[Prince of Tennis] The Notebook

Feel. . . Azang and Yui are fine together

By the way, this novel was actually written 10 years ago

Ah ah ah ah, sweet and cruel, but fortunately the ending is good 😚 😚 😚

Wow, it still looks great when I watch it again after so many years.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhh, the Lord and Xiao Wei are finally together!! Every time we thought we were going to be together, a bunch of misunderstandings arose. One misunderstanding after another was so long that I almost abandoned the article several times in the middle. Later, I didn't realize that I was so heartbroken that I still missed my Lord. From a personal point of view, it really felt like unrequited love, but fortunately my Lord also liked Xiao Wei. I really want to see the post-marriage episode between the Lord and Xiao Wei.

Congratulations on the ending, hehe, even though it has been over for a long time, I still want to say this. At first, I thought Shiraishi and Yui would be good together, but I didn't expect that they would end up together with Aoi. I really want to see the side story of Shiraishi and Aoi~~~ There is also the white-haired fox. The fox and Aoi didn't like each other in the beginning. Hehe~ Yukimura and Niou are the ones who have been studied and understood the most in Net King. Yukimura is very restored~~ Although there are occasional mistakes, these are the most restored ones I have seen in all Net King articles [laughs] Come on!!

Boundary

The bed that the TAT hero slept on... I want to frame it after the hero leaves!!!

In fact, the writing is good, and there are so few comments. People who liked Internet King back then have entered the society, but now they have become less popular. I am still reading this kind of article, even though I have not watched anime for many years, come on.

Today's dessert, if it offends me, please forgive me. Your copywriting is in order, full of youthful literary and artistic feeling, a little moist and touching, so your main text should be fresh and exciting. I like your previous style very much. It's like listening to someone tell a true and beautiful story. The language and text are very beautiful, and the writing style is speechless. But after one or two chapters of the text, your shortcomings become apparent. Irregular use of punctuation marks. The most common way is to put periods in a row as ellipses. The sentence is inconsistent with the person. For example, this: As if the secret was discovered, I felt a little ashamed and angry, and quickly hid the phone behind my back. Since I am talking about myself, I should know in my heart whether it is a secret to myself or not. It seems inappropriate to use "like". Many people make this mistake when writing first-person essays. The subject is "I" but they use the perspective of others. Also, there are some actions that you cannot notice by yourself, so you have to use other people's words to bring them up, and try to make "my" actions and psychology grounded. The progress is too fast. We obviously don't have much contact with each other, but now we can start joking and complaining about each other. Japan is a place that pays great attention to etiquette, and your writing is very realistic. At the beginning, you should address the other person as [surname + classmate], but Yukimura calls the heroine Xiao Wei very intimately. On the rooftop, from the first-person perspective, the heroine and Yukimura are not very familiar with each other, but Yukimura naturally joked that he would give the heroine water from the water pipe to scare the heroine. Even if he wanted to tease the heroine, his sinister nature was revealed too quickly, not to mention that the other party was not an outgoing girl. Your advantage is that you don't have a Mary Sue at all, and your character design is great. Xiao Wei and Xiao Kui are both cute. I like Xiao Kui as a little angel! I always feel that the direct interaction between the protagonist and Xiaokui is very natural and cute. The writing style of this article is very distinctive, with literature and art coexisting with complaints. Some of the complaints are very funny. My favorite is spicy sentences, so I will hang myself with a noodle. The new skill "Get" will be used like this next time. The lyrical part is touching my heart. Even if there are some inappropriate parts in the previous text, I will still be very moved when I see the lyricism. The interaction + lyricism is a great combination of sweetness and abuse, especially the ending is very touching, which makes people feel enlightened and without regrets. The disadvantage is that sometimes the connection between narration and complaints is not very natural. It is recommended to practice more and chew on it repeatedly. A slight modification will make this style of writing add a lot of points to your article. Some unnecessary sentences can be deleted to make your article more concise. There is no need to squeeze together large paragraphs. Important sentences should be presented separately. Be more interactive and make the progress look more natural, showing your true nature step by step. Read the article over and over again to see if there is anything wrong or correct it. Judging from your entire book, you have made some progress in the later period, so as long as you go back and read it from beginning to end, you will definitely find a lot of things that can be corrected, such as typos, grammatical errors, inconsistent dialogue and actions, etc. Because you are a fan, you need to be careful not to be OOC, and have a better understanding of the character's psychology, what traits the character has, and under what circumstances will that trait manifest itself. In my opinion, Brother Cun is a cool, confident and easy-going king who always looks at the world at his feet calmly. The interaction between the village brother and the heroine in your novel is also very cute. It would be better if they could be more reserved. Chef-Mo Ye