One Day of Sword Dancing and You Call Me Jiahao? What About Ten Years?

I wrote it myself, so it's okay to give it five stars.

Lao Shu came here and I would like to make some comments. First, although I understand the principle of the three golden sentences, it is best to explain the matter of being a Jiahao a little more clearly. Now the beginning is a bit too casual, saying that I have been dancing with swords for ten years, but it is hard to say whether I am actually wielding a wooden stick or dancing with a sword. Maybe it would be better to write that Uncle Xu gave him a few pages with sword movements, or simply that Uncle Xu taught him a few sword dance movements, and then he danced with these movements for ten years. I can mention this after dancing for ten years: Although I don't know what the use is, at least it gives me some exercise. Second, as a long-time reader, I can tell who Uncle Xu is at a glance, but I don't recommend assuming that everyone is a long-time reader of the previous book. It's best to mention something about how Uncle Xu watched him grow up and helped their family a lot (of course there will be mentions of Lingtian and the family later, but it's best to mention it in a reasonable way at the beginning) and that Uncle Xu has never broken his promise and similar things have happened before. (For example, I gave him a reward after he was admitted to that spiritual magician school and finally gave it to him, etc.) To increase Uncle Xu's credibility. Otherwise, it would look like "someone lied to the protagonist and then the protagonist stupidly ran away to be a hero for ten years." Very abstract The rest are actually just some details that can be polished. After all, the first few chapters are quite important. This is not criticism, just suggestions and hopes. After all, I still want to see the Holy Lord (wrong)

Anyone who came from Invasion can give me a thumbs up. After all, I'm still looking forward to the if line between Bad Yin and Yurou. I feel like this book is quite good so far.

Coming from Invasion, hey, give the author a thumbs up

The author's new book must be supported @vow to light

Nice! Nice! Very nice! ! !

I'll keep it for now and wait until the book is finished before reading it.

Intrusive, indicating that it is okay

New book Wisdom Teeth, support the author

I say it looks good, I don't accept any objection (￣▽￣ㄟ)