Review of "Bloody Dreams" - Dreams and Reality
Hello, sir, you are so polite now, wave your handkerchief~
Ahem, this is the first short article Su Niu has received ~ [This can be considered a first time for Niu. . . Cough. . .
Stamp below the text:
First of all, the girl is the ancient style control, and secondly, the girl is the white clothes control, and thirdly, [you are so talented! , Niu also loves the sad tone of the novel.
Because the article is very short, there is no way to include as many detailed descriptions as in a long novel, but the first impression that Xu Yuan in white gave the girl was that of mystery!
Appear from time to time, and then. . . There is no more. [Is he an immortal? Still a human lady? The girl is having sex without moral integrity. . .
When I first started watching it, it seemed like a loving couple. The last thing I should watch is the contrast between the memories and the reality. The stronger it is, the sadder it is. Is it sad to watch it?
Then the heroine is gentle, beautiful, and infatuated. Such a heroine is very sympathetic. You know, loving someone to the point of madness without any regrets is really crazy! Niu likes to read heart-warming stories or sad and cruel articles [My hobby is too extreme. . .
Sometimes reading such tragic articles will make my heart ache. . .
Well, since Weiwei has come to ask for comments, Niu should also give some opinions!!! Weiwei needs to pick it up! [Girls also have a glassy heart. If they don't speak well, they can just show off and pat their faces. Brothel girls rely on this to make a living. . .
First of all, let me praise Wei Wei's writing style. The writing style is quite good. It can be seen that he has a certain foundation and uses a lot of space to write, so the description is more detailed.
But there is a drawback here, that is, because Weiwei may want to create an ancient sad atmosphere, so using a lot of writing to describe it will make people feel cumbersome, because for short stories, it is best to be concise and use appropriate descriptions to enhance the atmosphere. After all, the number of words is limited, and more writing can be used to explain the plot and characterization~
Only in this way can readers see the wonderful things without getting tired of too many gorgeous words. [Ahem, few Internet readers will carefully read an article that uses a lot of vocabulary.
… [Forgive me for being such an ancient control girl. . .
Although there are not many of these places, they will destroy the atmosphere in an instant, and the rhetoric needs to be carefully considered. If Wei Wei has time, he can read more poetry collections or original ancient sayings, and he will naturally know how to write. [The girl was led astray. Top card: Girl, are you coquettish again?
Next, let's talk about the plot. Speaking of which, the biggest highlight of Weiwei's novel is the plot. At the beginning, Niu didn't understand how she came back. Is Xu Yuan a human or a ghost, real or illusory. Moreover, the heroine suddenly acted bloodthirsty, and the girl was wondering whether the heroine was not a human being?! [Niu was reading Weiwei's article at two o'clock, and suddenly felt so scary!! Please give me a hug and comfort~
But, some of the latter ones are too common. . .
Finally, let's talk about the characters. Regarding the characters, as mentioned above, because there is a lot of writing about landscapes and so on, the character description is not enough, and the details are not enough. Xu Yuan, before telling his life experience, has a warm and arrogant atmosphere, but it is revealed after a few more words. Especially in the section about his life experience, the language is too vernacular, so that Niu cannot feel the ancient flavor and the arrogance.
In the end, when Niu finally knew who was a human and who was a ghost, she felt really sorry for the heroine. The reason why the dream is a dream is because it can never come true. The reason why the heroine lives in a dream is because she knows that Xu Yuan is dead and cannot accept it. What a pair of miserable mandarin ducks! Inner Cow Manmian 55555
By the way, at first Niu thought it was a story about a noble lady and a scholarly boy having an unresolved affair, but it turned out that it also triggered a vendetta in the world, and it turned out that the girl was also a master. [Sure enough, you can't underestimate the supporting roles!
Finally, I hope Weiwei's writing will get better and better, her writing style will become more and more mature, and I'll give you sweet kisses from the girl~mua~ [Don't dislike the Lun family~
——The 12th Brothel——
Sweet girl
Review of "Bloody Dreams" - Dreams and Reality Hello, sir, you are so polite now, wave your handkerchief~ Ahem, this is the first short article Su Niu has received ~ [This can be considered a first time for Niu. . . Cough. . . Stamp below the text: First of all, the girl is the ancient style control, and secondly, the girl is the white clothes control, and thirdly, [you are so talented! , Niu also loves the sad tone of the novel. Because the article is very short, there is no way to include as many detailed descriptions as in a long novel, but the first impression that Xu Yuan in white gave the girl was that of mystery! Appear from time to time, and then. . . There is no more. [Is he an immortal? Still a human lady? The girl is having sex without moral integrity. . . When I first started watching it, it seemed like a loving couple. The last thing I should watch is the contrast between the memories and the reality. The stronger it is, the sadder it is. Is it sad to watch it? Then the heroine is gentle, beautiful, and infatuated. Such a heroine is very sympathetic. You know, loving someone to the point of madness without any regrets is really crazy! Niu likes to read heart-warming stories or sad and cruel articles [My hobby is too extreme. . . Sometimes reading such tragic articles will make my heart ache. . . Well, since Weiwei has come to ask for comments, Niu should also give some opinions!!! Weiwei needs to pick it up! [Girls also have a glassy heart. If they don't speak well, they can just show off and pat their faces. Brothel girls rely on this to make a living. . . First of all, let me praise Wei Wei's writing style. The writing style is quite good. It can be seen that he has a certain foundation and uses a lot of space to write, so the description is more detailed. But there is a drawback here, that is, because Weiwei may want to create an ancient sad atmosphere, so using a lot of writing to describe it will make people feel cumbersome, because for short stories, it is best to be concise and use appropriate descriptions to enhance the atmosphere. After all, the number of words is limited, and more writing can be used to explain the plot and characterization~ Only in this way can readers see the wonderful things without getting tired of too many gorgeous words. [Ahem, few Internet readers will carefully read an article that uses a lot of vocabulary. … [Forgive me for being such an ancient control girl. . . Although there are not many of these places, they will destroy the atmosphere in an instant, and the rhetoric needs to be carefully considered. If Wei Wei has time, he can read more poetry collections or original ancient sayings, and he will naturally know how to write. [The girl was led astray. Top card: Girl, are you coquettish again? Next, let's talk about the plot. Speaking of which, the biggest highlight of Weiwei's novel is the plot. At the beginning, Niu didn't understand how she came back. Is Xu Yuan a human or a ghost, real or illusory. Moreover, the heroine suddenly acted bloodthirsty, and the girl was wondering whether the heroine was not a human being?! [Niu was reading Weiwei's article at two o'clock, and suddenly felt so scary!! Please give me a hug and comfort~ But, some of the latter ones are too common. . . Finally, let's talk about the characters. Regarding the characters, as mentioned above, because there is a lot of writing about landscapes and so on, the character description is not enough, and the details are not enough. Xu Yuan, before telling his life experience, has a warm and arrogant atmosphere, but it is revealed after a few more words. Especially in the section about his life experience, the language is too vernacular, so that Niu cannot feel the ancient flavor and the arrogance. In the end, when Niu finally knew who was a human and who was a ghost, she felt really sorry for the heroine. The reason why the dream is a dream is because it can never come true. The reason why the heroine lives in a dream is because she knows that Xu Yuan is dead and cannot accept it. What a pair of miserable mandarin ducks! Inner Cow Manmian 55555 By the way, at first Niu thought it was a story about a noble lady and a scholarly boy having an unresolved affair, but it turned out that it also triggered a vendetta in the world, and it turned out that the girl was also a master. [Sure enough, you can't underestimate the supporting roles! Finally, I hope Weiwei's writing will get better and better, her writing style will become more and more mature, and I'll give you sweet kisses from the girl~mua~ [Don't dislike the Lun family~ ——The 12th Brothel—— Sweet girl