The Departed Soul Lamp

Congratulations on the completion, looking forward to new articles

Yangqin Jiang, congratulations on the completion~

Come on, you are so perseverant. I give you a thumbs up~~ You are a cute little angel.

I passed by by chance and was touched by the author's great persistence. I've already collected it. I hope you won't be cheated, arrogant or arrogant. I will continue to work hard to look after you, okay~

Big, remember the colon or comma. Big cheers.

The author is quite willing to spend 180,000 yuan on a single machine. I specially contributed to collect four of them. Come on.

Comment on "I love you most without knowing it - Li Po Lantern" Umm... First of all, I don't need to introduce myself. We are all old customers anyway. The fairy who picked up the dulcimer this time feels cute. However, after reading more than ten chapters and delaying my review for so long, I really... Okay, without further ado, let's get started—— Yang Qin, your writing style is still very good. You can write a sense of humor and a feeling that can make people smile in this kind of love-hate story. The overall feeling of the article is very attractive, but why are the click-through rate and collection so low? Let's take a look~ First of all, it's the name of the article... Overall, this name is too long. You can go to a name shop to ask for a name or just change it to Li Po Deng. It's convenient, simple and can also give you a sense of mystery. And pinch, although you yourself said that your character's name is difficult to pronounce, but you insist on doing it, I won't say anything. ①Copywriting. The layout of the copy is a bit messy, I hope it can be rearranged~ ②The genre of the article does not mean that it can be arbitrary. The subject of this article is Xianxia, ​​which is still not very popular at present. If an article like this is well written, it will be a shining pearl among the many revenge and rebirth and time-travel works. However, it is difficult to grasp an article like this well, because there are too many illusory elements, which will make the work seem to go beyond the love and hate in the human world. I hope you can grasp the scale of Yangqin, don't be too unrealistic, and occasionally add real human emotions into it... For example, the story of Yinrao and Xiqi going to a brothel is a bit unreal... Moreover, the world you describe is too simple and lacks the complexity of the real world. I hope it can be improved. ③The characters' priorities are confusing. Because of your worldview, God treats the demon clan badly in every possible way, so Yinrao's innocence and cuteness are a rare sight. But so far, the real female pig trotters have not appeared. I have already fallen in love with the female supporting role. What the hell is going on... And from the beginning, it seems that Liang Ruo is ashamed of Yinrao, so my rating for the female protagonist has plummeted... Maybe you want to write a four-person love story with all kinds of troubles, but this will also cause trouble to readers. ④The plot is too hasty. The plots so far are all about a team of two demons and one person looking for the Lipo Lantern. Although the main line is clear, the stories that happened on the way are too brief to leave a deep impact on the readers. Moreover, why Mo Li wants to go with them is not clearly expressed... He Qi believes in Yinrao so easily and goes with her, which is also a bit mishandled. Moreover, the world is so big and there is no need for a little swordsman who has not yet become an immortal to save the common people. The world has not yet become chaotic and it is necessary to save the common people. This is still a bit chaotic. ⑤The angle of psychological description shifts. From these ten chapters, it seems that you mainly describe the psychological activities of Yinrao, but sometimes you also intersperse those of Yinluo and Moli, which makes the reading a bit confusing for readers. I hope you can learn from the POV perspective of writing to describe the stories of the protagonists from a very objective or intuitive perspective. ⑥Incorrect details. I have lost to you in terms of typos... I hope to read it carefully after finishing a chapter. Here is a mistake to correct: after Yiqi fell into the well, when Yinrao went to save him and was stopped by Mo Li, she should have said "I am going to save the little swordsman" instead of "the little tree demon"... It is indeed difficult to transform as a contemporary writer, but I believe that if you write more, practice your writing, and think more about the reasonableness of the plot, you will be able to write a story that is more satisfying to you and the readers~ One more thing, I really like Yangqin's writing style of describing love and hatred, as if such feelings have truly existed in this land, please continue to work hard! ! ! Typos King Changpingpu BY Xiaodai

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Accepted~mark first~ Take your time and watch~ Come on~

Some people don't understand who is the protagonist. Also, what is the plot? However, it's still a thumbs up! !