The command center came under a hacker attack. One person took over the main screen, every split screen, and all the electronic equipment used in investigations:
A dark cat-eared hat concealed half their face, and a red mole was faintly visible on their neck.
They looked no older than eighteen.
“I’ll give you three days to think it over. Make me an offer to join the police force.”
“Otherwise, prepare to get fired.”
After the video, lists of names in white text on blue backgrounds began appearing all over the city. They showed not only people’s names, but also their crimes.
“Twisting right and wrong, those damn bastards. When I catch him, I’ll make him scream until he wishes he were dead!” After work, Captain Qin Zhao floored the accelerator and drove straight home.
As soon as he opened the door, he saw the pretty, sickly little cat from his blended family, no blood relation to him, curled barefoot on a beanbag.
He was playing Bubble Hall on a laptop.
“Hey, you’re back?” He lifted his eyes, his whole body giving off the soft fragrance of someone fresh from a bath.
Qin Zhao ignored him and headed straight into his room.
Chuiye put down the laptop. A dragon-shaped hacker System on its back glowed a deep, luminous blue, and the red mole at the hollow of his neck gleamed.
“Make me scream until I wish I were dead? Interesting.”
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The precinct got a new consultant.
He was so pretty everyone loved him, which was a shame since he was a boy. More importantly, he liked sneaking into the captain’s den.
One of the junior interns forgot to turn off the camera when he left, exposing the captain’s secret.
Everyone at the precinct was forced to watch a dog-teasing incident.
Chuiye was curled up on a tatami mat, holding a flirt pole and smiling like spring had returned.
Meanwhile, their future pillar of the force was crouched on the floor, barking as he put shoes on the little consultant.
“Woof woof. Doesn’t it sound nice?”
“Do it again. Make it sound like you wish you were dead.”
“I’ll kiss you at the highest point in the world.”
Criminal Investigation Captain & Hacker on the Right Side of the Law
Reader’s guide:
1. Chuiye has a bit of a crazy streak, and Qin Kong is very controlling. You’ll get used to it. Expect melodrama and a bold one-sided crush.
2. The classic opening is weak, so I recommend starting from Chapter Two. It won’t affect the story’s completeness.
3. This isn’t a fake stepbrother story. It’s a joking take on a couple living under the same roof…
4. This is a work of fiction. Don’t take it seriously.
5. We uphold the principle of absolute justice. The illegal acts in the blurb are unrelated to the protagonists.
[A sickly, beautiful, tragic and crazy cat with a blood feud who’s seen through life & a rabid-dog patient of ten years, a wife-protecting maniac armed with a cannon, an invincible, thunderous big leopard]
Full outline finished. No abandoning the story ✓
Theme: Keep the internet a harmonious place
The subject matter of the story is good and the writing style is acceptable. I feel like there are a lot of things I want to express. After reading the first chapter, the overall feeling is a bit messy. There are many characters and the supporting roles are not clear enough. I can't remember them after reading it. The metaphors in some dialogues feel of little use and have no memorable points. The biggest problem is... I don't remember who is who. (This is just a random comment, please delete it if you don't like it) Don't affect your mood, keep up the good work
I found it was really messy, there was no transition, and I had no idea what scene I was in.
"Taruye would never have thought of..." This is a big bug for the author~ I'm a little fan.
Can you mark what things should be revised? Is it just free chapter repair? Last night I encountered an incoherence in the text (I hope you will reply to me) [Xingxingyan]
Can you mark what things should be revised? Is it just free chapter repair? Last night I encountered an incoherence in the text (I hope you will reply to me) [Xingxingyan]
It turns out that gray is the color of grandma's hair. I thought it was grandma. I watched it three times.
It's my type! Take it!
"She called a car for me, and now..." This is a big bug for the author~ Called a car?
I don't understand some of the expressions. What is a substitute wedding dress? Is it slang? What's the story about the director of the police station hugging two people for three years? (Am I surfing too slowly?) Should Hushu Bao be regarded as a prop rather than an equipment? Rui Niao's personality description is a bit flat and not very recognizable. The following criminal investigation cases began to take shape, and people from different departments were involved, including trace inspection, forensics, preliminary investigation, etc., And it gradually started to take shape. Besides, although Deputy Qin's detachment is a half-baked person, he still has the position after all, so it seems that everyone is obedient. Pokémon is a bit funny. Is it his nickname for Xiao Chui?
The part about the online car-hailing scene was quite real, and the male protagonists met "smoothly", although their gender was not revealed. There are still problems with the first chapter, some descriptions could be deleted, and it is unclear who spoke the dialogue. Are the symbols used to express inner thoughts, or are they words spoken by others? (I watched it again. It should refer to the message replied on the phone?) It was a popular misgendering joke, so Xiao Qin sang a one-man show for a while, not noticing when the pomegranate juice spilled on Xiao Chui. Compared with the first chapter, the expression is a bit clearer, but some descriptions are still a bit difficult to pronounce and are not commonly expressed. Come on come on