Feeding Your Loyalty to a Wolf

Qing Ge, I just finished reading your book. I want to say a lot, and all I want to say are your bad points. I hope you won't be angry if you say it too harshly. First of all, let me tell you your story. The story is actually good, but your narration is a bit poor, which makes your story very confusing. After reading it, I don't know which parts of your story are the main plot and which are the secondary plots. Then let's talk about the characters. Some of the characters are not prioritized. Either they are all the protagonists, or a character suddenly appears in a chapter and then explains who the character is. The arrangement is improper. When a story is told, some characters will definitely appear. You need to explain in advance who these characters are and arrange their appearances, but you put them all together, so the originally messy article becomes even more messy. Finally, let me talk about your narrative angle. This is what makes me feel the worst. The angle of your writing is a spatial narrative (I can't express what I mean and I found a word). It is not the traditional first person or third person. This angle requires time and space. However, your entire article is told in the third person, but it is not just a third person. Many times what you write feels like a first-person running account. This is a large part of the reason why your story is confusing. Another thing is that you sometimes focus on the description of the surrounding environment, but rarely describe the psychological changes of the characters. I feel that this needs to be changed. Well, that's pretty much it. Qingge, don't be angry with my poisonous tongue. Hey-hey . It's still good, keep it up.

- - Dear, Lin Zixiao or Li Zixiao?

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