Every girl has a fairy-tale dream when she is little. This is a twisted author's bloody, tearful account of a princess named Snow White growing up and trying to survive under the threat of violence from the outside world.
The copywriting is so beautiful that it makes people want to click on it. A good start is half the battle, come on.
As for this chapter, I feel that it is a bit long-winded and mostly contains trivial matters. It could really be combined with other chapters.
If it is your first time to write an article, I think you should think carefully about what you want to write, what you must write, and what you don't need to write or can be abbreviated~~
You can make an outline first or think about what you want to write ~
I wish the girl's collection will increase greatly!
It can be said that there is an atmosphere of joy for the girl, and the tone of the whole article is also relatively joyful.
At the end, the girl also did a good job of leaving a small suspense.
As for the writing style, it's okay. There are still many places that I wish I could carefully consider and try to make each paragraph more refined.
As for the beginning of the first chapter, although the girl wrote it very delicately and seriously, Qingtian still felt that the first few paragraphs were a bit wordy and were the places that readers could easily skip. In the article, we should try to reduce the places that readers would skip so that the appearance of each paragraph and plot is not a waste.
Basically, from the copywriting, it can be seen that it is a very cheerful article, the subject matter is also relatively novel, and it is more eye-catching, which is good from this point of view, Sahua~~
I would like to suggest that you need to format the layout, otherwise it will look uncomfortable.
The copywriting is good, I have collected it in my collection
GN's copywriting is very interesting and the subject matter is novel. It can be seen that GN has a lot of imagination.
I think the reason why this article is relatively cold is that, first, the number of words in each chapter is too few, some even less than 1,000. JJ readers are generally used to more than 2,000 words per chapter. If your article is relatively long and has too many chapters, it will be inconvenient to read. Second, the first three chapters at the beginning of an article are very important. They tell the time, place and characters. Readers often judge whether to read on based on the first three chapters. The first two chapters of GN were too short, nothing was explained, and the language was relatively plain. After reading Chapter 3, I realized that the story was actually not that white, and the descriptions were quite delicate. It is recommended that GN merge the chapters, delete unnecessary self-questions and answers, and try to use objective descriptions to tell the story.
Well, the subject matter is very novel.
However, Niu Zi still wants to give some suggestions, you can take a look~
First of all, the font on the copy is a bit small and could be improved.
Furthermore, a very important word in the copy has been harmonized. It may be that the author discovered it, but Niu Zi feels that as a responsible author, he should try to modify it~
The content of the text is very interesting, cute and joyful, give it a thumbs up, come on
My first comment in my life is from Jinjiang, starry eyes!! Come up and kiss me
I just love being angry. How about having some love?
The copywriting is so beautiful that it makes people want to click on it. A good start is half the battle, come on.
As for this chapter, I feel that it is a bit long-winded and mostly contains trivial matters. It could really be combined with other chapters. If it is your first time to write an article, I think you should think carefully about what you want to write, what you must write, and what you don't need to write or can be abbreviated~~ You can make an outline first or think about what you want to write ~ I wish the girl's collection will increase greatly!
It can be said that there is an atmosphere of joy for the girl, and the tone of the whole article is also relatively joyful. At the end, the girl also did a good job of leaving a small suspense. As for the writing style, it's okay. There are still many places that I wish I could carefully consider and try to make each paragraph more refined. As for the beginning of the first chapter, although the girl wrote it very delicately and seriously, Qingtian still felt that the first few paragraphs were a bit wordy and were the places that readers could easily skip. In the article, we should try to reduce the places that readers would skip so that the appearance of each paragraph and plot is not a waste.
Basically, from the copywriting, it can be seen that it is a very cheerful article, the subject matter is also relatively novel, and it is more eye-catching, which is good from this point of view, Sahua~~
I would like to suggest that you need to format the layout, otherwise it will look uncomfortable.
The copywriting is good, I have collected it in my collection
GN's copywriting is very interesting and the subject matter is novel. It can be seen that GN has a lot of imagination.
I think the reason why this article is relatively cold is that, first, the number of words in each chapter is too few, some even less than 1,000. JJ readers are generally used to more than 2,000 words per chapter. If your article is relatively long and has too many chapters, it will be inconvenient to read. Second, the first three chapters at the beginning of an article are very important. They tell the time, place and characters. Readers often judge whether to read on based on the first three chapters. The first two chapters of GN were too short, nothing was explained, and the language was relatively plain. After reading Chapter 3, I realized that the story was actually not that white, and the descriptions were quite delicate. It is recommended that GN merge the chapters, delete unnecessary self-questions and answers, and try to use objective descriptions to tell the story.
Well, the subject matter is very novel. However, Niu Zi still wants to give some suggestions, you can take a look~ First of all, the font on the copy is a bit small and could be improved. Furthermore, a very important word in the copy has been harmonized. It may be that the author discovered it, but Niu Zi feels that as a responsible author, he should try to modify it~ The content of the text is very interesting, cute and joyful, give it a thumbs up, come on
My first comment in my life is from Jinjiang, starry eyes!! Come up and kiss me I just love being angry. How about having some love?