The Witch Mom Is Unreliable

The content of the article is three stars, and one star is added for the richness of the Witch's worldview. However, the author's writing style is still a bit green, and the purpose of the writing in many places is unclear and cumbersome, making it look dense at first glance. It feels like the author wants to write out all the pictures that come to mind, but novels are different from comics and animations. Expressing the same behavior of different people in one paragraph will only make people feel messy, uncomfortable, and want to skip it. And what is the character of the protagonist? What is the core driving force of the protagonist? None of them showed up very well. There is no main-line content, as if writing a unit drama, but each unit drama has no obvious intention to express, such as 10 to 20 chapters to shape the core motivation of the protagonist, such as the nature of the witch and the incident with Vera's mother. Then use chapters 20 to 25 to write about the protagonist's actions and highlight the protagonist's character. Moreover, the character's dialogue is too bland and routine. Readers cannot see what is in the author's mind. The words lack modal particles and language style. You can clearly see the character's personality when you look at the well-created characters in The Witch of the Cosmic Dove 1994. They are highlighted first and then described sideways, so that readers can first understand what the character is like. Finally, you must be clear about what kind of story you want. Clarify the main characters, especially the characteristics of the protagonist, determine the goals and world view of the story, what to do to achieve the story goals in this world view, how the characters will react when doing so, and then eliminate useless characters in the plot according to different plots. The book is written. I can probably see the concept that the author wants to write about, and the foundation of the witch world view is also good, so keep up the good work

I'm about halfway through it now, and it's a bit difficult. There are too many paragraphs and it's too crowded. If I were more attentive and modified it a little bit in some places, it would be perfect... Also, I don't know if the author has noticed that the book suddenly affects the perception at the beginning of a certain chapter... Hmm... The plot and world view are great, and the writing in the front is also good, but the back is a little rough. If the author can revise it later, I think the flow will increase. Finally... I hope the author can care a little more about his article... Come on

There are too many detailed descriptions, and they are written in too much detail. Many things that can be briefly mentioned are described in detail. Who put this novel on my bookshelf? There are some issues of principle that cannot be used. It is recommended to revise chapters 34~38. If you dare to write it, I won't even dare to read it.

The subject matter is great, it's the first time I've seen it. But the language is too repetitive. Even after reading it, I can recite the sentence patterns and adjectives described in the next paragraph. The plot is extremely delayed. A simple drinking milk can fill up half a chapter. The typical flaws are not covered up, but the novel subject matter can also bring a novel feeling. Things will change after you read it. The author has obviously improved in the later parts. The plot and writing style are not bad at all. It is recommended to skip chapters 43 to 120. If you just start reading in the early stage, you will not feel uncomfortable immediately. Skipping the middle plot will have no impact on the follow-up. Just read the author's well-written plot later.

The story is very good, warm and daily, but it has a strong AI flavor. This kind of content does not seem to be written by AI. I suspect that the author likes to let AI polish it. Although it affects the audience, considering it is a tomato, it can be considered excellent.

The writing is good, but there are too many "not... But...", Which seems to be a waste of word count, but the storyline is very comfortable. There are no deliberate characterizations and a lot of things to emphasize the specialness of the protagonist; there are no special events that are too bizarre and weird. Personally, I don't like the part about using heavy firepower firearms.

It looks good, the quality is guaranteed, and the quantity is large enough. I suggest the author introduce the book appropriately to at least let readers know what type of book it is. If the introduction is too vague, it will also affect some viewing experience and even cause some readers to miss the book. Hmm... It's also easy to offend some readers...

Huh ~ looks good. The words before my eyes brought me to a living world of witches. Phew~

The little witch is so cute😋

The mysterious writing style of the novel is coupled with the plot of becoming a grandson first and then a father, not eating beef, etc., And the description may be too polished. It is also very interesting to eat large amounts of food. I like [love]