Bus to Purgatory: Lei Heng Lights Up from the Start

The subject matter and imagination are very good, and many settings are indeed very good. I can also understand that you want to make the work as valuable as possible and call it hand-made to cover up the fact that it was created by AI. But you don't need to pay too much attention to it. After all, the imagination and inspiration are your own, and the writing is good.

Overall, it's still very good, giving it 5 stars. It should be that there are many female Shura fields currently including Liang Xiu, Xiao Tang, and Mama. Currently it is. The protagonist first enters the spider nest, then fights the white whale, then lives with Xiao Tang, and then boards the train. (It's up to you to read these rough details. After all, the introduction doesn't reveal any information. You can read my comment and decide whether to read it or not.) Will update if there is new content.

My evaluation is... B+ to A-, the subject matter is good, as a rare "good" in the city, to influence (?) Others and find yourself in it, but for the article, I can only say that the text content should be polished with AI, if the author insists on claiming that it is If you are typing by hand, my suggestion is to reduce the use of not... Not... But similar parallelism sentence patterns. Parallelism sentences are good and can emphasize the content of the text. When used in key emotional situations, they will strengthen the tension, but if they are used too selectively, it will be hard to swallow. I've almost finished reading it. Putting aside the character panels and the like, I think the AI-edited comments in this article will not be deleted for the time being. However, it is undeniable that this book is indeed a monthly article worth reading. What impressed me most so far is the interaction with Xiao Tang and the final "We are family" dialogue.

[Making Drinks, Changing Life] This episode is amazing. The writing is very delicate, like the rain in early spring, which is a rare type in tomatoes. Although the pace is slow, this kind of slowness can better appreciate the plot and the psychology of the characters. Reading this book is like taking a sip of hot soup. The story slowly melts into the heart. It is very comfortable. The plot of Bai Xue is used as a seasoning to increase the excitement and make the taste richer. In short, it is very delicious and I am not full.

Several people blocked the way forward. They sat at the table and argued loudly with each other. "Look at this pink model! The rich colors are flowing along those smooth and soft lines... This is the meaning of the leather case!" "What a mistake. This set has a pure style, and there is no detail that will stain your eyes. This is the real deal." The two people turned around and looked over at the same time. Hey there! Tell us which one is better!" "Definitely new skin, full of females. "Get E. G. O accessories: pink plush doll "Original leather, for sure, pure and flawless." Get E. G. O accessories: happy plush doll "Xiao Jin is Xiao Jin." Obtain E. G. O accessories: pink plush doll, happy plush doll

I can't see it without AI. At least the theme of the story is conceived, and the use of AI is probably a matter of writing and description. There is no poisonous point, it is relatively smooth, and the emotional scene is good, much better than most fanfics I have read. However, I want to know how the heroine handles this matter. Is she really going to have a harem? In fact, I think it's just a hobby. At present, these few emotional scenes that have some relationship are relatively easy to handle. It depends on how to write them. Anyway, please give it a try, author.

Overall, it's still very good, but the emotional description of the protagonist is a bit lacking and seems a bit bland? Also, I don't know if Lei Heng will be beheaded (kneeling down and kowtowing every step of the way, just to pray for Tian Heng's safety). This book has great potential, and some settings about the protagonist are also quite interesting [sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart]

Your writing will improve if you write more by yourself and use less AI writing. I have read many books before where the writing is a bit poor at the beginning and the plot is stiff, but it gets better later on, so poor writing is not a problem, the more you write, the better it will be. Moreover, the writing method of AI is static. Instead of reading this kind of copy and paste, the childish writing method is more innovative.

So far it's pretty good. Although there are a lot of imaginary elements, it's pretty good for people like me. I just don't know where the protagonist and Uncle Lei met together. Was it Hongyuan? And how will Uncle Lei feel when the protagonist has been missing for so long? Anyway, I'm looking forward to it After reading it roughly, I feel that there are indeed traces of AI polishing throughout the entire article, but the ideas and ideas are very good design, and the protagonist's abilities and personality also have a relatively reasonable explanation. I would like to make a suggestion, if this article is really about artificial intelligence, the modifiers can be appropriately reduced. Some sentences are enough in one stroke, freeing up more space for the development of the story, and some formats need to be protected from lightning, such as "X X X laughed" "X X X "Not moving" is a particularly common AI format. At the same time, as to why so few people have rated this book: I thought of the following reasons: 1: Lao Lu is your first monthly book, and the fan base is relatively thin. Two: The first few chapters are not funny enough or eye-catching enough. Three: Too few updates

This book has some love plots, and from the looks of it, Yoshihide seems to like the protagonist. Ishmael has a crush on the protagonist, and Don Quixote is very dependent on the protagonist. The protagonist is a kind person with a gentle temperament and treats people around him very well! A bit of a heartthrob?