I didn't see anything in this story that highlighted the main line of the emotional drama between the male and female protagonists. Take the Demon Lord I am chasing as an example. There is a main line in the emotional development of the male and female protagonists, that is, the male protagonist wants to resurrect his enemy, while the female protagonist has a powerful soul and can flexibly breathe in a body made of soil, and then unfold a series of subsequent stories, and the emotional development of the male and female protagonists. But the big one, how should I put it, the main line is unclear. From the heroine attending the party, to the hero going to the Daming Palace, to the Donghua Emperor's party, to the demon clan competition, and then the attack on Penglai Fairy Mountain, etc., There is no clear main line connecting the series of plots before and after. They are very scattered and incoherent. The author can easily find a main line to connect these plots. Also, there are too many psychological descriptions of the male and female protagonists, especially in the previous part. In many places, the psychological descriptions of the male and female protagonists are re-written without any substantive content. It is taboo to describe too much in the mind when writing an article, as it feels like trying to make up the word count. After all, what readers are looking for is the plot, not the psychological analysis of a blockbuster movie. Moreover, the inner thoughts are written too clearly, and a lot of fun is lost. It is difficult to resonate with the story, and it is difficult to think and feel from the perspective of the protagonist. Let's talk about the characters. I have to say one more thing. In just 90,000 words, there are too many characters. Whether you can remember them or not is one thing. But what is the significance of these characters' appearance? I feel like the male and female protagonists have to interact with each other in terms of recognition, and there are so many characters, which will make readers irritated. I suggest the author greatly simplify the characters! Then there is the characterization, the image of the male protagonist has become more facial-shaped. Except for the initial descriptions of the front and side, it is not clear from the plot that the male protagonist is like that. The characterization needs more plot to portray, rather than describing it, other people describe it, and it is more about the deeds that make readers feel like this, so they will really like this character. The same goes for the heroine, whose personality is fiery and willful, but there are also contradictions in other aspects. For example, the heroine doesn't like to practice, but later it is said that she is among the top ones. This is a contradiction! Or maybe I'm remembering it wrong. As for the dialogue between the male and female protagonists, it is even more difficult to tell their personalities. Sometimes, it feels like there are still two people in front of them. I hope to put more effort into characterization, not to be too facialistic, but to integrate it with the plot and highlight the character through dialogue and actions. Let me mention that Xiao Ru has a good image and is cute, which is a must-have cuteness tool in fairy tales. The author can write more about him, make him more cute, and he can also be an important role in regulating the relationship between the male and female protagonists. Overall, the author's writing style is very good and attractive. The writing style is also good. There is no cluttering of words or descriptions of novices. The descriptions are just right and the writing is smooth, so you can read it naturally. I hope that the author will write better and better in the future, and this book will be on the gold list. ——Simmiao Changpingpu Bandit Jun places the order
Is Ke Ke a little too cruel? (It's not normal to be cruel!!!!!!!!!)