Have you ever met a man like this?
He ruled the business world, yet was also a gang boss.
He was your teacher, too.
You pursued him passionately and recklessly, and as it happened, he loved you too.
You were married for four years, then left with the daughter growing inside you,
all because he was the enemy who killed your father and left your family shattered.
Your mission is to make sure his home knows no peace.
***, Years Gone By, ***
Ji Lang: I haven't seen a woman as pure as Chen Sizhen in a long time.
Ye Yizhen: I never imagined that relationship could last so long.
I love the woman who carries the scent of chamomile, no matter what.
Ningning: I just hope my mom is happy. That way, I can be happy too.
But she's never said she isn't happy. I know she's keeping it all inside.
Chen Siting: My older sister is actually in a lot of pain.
Chen Sizhen: All my life, I've felt that I was wrong.
Born wrong, hated wrong, and loved wrong.
Ji Lang's words:
Copywriting The cover of the article is really too simple. I suggest you go to a photo shop or an artist to make it more formal. It can be seen from the bottom map that this is an old track, a little desolate and a little dark, which is just in line with the title of the article "The Passage of Time". People can't help but think of Nalan's poem "Yulin Ling": After so many years, it should be a good time and good scenery, but even if there are thousands of customs, who can tell me. This is really one of my favorite poems, and the title is relatively literary. However, after reading the contents of the copy, you will find that there are many things and climaxes in the article. "Have you ever met such a man? He is a powerful businessman but he is also the leader of a gang. At the same time, he is your teacher. You pursue him passionately and crazily and he happens to be in love with you. You have been married to him for four years but you still have the daughter in your belly. "My son left just because he was your father-killing enemy and broke up your family. Your mission is to make his family unstable." It involved business wars, adultery, and the love and marriage between teachers and students, but in the end you left with the child in your belly. The reason is - he has the hatred of killing his father. (Why do I feel like there are thunderous thunders and a lot of blood-_-|||) I have some suggestions for copywriting. The distribution in the copywriting is very good. In fact, you can add a word - [plot version] - in front of the first paragraph, and a word - [dialogue version] - in front of the following paragraph. This will really make it look much more comfortable. Also, the star symbols in the middle look very redundant. It is recommended to remove them and try to be as concise as possible. You can also study the code for font color and size, which will be better. Text The article starts with the divorce and then goes on to the previous memories. I don't know how A Zhen's father endured the pain of those 72 knives until the last second of his life. 72 Knives, how painful it must be. The suicide of Azhen's mother was also shocking. Love goes deep, life and death depend on each other. How affectionate it must be to be willing to give up your life just to follow the person you love the most. It's just that all this left too much trauma in Ah Zhen's heart. Her father's mysterious death, coupled with the subsequent death of her mother, the death of her parents ignited her desire for revenge, so she began to get closer to the male protagonist little by little. In the end, as she wished, she got together with him and got married. It's just not as beautiful as she imagined. In the end, he became her father-killing enemy. There will be as much hate as there is love. This love called revenge ended in divorce. After meeting again after many years, we can only resolve all misunderstandings in the future. I just hope that the male protagonist can be strong enough and the female protagonist can be at ease enough (I also felt a twitch when I saw the female protagonist saying on the phone that she was afraid of their family TUT) Overall Some suggestions: There are some problems with punctuation marks in some parts of the text. It is also recommended to leave blank lines between paragraphs. When the scene changes, just use some asterisks or other symbols to separate them, so that it does not look too crowded. And when I was writing about the initial love story between the male and female protagonists, I felt that it was a bit watered down and the number of words was a bit short. Instead, I felt that they got together very quickly and got married very hastily, just like they divorced. The overall feeling given to me by Wenwen is that this is a story that is a collection of many stories, and no part of it is worth savoring. The author's writing style is naturally excellent, and I hope that the author will use his own unique writing style to reveal the ending for us. Finally I will continue to read this article if I like it. Please don't update carelessly after the college entrance examination. Come on, good luck in the college entrance examination. I wish you good results and wait for you to come back -v- By___good products&somepian
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After all these years, it should be a false display of good times and beautiful scenery Even though there are thousands of styles Who else should I tell?
Come and collect the article, then dive in silently to read the article~~
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The first chapter feels so good ~ Come on!
Happy New Year, I'll take a seat first
Oops, the prospect is finally over. Let's finally get to the main text, right?
Hahaha~so cool~prompt!