Stealing Destiny

Come on, baby. It's interesting to write. I think it's very good. I'll read it slowly. Baby, you must keep writing. Come on, come on, you are the best [shy]

Isn't there really an emotional scene in Gongshou? Woo woo woo woo [heartbroken]

I can't do it anymore, I only like to watch the plot of attacking and receiving [poor]

Photo taken on 2025.4.19~

Has it only been a day since the story started here? So much happened! Qin Rang met Ye Buqi and was injured yesterday, and then returned to Bian Town. Liu Yisheng asked Liu Huaiyu to convey the news of his visit. It should have happened yesterday. News of the attack in Bian Town reached the Liu family today. Zhou also wrote a letter urging the Liu family to look for Ye, and then found that Ye and his master were missing [Afraid] So many things happened in just one day? [Afraid] I thought it had been several days. [Afraid] The plot is too tight.

The author's writing is pretty good

Come on, baby, write boldly

Didn't the head of the Liu family say before that he was not sure and let the third lady judge whether it was a real fire? He also said that the real fire is not that easy to suppress. Why is it that Qin here is fine after taking medicine [poor]

Is the status of the Immortal Lord here similar to that of a martial arts leader? [Pitiful]

Why was it that Mr. Changhua had seven bodyguards, but the third lady had nine bodyguards? [Pitiful]

Jia Ren must be a demon. He is as small as Rakshasa and can kill two demons easily. I don't believe that he didn't save his followers. Moreover, he should have come to Ye specially. He was the one who kept staring at Ye. He didn't show up until Ye found the body of the demon. I blindly guessed that he was the new demon king who killed the real Jia Ren and Sun Yan and replaced them. There are many doubts about Jia Ren, and it's such a coincidence that Ye gave him a pillow when he was dozing off. I hope Ye didn't really believe it, otherwise it would seem that the protagonist is a bit out of his mind.

Was Xiao Zhusheng the one who played the flute at the beginning of the fight? Did Xiao, Liu, and Qin fight together? There are so few plots in Xiao. I was confused when I suddenly saw the names [poor]. I felt that there were so many characters in the first three chapters of the teacher. Also, Liu is not the head of the family, so why doesn't he live in the main hall? Is the third lady an elder?

Baby, can you write more emotional scenes of attack and affection? [Pitiful]

Teacher, let me briefly tell you what I think when I see this. It is not a writing guide. If you mind, you can delete the comment [poor] The plot and character settings are very interesting, and make people interested in reading it. I can also imagine that the teacher has put a lot of effort into setting the background of the story, and carefully constructed each character [Prick-eared Rabbit Head], but 1. There are too many characters with names, but there is little foreshadowing or introduction to the relevant settings. Sometimes they are just bare names, and the corresponding identity introduction is postponed. When I watched it, I wondered more than once who this newcomer was, and I didn't even know whether the character was a boy or a girl [poor]. I feel that there is no need to introduce so many characters and names in the early stage of the story, especially the supporting characters who do not play a role in the early stage, such as the elders of the Liu family and the third lady's maid, or to simply foreshadow or introduce the identity of the characters when introducing the names, such as Zhou Ruoqing and An Changli. One or two new characters are for setting up suspense, but too many are too much. 2. The perspective change is not particularly good in some places and is a bit stiff. It is difficult to explain specifically what is wrong. It is a matter of opinion. What makes me feel most unnatural is the scene in Chapter 9 when Ye recalled being sent away by his master the day before. I thought it was over after just one paragraph of recall. Later, when I saw Liu Huaiyu's name, I realized that I was still recalling, and the boundaries of the memories were unclear. 3. Part of the background of the story is a bit hard to insert. During the dialogue, the story settings came towards me like great luck. It takes some time to accept and understand. 4. Some of the settings are not explained clearly, such as what the Immortal Lord does and what tasks it has. I still have little understanding of the setting of the Immortal Lord. Is it possible that the spirit body alone is the Immortal Lord's reserve force? I don't quite understand what the nine guards do. Mainly, these two settings are closely related to the path Ye wants to take. I think it is better to explain this part of the settings clearly as soon as possible [poor]. However, these may be explained later, I haven't seen it yet. All the above are my personal subjective feelings and do not have complete reference significance. I apologize again [poor]

I don't know why I prefer Zi Yangxuan and Ji Linheng's CP