[Deep Love] Miss Qin

Although I accepted this article, I actually didn't like it very much from the beginning... And there are many flaws. So I guess I have to start by saying that this is going to be a bad review. And because some of the criticism is directed at the characters, it may be harder to accept. The feeling of this article is that the writing style is very immature. If I remember correctly, my last article followed Miss Mary Sue, who was also an article by Asu? The only thing that is better than Mary Sue is that it seems to have a grasp of the characters and plot from the beginning. Others are mostly the same, and I even think they are a little more childish. The first chapter opens with the unfair treatment Lu Yiping received in the Lu family. About this part. First of all, the explanation is unclear. Except that she was whipped, which she hated, and probably bullied by the woman named Wang, what else? They didn't understand anything; what was the identity of the woman named Wang, and what was Lu Yiping's identity? They discovered What happened? All is unclear. It seems like everything was mentioned, but nothing was said. The background is very thin, except Lu Yiping is a I can't see anything except a girl full of hatred. If it was meant to be a foreshadowing, it can only be said that it was done poorly. If not, that's even more of a drawback. The beginning of the novel can be confusing, but it cannot be unclear. Well, I know you may think this is fan fiction. But to be honest, I have always felt that only successful fan fiction can be understood by reading it without having read the original work. Then Qin Shu appeared. "When the car suddenly stopped, Qin Shu's body couldn't help but lean forward due to inertia. However, due to years of practice His skill made Qin Shu stunned by the unexpected situation, and then he protected himself very well without any injuries." To be honest, this sentence left me speechless. Even people with little skill will not be affected by emergency braking. At best, they will be frightened. Injuries are rare. It can be seen that the author wanted to highlight Qin Shu's special skills, but the place he used it was very inconsistent. Next, "Qin Shu has never been a kind person. She has never saved people who have nothing to do with her. There's nothing wrong with this sentence, but I think it's very... And. To be honest, not all heroines are kind and holy, but using such a description, I I feel quite childish. Is it to highlight the ruthlessness of the heroine (I think she is the heroine?)? During this period, Qin Shu didn't know who fell down or what happened to the car, but the driver in front Said: "It's just a person." Putting aside whether you want to save someone, it "seems" that you have to get out of the car to check if you hit someone. It should be a normal thing. Even if you are gay, no matter how negligent you are about life, this is not the way to do it. The plot here is very strange and unrealistic. Then there is the passage that Lu Yiping made before she fell into coma. Which person before falling into coma could finish that passage sonorously and forcefully... I was speechless when I saw this. Beyond the plot, just focus on the characters' roles. Before I saw the driver called Miss Qin Shu, I would have thought Lu Yiping was the heroine. Her role is too heavy. I can't grasp it well... Well, I can't think of words at the moment, maybe it's been typed out? ... Before, try to focus on the main The character's role is the beginning. Personally, I am still confused about who the protagonist is after reading one or two articles, which is usually a big reason why I abandon the article. There are many small bugs in the back, so I won't list them one by one. There are also many unreasonable statements. Either it's nonsense or it feels like "what is this sentence about?" A lot of no Shun. For example, Chapter 2 "It's just that now is not the time to think about whether this world is the past of her original world, she What she needs to think about is - what should she do in the face of this brain-dead world? " The deduction is not smooth, and this sentence is also very strange. First of all, in the first half of the sentence, there is no need for Qin Shu to think about whether it is the original world, because she has already finished thinking and finished the sentence. The conclusion is drawn; and with all due respect, looking at me I think Qin Shu is quite stupid. In many ways, she was really suitable for that world. STYLE... For example, the neglect of human life, for example, it is actually a bit of a prestige and a blessing. In many cases, the author may love the character very much and may not want to describe it this way, but readers will recognize these feelings. For example, regarding the previous issue of human life, I think the author just wanted to describe Qin Shu's indifference? She looks like the daughter of Mr. Qin Wu, Looks particularly handsome and so on. But actually, it's pretty stupid. Qin Shu is very selfish. In fact, he is just like Lu Yiping. In many descriptions, Qin Shu looked down on Lu Yiping, but he In fact, the same adjective can be applied to Qin Shu. Qin Shu gives me the impression that he is a very egotistical and pretentious character. Oh, and also, you can't smile gently by curling up the corners of your lips. Well, finally, let's end with the good points... The role of Qin Mu is probably the most successful one created. ... Is it possible to guess that the author has a reference person, or a character in mind? The phrase "Only love one person" is quite romantic. Quite dreamy but beautiful. After reading my own review, I want to say that maybe it was because there were so many shortcomings at the beginning. There are not so many shortcomings in the back, but I can't find any special highlights. But the back end is much smoother, and the problems are similar to the front, but not as obvious. I stopped watching it after joining V. But it's true that it gets smoother as you get to the back, maybe it's because you're more in control? Anyway. Keep up the good work. [Abb Little Monster Picture Review Club|Dai Toutu] 2012.09.23

I really like reading anti-QY fanfics. . It's great to torture NC, it's very relaxing. . Although I also hate various NCs in QYNN books. . But I hate the time-travel heroine who pretends to be calm, pretends to be aloof, and pretends to be 13. . He looks down and laughs at the people in the play, thinking he is superior to them. . It seems like the heroine is so unworldly. . In fact, she is full of flaws when doing this, and she is almost equated with NC. . All right. I'm just a little tired of the heroine setting. . This article is really not my cup of tea. . The author worked hard to write the article. . Score and leave, just make bricks. .

The heroine is too pretentious and puts pressure on the readers...

Talking to an NC will lower your tone and damage your IQ! The heroine of the author is so calm, so she should ignore them

The heroine is pretending to be 13, I hate people like this the most, and can you not write so much about psychological activities?

Qin Shu can't really go blind like this, right? No, he must be cured.

After reading the two words "Ending", I thought it was over, but luckily I didn't keep it.

Pointing to each other] Actually, I have been wondering whether Ouyang has fallen in love with Qin Mu...

Wangtian] It seems that I was wrong... I always thought that a land with singers was considered a place of romance.

I have always been confused, Shanghai Beach can be considered a vocal music venue, Qin Wuye is Ashu's father, it makes sense for Ashu to appear in Shanghai Beach, but it is too weird for this well-educated young lady Lu Ruping to come to Shanghai Beach...