[Reborn!] A Ray of Light Within Reach

It's so touching, even though I don't understand it at all

In fact, I don't think I can say that 59 is a scumbag... After all, the feelings he cannot have, whether it is love or sadness, were all erased by Kerry himself. And the feelings he had in the process of getting along should be just like what was said in the previous chapters, he is lucky, right?

The last sentence 59 What a scumbag feels like a bastard Girl, hurry up and fall into the arms of Yamamoto boy

The talented Jokudera-kun is a bad guy's slave...

This kind of emotion feels really heavy to me. I cried when I saw it. Author Sang, can you stop being so cruel? P. S. The writing is very good.

Wow, that last sentence is so disappointing!

Unreliable Changping Shop Newcomer Tail Ring is happy to serve you. First of all, I would like to thank the author for giving me this opportunity, which allowed me to exercise myself again. Okay, enough chatter, let's start the review. First of all, from the overall article, the author's ideas are very clear. At the beginning of the article and the end of the first paragraph, it seems that the plot is not connected, and there is a sense of spatial dislocation. I also had the same feeling when I finished reading the first chapter. The first reaction was that the author bluntly transformed one plot into another. However, after slowly reading the full text, I discovered that each paragraph does not exist independently. Only by contacting the full text can we discover the author's true intention and the appropriate benefits of the foreshadowing. Kerry's unfounded confession at the beginning of the article also has a reasonable explanation later in the article. I have to praise the author here. The author's explanation of the previous article did not rigidly frame a reason in the article, but a very reasonable arrangement. The reason for Kerry's confession was naturally put into the article, so that readers can easily understand it. Secondly, there are no mistakes in the construction of the characters. Bai Lan's sentence "This can form a complete circle" can reflect Bai Lan's pursuit of perfection. Anyone who has watched Tutoring knows that Bai Lan is a genius and has been playing a game all his life. "That's true," Bai Lan replied with a smile: "But it's more interesting this way, isn't it?" This fully reflects his extreme confidence as a victorious genius and his mentality of fully enjoying the game. But what attracts me is not such a completely original Bai Lan. It is Gokudera. The image of Gokudera in the original work should be that of a stubborn and arrogant person with a fierce expression, silver hair and avant-garde style. The first impression given to people is that of a delinquent. However, with in-depth understanding, we find that he is cold on the outside and hot on the inside. Although he seems to be at odds with his family members on the surface, he is actually a very smart and thoughtful person. Therefore, in the original work, except for his unreasonable admiration for Judaime, he mostly appears indifferent or fierce to others, even if the other person is a girl. But in the author's writing, I saw a different feeling of Jade Temple. There was a paragraph in the author's article where it was written that Jade Temple was preparing to go to South Africa. He looked embarrassed and didn't know what to give him. Then Kerry's answer was "It's like this every time I go away. I don't mind hearing it again." Jade Temple himself is arrogant and can't express his inner feelings. He would not appear to have a troubled expression, and he would probably end it by saying with a straight face not to cause any trouble to the Judaime. However, the Gokudera shown to us by the author was coy about this, and found that he did not know how to give instructions. This would give the audience more room to think. Surely what he wanted to tell us was not to cause trouble? Maybe not necessarily. With his arrogant character, he may prefer to let Kerry not worry. It depends on how everyone thinks. In short, the Prison Temple that appears here is not the Prison Temple in the original work, but it has not escaped from the Prison Temple. The character control is quite accurate. The last thing I want to talk about is the author's writing technique. The author did not describe an event in a plain way in the order of events. Instead, it was like Inception. The events in the previous and later contexts were connected by using an improved ten-year rocket launcher. Make the article more readable. Then let the viewers understand: this story is actually just a dream, a dream that makes us feel very desolate. This ends the review. I admire the author's writing style and hope that he will continue to do so.

Okay, I really want to cry QAQ

Well~ First of all, I would like to bow to you. I'm really sorry for commenting so late~ Long story short, let's talk about the big short story. I read the whole story several times. When I read it for the first time, I didn't understand some parts. When I read it again, I realized that there were foreshadowings, so I thought: Ah, that's good. So, overall, I rate the plot of this short story very highly! It's a very good story. Regarding detailed issues, I think the following points need great attention. First, regarding the character description, it is not broken, but it is not in-depth enough. I think the description of the relationship between Indera and the heroine can be deepened. Because it is a short story, due to the length limit, it is necessary to remember to keep the priorities clear. When I read it for the first time, what impressed me deeply was the interaction between the heroine and Yamamoto. In fact, Indera and the girl interacted a lot, but there were not many distinctive ones. In addition, I always feel that this is a bit strange about what Gokudera told his sister before going on a business trip. Gokudera doesn't seem to be the kind of person who nags (except to the nine-year-old sister). Gokudera should be a quiet person. For example, when Gokudera marries another girl, Gokudera shows very little and is very silent. But your plot setting is that Gokudera loves her, so the advice to marry his daughter is not that he doesn't understand the idea, but it reads a bit strange. Second, regarding language, An Jiang picks out a few words here - "But although Mu Si Jiali is more than ten years old, his memory is completely blank. Apart from the basic reflex activities that can sustain life, the only thing he knows is the word "Mu Si Jiali"." Here, the three turning words "but", "although" and "but" are used together, don't you think it's awkward? In addition, "Determined to raise Mushikari seriously for the Judaime, but having no experience at all - not even love experience, Gokudera Hayato went to the store and bought several boxes of parenting manuals with great enthusiasm." With no experience in caring for people and no experience in love, to be honest, An-chan doesn't feel that there is any connection between the two, and it is quite far-fetched to progress here. The last sentence, "He might still believe it if he says it is a flame of death." What he wants to express should be "Maybe he will believe it if he says it is a flame of death." Right? Of course, this is purely An Jiang's personal speculation. Third, it is basically a sentence and a paragraph, and then there is a blank line in the middle when it is time to go to the paragraph. I always feel that this form is not advisable. The above are the minor issues An Jiang saw in the article. Well, after reading it, my favorite part is that Bai Lan's sentence forms a complete circle. Just like what An Jiang said at the beginning, the overall story is very good, the antecedents, consequences, and foreshadowing effects are all great. The three points are just An Jiang's personal evaluation. I hope it can be of great help. By unheard shop name An Jiang

So said. . Bai Lan said before [This can form a complete circle. I seem to be able to insinuate something? Tilted head