When the Dust Settles (Fu Ye/Alternate Republic of China)

Score and wait for the author girl to come back

These are still small characters, Aunt Shen and so on, I think they are not sad enough. I don't feel overjoyed that the third child is back. I think there will be further development after the third child is back, so let this family be brought down quickly. (Feeling good or bad about me) The vague words of the old man are very well written. I wonder if there could be a short dialogue between Fu Zhong and Wen Ju. In the first part, these two are the main characters. Without dialogue, I feel that the characters are not very fleshed out.

The speed increased in the last three sections, which was very, very good. This chapter is written very cleanly, without any sloppiness.

Everyone in the forum commented very well, so I'm embarrassed to reply, so I decided to come back here tomorrow. The original poster remembered that there are still people here who are following the article.

The first part is as joyful as telling a story, and the two children in the middle are acting cute one after another, and finally bring unlimited possibilities to the following part. It's nice to have your control back.

The progress is evenly matched. Thank you to the author for your hard work.

So exciting! The descriptions in the previous episodes are wonderful, and this one is far better than the description of lying in bed and listening to the rain; Ye Kaixiao's thoughts throughout 3/4 are wonderful, and Xiaohong's thoughts are also described very delicately, in line with the character; the last chapter is chaotic without losing the backbone, which is wonderful. I think removing the part with Yan'er in the middle won't affect anything. "Don't talk about you, you stupid son, isn't he the one named Hua who lives in the house outside the Mawang Temple?" There are some words in this sentence that are not displayed, and there are several more in the whole sentence. It may be a problem with the MAC system.

Happy New Year, girl! Happy New Year, I love Fu Ye, and I also love the girl's writing =3=

Is the girl editing the article and posting it at the same time? No matter what, it's great that the girl can repost it!

I'm here to support you. Shenma is so rigorous in checking the information. I'll read it carefully later!