The subject matter is very good and very novel, but to be honest, I felt very depressed after reading it. I am not a person who likes to comment on novels, but after reading this article, I felt very sorry. I felt that it was originally supposed to be a long article, but many places were not stated in detail. Fang didn't write in detail, and the ending seemed too hasty. I think many readers would like to see the drama after Gu Xi reunites with his parents, as well as a detailed description of the first war between him and Luo. I really want to see their various interactions during the war, stop fighting and talk about love, how nice it would be. Not much is written about the emotional development and story of the two of them, as well as his relationship with his two younger brothers, which I think is still very interesting.
Many places in the article are not explained clearly, and many places are simply dealt with. For example, the woman sent by the leader of the Guxi family to get close to Guxi only appeared for a hundred words and then there was no news at all. As for Luo's own life experience, the family and the like were explained a little bit in the previous diary. It seemed that he had a story, but later he only briefly mentioned that his sister-in-law became a stepmother. This is also a pity. Originally, I was looking forward to how he and Gu Xi would face Luo's family side by side later. As for the ending, Gu Xi's parents and brothers didn't go into detail. If we say it's open-ended, it's pretty casual. And in the end, Gu Xi gave people the feeling that he wanted a partner instead of parents and younger brothers. Not to mention that this was not handled well, it seemed very inconsistent with Gu Xi's character and ideas. In fact, there are some other regrets, not too big or too small. I won't go into details. It is not an exaggeration to say that this article is a typical example of a young novice choosing a good subject to write.
I feel that after reading it, I am full of pity and regret. Not to mention it is vivid and vivid, I find it a bit difficult to even be satisfied with it. For this good subject, give me a little flower.
I think if the author chooses to overhaul the article and make it detailed and exciting, many readers will flock in to read it.
The ending is quite regrettable, a lot of reluctance
This is definitely a bad ending... Tears...
In fact, I want to ask about that vicious patriarch? What about that so-called vicious woman? When I come out to make soy sauce, I have to say one, two, three, four. There is no explanation at all. I don't understand...
I just want to know if the woman who appeared after talking to Gong for a long time and holding the same child as Gong's elder is Xiao Gong's child? Why did it stop here? . . There is no explanation at all, in Chapter 74
"Luo, long time no see, are you okay?" A very sexy and mature voice interrupted Gu Xi's moment and ruined Gu Xi's newly sublimated good mood.
Gu Xi glared at Luo fiercely, and then looked at the owner of the voice. Gu Xi's hair instantly exploded at this sight.
Look, what did he see? Gu Xi looked at the two people in front of him with an extremely angry look.
One is a very mature and sexy woman, wearing a black silk floor-length skirt, and a gemstone necklace as big as a baby's fist around her neck. The 'V'-shaped open collar completely presents her neck in front of people. The high-cut skirt has long legs that are faintly visible underneath. The whole person looks emotional and charming, and he is a beauty in the world.
This is not the point, because Gu Xi has seen more beautiful women.
The key point is that the woman is holding a little boy on her hand. He looks about three or four years old. He is wearing a small black suit, which matches his short black hair and obsidian eyes. Coupled with the serious expression on the little boy's face, the whole person exudes a feeling that is very familiar to Gu Xi.
Feeling so familiar, Gu Xi glanced at the little boy, and then at the bastard next to him.
I like this article very much, but the way it handles the relationship between parents feels a little regrettable (I would say it is too understated and does not resemble the thoughts of an abandoned person). I hope the author can revise this part when he has time in the future. But life is the most important thing, so this article can only end like this (it still feels extremely pity!) Please rewrite it into the second part!
The writing is actually pretty good, but it just takes a long time to break up, and although it's not bad, it's very rushed.
In fact, this ending is not bad. This is originally a story about finding a father~~
It was written that it would end when Gu Xi found his father - this reminded me of the little dragon man (this girl is so unlucky, her journey to find her mother is endless)
I wish you all the best and have a good mood every day. See you again O(∩_∩)O~
It feels a little difficult to connect with the previous chapter...
The subject matter is very good and very novel, but to be honest, I felt very depressed after reading it. I am not a person who likes to comment on novels, but after reading this article, I felt very sorry. I felt that it was originally supposed to be a long article, but many places were not stated in detail. Fang didn't write in detail, and the ending seemed too hasty. I think many readers would like to see the drama after Gu Xi reunites with his parents, as well as a detailed description of the first war between him and Luo. I really want to see their various interactions during the war, stop fighting and talk about love, how nice it would be. Not much is written about the emotional development and story of the two of them, as well as his relationship with his two younger brothers, which I think is still very interesting. Many places in the article are not explained clearly, and many places are simply dealt with. For example, the woman sent by the leader of the Guxi family to get close to Guxi only appeared for a hundred words and then there was no news at all. As for Luo's own life experience, the family and the like were explained a little bit in the previous diary. It seemed that he had a story, but later he only briefly mentioned that his sister-in-law became a stepmother. This is also a pity. Originally, I was looking forward to how he and Gu Xi would face Luo's family side by side later. As for the ending, Gu Xi's parents and brothers didn't go into detail. If we say it's open-ended, it's pretty casual. And in the end, Gu Xi gave people the feeling that he wanted a partner instead of parents and younger brothers. Not to mention that this was not handled well, it seemed very inconsistent with Gu Xi's character and ideas. In fact, there are some other regrets, not too big or too small. I won't go into details. It is not an exaggeration to say that this article is a typical example of a young novice choosing a good subject to write. I feel that after reading it, I am full of pity and regret. Not to mention it is vivid and vivid, I find it a bit difficult to even be satisfied with it. For this good subject, give me a little flower. I think if the author chooses to overhaul the article and make it detailed and exciting, many readers will flock in to read it.
The ending is quite regrettable, a lot of reluctance
This is definitely a bad ending... Tears...
In fact, I want to ask about that vicious patriarch? What about that so-called vicious woman? When I come out to make soy sauce, I have to say one, two, three, four. There is no explanation at all. I don't understand...
I just want to know if the woman who appeared after talking to Gong for a long time and holding the same child as Gong's elder is Xiao Gong's child? Why did it stop here? . . There is no explanation at all, in Chapter 74 "Luo, long time no see, are you okay?" A very sexy and mature voice interrupted Gu Xi's moment and ruined Gu Xi's newly sublimated good mood. Gu Xi glared at Luo fiercely, and then looked at the owner of the voice. Gu Xi's hair instantly exploded at this sight. Look, what did he see? Gu Xi looked at the two people in front of him with an extremely angry look. One is a very mature and sexy woman, wearing a black silk floor-length skirt, and a gemstone necklace as big as a baby's fist around her neck. The 'V'-shaped open collar completely presents her neck in front of people. The high-cut skirt has long legs that are faintly visible underneath. The whole person looks emotional and charming, and he is a beauty in the world. This is not the point, because Gu Xi has seen more beautiful women. The key point is that the woman is holding a little boy on her hand. He looks about three or four years old. He is wearing a small black suit, which matches his short black hair and obsidian eyes. Coupled with the serious expression on the little boy's face, the whole person exudes a feeling that is very familiar to Gu Xi. Feeling so familiar, Gu Xi glanced at the little boy, and then at the bastard next to him.
I like this article very much, but the way it handles the relationship between parents feels a little regrettable (I would say it is too understated and does not resemble the thoughts of an abandoned person). I hope the author can revise this part when he has time in the future. But life is the most important thing, so this article can only end like this (it still feels extremely pity!) Please rewrite it into the second part!
The writing is actually pretty good, but it just takes a long time to break up, and although it's not bad, it's very rushed.
In fact, this ending is not bad. This is originally a story about finding a father~~
It was written that it would end when Gu Xi found his father - this reminded me of the little dragon man (this girl is so unlucky, her journey to find her mother is endless) I wish you all the best and have a good mood every day. See you again O(∩_∩)O~
It feels a little difficult to connect with the previous chapter...