Light at My Fingertips

I accidentally clicked in and found that it was actually an article from eleven years ago, so I read on. It was just a few thousand words long and felt so spiritual. It made me cry a little (although some of the words really have a sense of age).

A very cute short essay, with a very visual feel like a high school essay! (Laugh

Wow, this article was written 11 years ago. Is the author's newly published article revisiting his childhood hobby?

As expected, it's so young... An old man like me... Tears ran away...

It's the Japanese style. This article is very smart and delicate, reminding me of Midorikawa Yuki's Forest of Fireflies. However, the language is a bit awkward, which made me sweat. In addition, I felt that the description was wordy in some places. Come on!

It's the Japanese style. This article is very smart and delicate, reminding me of Midorikawa Yuki's Forest of Fireflies. However, the language is a bit awkward, which made me sweat. In addition, I felt that the description was wordy in some places. Come on!

Posted below upon invitation~ TO 7L: 7L Girl, your usage of punctuation marks makes me crazy = = I don't know what input method you use, but no matter what input method, it has Chinese punctuation. Looking at the ",", ".", And ":" one by one, I feel so stressed. But if you put aside the punctuation, the feeling your article gives me can be described in one word: aura. This kind of spiritual energy can be seen everywhere in the literature, and I felt it as soon as I read the first sentence. And if my guess is correct, girl, you should still be a middle school student now, right? I don't mean to imply my age or anything, but I haven't seen this kind of "exam-oriented essay style that is well written but difficult to get high marks" for a long time, so I suddenly felt nostalgic after reading it today. Examination essays are not eight-legged essays. Although they are often criticized for being template-based and routine-based, they can actually be very beautiful and very spiritual. One of the characteristics of examination essays is the delicacy of description. This girl's article includes environment description, background description, appearance description, language description, psychological description, action description, detail description... It can be said that it is almost composed of description. These descriptions make the entire article seem very lively, and the consistently consistent writing style makes people feel happy when reading it. However, no matter how good the writing style is, it cannot replace the characterization of an article. From the perspective of the characters, the author's article is really not a success. Although the story itself is very simple, I was still a little disappointed with the too thin images of the three characters. If their personalities could be shown, this article would be more readable. Finally, LZ felt that he still couldn't help but want to raise some background-related issues. I feel that the Japanese style of this article is quite obvious, so I would like to ask, did the girl subconsciously set the background to a certain era in Japan when she wrote the article? Although LZ is not someone who cares about the requirements for receiving articles, because the articles submitted by the girls above and below are always very poor, LZ is still depressed T^T

Sorry, I originally wanted to read the entire article... But when I saw my fox demon classmate being caught, I couldn't help but cross my arms. So the author should pay attention to punctuation and use full characters. Also, sentences that are too long can test people's patience. Finally, after watching the first part, I had a feeling that the protagonist's character is not cute! What about psychological activities? ! There will always be some kind of psychological activity when someone robs the fish that you worked so hard to grab! ——Okay, maybe the protagonist has this kind of character, but it makes people feel very depressed.

Come on~ The writing is pretty good, but the plot feels a little thin. . The writing is still very good after I've touched up on it!

Press the claws to pass~~Come on↖(^ω^)↗