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The psychological description is very real, like a person's inner struggle, and it feels a bit dry and wild. .

I read DaDa's columns bit by bit. I really like DaDa. The latest update of this article seems to be a year ago. Is qaq a scam? Qaq

This writing style is so similar to that of the author of "Fight Club". It's so touching~ Come on, author~

Wandering between life and death, and then discovering the absurdity in it. I think there's nothing wrong with the author's story, I like it. But it just doesn't suit Jinjiang's writing style. Maybe you can find a balance between uniqueness and popular taste, and add a stronger emotional line to the story, which will make it more engaging.

The author's cover gave Mu Yan the impression that this was an article leaning towards the dark series. Mu Yan read the article written by the author as a reader, and just like what Mu Yan felt and what the author said in the introduction, the whole audience really had a cynical and slightly dark humor. The author also introduced the direction of this article in detail in the introduction. The protagonist was wrongly accused of being a murderer while rescuing people. It was also identified that the author used flashback in the first chapter to reveal the protagonist's outcome in court. Leave room for imagination for readers to imagine. The author chose a good topic for this article, but he did not express it well. Jinjiang's clicks never lie. Can the author check whether your article is popular? Regarding your article, Mu Yan suggested that you watch a movie, which might change your problem of writing the article. The theme of this movie is very similar to your idea of ​​writing the article, so you can go and watch it. It's called "Death is Coming." The author wrote this article in the first person, but he didn't grasp it well. It feels a bit like you are talking to yourself. This is not good. For this kind of article, Mu Yan suggested that it should be written from the perspective of a god. Because the perspective is omnidirectional. The protagonist written by the author is like a holy mother, who knows everyone's ending, but has incredible delusions to change their destiny, but never changes the right one. Instead, he puts himself into a position from which he cannot retreat. Even if the protagonist wants to change, his efforts are too little. Even if the protagonist has tried his best, the bloody thing is that the protagonist is too merciful. What does it matter to him if others die? But he still blamed himself for the mistake. Moreover, the protagonist's inner description is not well highlighted. Since he was wronged, when the author describes it, his facial expressions, actions, and demeanor are all too straightforward and not vivid. Since it is written in the first person, the psychological activities of the protagonist are very important. Since the protagonist's dreams predict things that will happen in the future, and they are all bad things, only an abnormal person can face it calmly. It just so happens that the protagonist described by the author is like this. It is recommended that when writing a description of the protagonist's psychology, the author should think about what emotions you would feel if you were in his shoes. Someone once said to Mu Yan that psychological description can bring people described in straightforward words to life. Not gonna lie to you. The author has always followed the protagonist's dream and met someone in the future who died, and he went to save the person but was wrongly accused. This line has been followed. But every time there is something about the protagonist's dream prophecy, it is sudden and without any warning, which makes people find it difficult to accept. Every story you write about the protagonist's dream has only a few words and is not described carefully enough, so it ends quickly. There is too much nonsense written, and the key point cannot be grasped. It is told in a straightforward manner, and before the reader understands it, another story begins again. I don't know if Jin Jiang has smoked. I can't understand a few words that appear in some chapters, and I can't figure out what the author means. There is also a male pig's trotter who dreams that a female pig's trotter will be hurt and wants to save the heroine. Looking at this, Mu Yan finally felt that this was like a romance novel. The author finally pulled the heroine out, and then described the fight scene where they first met, the protagonist's movements, the expressions of other people, and their hearts. . . Wait for some descriptions. These are details, and they are not described carefully at all. Moreover, in conversations between people, punctuation is forgotten and the format is wrong. There are also some minor problems that other authors make when writing. The author should pay more attention when writing and revise them several times. The whole article is just like the genre chosen by the author. It is a serious drama, revealing a touch of seriousness and a touch of warmth under the darkness of human nature. It makes people feel nonsensical but it is so natural. Mu Yan is very lucky to have the opportunity to evaluate your article, author, please do your best. [Caramel is not sweet, long review shop BY Mu Yan]

GJ Did I grab the total SFHey? I'll read your article in a few days = 333 = I had a hard time in the high school entrance examination... = =