This is the story of Hibari crossing over into the real world, claiming territory, collecting money, and eventually ruling it.
...Ahem, no, that's wrong. It should be...
The story of Hibari crossing over into the real world, calmly sipping tea, taking it over, and raising a mild-mannered, expressionless little sidekick.
·Yunyan says that surviving under the claws of a ferocious beast means keeping your worldview from being bent out of shape by Hibari, while also making sure your face doesn't get beaten out of shape·
"This is our city-state, filled with our faith and love."
"It takes the floating clouds for its bones, and Yunyan to build its frame."
"It is the city-state I have devoted my life to serving, until death."
Please note:
◇This is the bittersweet journey of a heroine evolving from a scatterbrain into a calm, razor-tongued commentator.
◇A firm one-on-one romance and a firm happy ending.
◇There are plenty of clichéd, naive scenes. Please come equipped with your own warning system. Thanks for cooperating.
◇Completed on 2013.07.08.
Help, this character design of the beautiful girl is so gorgeous! Join me in worshipping Sansan Jun:
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I think the last chapter is particularly beautiful and has a happy flavor
[1]
This article feels like its name, fleeting. I cried and laughed while watching it, but it wasn't so impressive that I had no idea where to start when writing a review.
... How can I put it this way? This is actually a good article. The author portrays the feelings and slight sadness between Yunyan and Yunque very deeply. The writing style is really great, and the descriptions of scenery are not like other authors who just try to make up the number of words. There are not too many descriptions of scenery in the full text, but each place is relatively targeted and can profoundly set off the mood of the protagonist at this moment; the description of the characters is also quite brilliant, and the character is relatively accurate, but it is recommended to explore it more deeply, which will be mentioned later.
The context of the full text is relatively clear, but as for the tutoring text... I felt a little dizzy when I read the chapters ten years ago and ten years later. Sorry, maybe it's a common problem for me. T T I can't figure out the messy time and space relationships in many tutoring texts. Therefore, what I looked at more carefully was the part in front where the skylark passed through.
[2]
In terms of settings... Well, does reverse travel count as a setting? In my opinion, it doesn't. There are so many people writing about it, but there are a few that really reflect the cuteness of wearing things backwards. But I'm so happy that I really found the cuteness of wearing it backwards in this article! The foreshadowing of Bingsheng Street allows the later ferocious beast Skylark to directly occupy it, which is super cool>///<
My suggestion is not to put too much effort into the parts that are too trivial and original, and forget about the gangsters in Shengjie. Jinjiang was bullied when he was a kid, and there are so many people in the COS club... In the end, except for the president, he didn't seem to mention it much, which made it feel like it has no beginning and no end. What's more, having too many original characters is a taboo in fan fiction. And if I want to attract attention, I think it might be better to try something new, such as a woman abandoned by Yukimura, a setting that can bring the male and female protagonists together. There are a lot of people writing about favorability and system mode recently, and even more people like to read it. If you don't hate it too much, I recommend giving it a try.
My favorite thing about the entire article is actually the title (face covering), which is a large group of ten words, such as "Mom, I was bullied by the paper man" and "Who said time-traveling family members are easy to cheat" and other decisive and cute points! It seems that the author is very good at coming up with titles. I wonder if he thought hard when he wrote? Each title is closely related to the content and is also very thorough when it comes to literature and rants. I really like it!
[3]
Regarding the portrayal of the characters' psychological changes, I think Yun Yan is very brilliant. How to choose between the person you like and freedom, how to face reality, she is not a strong person, even if she has an excellent hand. Her character cannot be described in four-character idioms, because just like every girl in reality, she has flesh and blood, cries and laughs.
As for Hibari, I'm a little confused. I feel like he just lived with the heroine in Binshenge Street in China. After arriving in Binshenge Street in Japan, he became possessive... Is it because I didn't look carefully and missed something? It just feels a little bit unnatural. However, Hibari's character only captures the brutal chuuni (hey) on the surface and the gentleness and domineering on the inside... These can be described in more depth. I remember reading an article about 1827 that I liked very much... I'm sorry, I can't remember the name at the moment. It just wrote the story of Skylark's second grade vividly, and the bottle cap that needs to be twisted can't be pulled off... Pfft (covering face) It feels a bit silly, but it's full of cuteness~!
[4]
It is a very touching article, but it is a bit too literary on the surface. If possible, I really hope that the author can learn from Gintama's technique. On the surface, the mainstream joyful complaints attract readers, but there is a touch of sadness on the inside.
Finally, I wish you better and better as you write =3=
How does it feel to put yourself inside? Embarrassing...
Nissan is good, bad, and cute. Fourteen, you are a pet~
Fourteen whores Nissan so envious qwq
Qwq looks great.
The endings of several households have different feelings.
Damn it... I suddenly want to see you create a hole specifically to write about Kanzaki 14 and Nissan... And which kind of loyalty is that?
You you you you! You actually... Actually... You actually voted for Nissan Q_Q! Wo, Wo also wants female votes...
It turned out to be the right thing to come and see after dinner!
She should be called Kanzaki 14th Mother
Nissan is so cute [Hey, that's the guy who treats girls as guinea pigs
I think the last chapter is particularly beautiful and has a happy flavor
[1] This article feels like its name, fleeting. I cried and laughed while watching it, but it wasn't so impressive that I had no idea where to start when writing a review. ... How can I put it this way? This is actually a good article. The author portrays the feelings and slight sadness between Yunyan and Yunque very deeply. The writing style is really great, and the descriptions of scenery are not like other authors who just try to make up the number of words. There are not too many descriptions of scenery in the full text, but each place is relatively targeted and can profoundly set off the mood of the protagonist at this moment; the description of the characters is also quite brilliant, and the character is relatively accurate, but it is recommended to explore it more deeply, which will be mentioned later. The context of the full text is relatively clear, but as for the tutoring text... I felt a little dizzy when I read the chapters ten years ago and ten years later. Sorry, maybe it's a common problem for me. T T I can't figure out the messy time and space relationships in many tutoring texts. Therefore, what I looked at more carefully was the part in front where the skylark passed through. [2] In terms of settings... Well, does reverse travel count as a setting? In my opinion, it doesn't. There are so many people writing about it, but there are a few that really reflect the cuteness of wearing things backwards. But I'm so happy that I really found the cuteness of wearing it backwards in this article! The foreshadowing of Bingsheng Street allows the later ferocious beast Skylark to directly occupy it, which is super cool>///< My suggestion is not to put too much effort into the parts that are too trivial and original, and forget about the gangsters in Shengjie. Jinjiang was bullied when he was a kid, and there are so many people in the COS club... In the end, except for the president, he didn't seem to mention it much, which made it feel like it has no beginning and no end. What's more, having too many original characters is a taboo in fan fiction. And if I want to attract attention, I think it might be better to try something new, such as a woman abandoned by Yukimura, a setting that can bring the male and female protagonists together. There are a lot of people writing about favorability and system mode recently, and even more people like to read it. If you don't hate it too much, I recommend giving it a try. My favorite thing about the entire article is actually the title (face covering), which is a large group of ten words, such as "Mom, I was bullied by the paper man" and "Who said time-traveling family members are easy to cheat" and other decisive and cute points! It seems that the author is very good at coming up with titles. I wonder if he thought hard when he wrote? Each title is closely related to the content and is also very thorough when it comes to literature and rants. I really like it! [3] Regarding the portrayal of the characters' psychological changes, I think Yun Yan is very brilliant. How to choose between the person you like and freedom, how to face reality, she is not a strong person, even if she has an excellent hand. Her character cannot be described in four-character idioms, because just like every girl in reality, she has flesh and blood, cries and laughs. As for Hibari, I'm a little confused. I feel like he just lived with the heroine in Binshenge Street in China. After arriving in Binshenge Street in Japan, he became possessive... Is it because I didn't look carefully and missed something? It just feels a little bit unnatural. However, Hibari's character only captures the brutal chuuni (hey) on the surface and the gentleness and domineering on the inside... These can be described in more depth. I remember reading an article about 1827 that I liked very much... I'm sorry, I can't remember the name at the moment. It just wrote the story of Skylark's second grade vividly, and the bottle cap that needs to be twisted can't be pulled off... Pfft (covering face) It feels a bit silly, but it's full of cuteness~! [4] It is a very touching article, but it is a bit too literary on the surface. If possible, I really hope that the author can learn from Gintama's technique. On the surface, the mainstream joyful complaints attract readers, but there is a touch of sadness on the inside. Finally, I wish you better and better as you write =3=
How does it feel to put yourself inside? Embarrassing...
Nissan is good, bad, and cute. Fourteen, you are a pet~
Fourteen whores Nissan so envious qwq
Qwq looks great. The endings of several households have different feelings.
Damn it... I suddenly want to see you create a hole specifically to write about Kanzaki 14 and Nissan... And which kind of loyalty is that?
You you you you! You actually... Actually... You actually voted for Nissan Q_Q! Wo, Wo also wants female votes...
It turned out to be the right thing to come and see after dinner! She should be called Kanzaki 14th Mother Nissan is so cute [Hey, that's the guy who treats girls as guinea pigs
It's actually over = =