How Did Hermione Start Taking an Interest in Me, a Sleepyhead?

I am looking at the single female protagonist Hermione. The characters of Hermione and the male protagonist are both okay. Personally, I feel that the biggest shortcoming is that the writing style is too AI, as if the AI ​​ran it over and revised it again. The reading experience is slightly poor, but the single female protagonist Hermione makes up for this very well. There could be more emotional scenes, and the male protagonist is obviously already very strong, so we can design some highlight plots that are exclusive to him. Situations that are small highlights of the character, such as catching Rita, have been moved to the male protagonist too many times. The biggest shortcoming is that it is too AI and makes it tiring to watch. The advantage is that the characters are well designed. But I really didn't understand the meaning of the descriptions of Luna and Qiu Zhang in the middle. The sudden appearance of these two people in those chapters scared me to death, thinking that there would be more female protagonists. The main reason was that there was an inexplicable feeling that there was no connection between the plot and the plot. In the middle of Qiu Zhang, I felt like I had fallen in love with the male protagonist () But when I first saw the title of the book, I thought the male protagonist would be a story about a human library where Hermione learns knowledge from his brain ()

I finished reading it. I originally planned to finish it in a day and a half, but there were too many things to deal with, so I also forgot how many days to finish it. — Anyway, let's get to the point The author of this book has some inconveniences that need to be improved, but I can tolerate it. Although some people or even most people don't like it, I still hope that the author can improve it. I feel that the protagonist of this book is no longer a human being. He was well portrayed at the beginning, but later I felt... But the protagonist in the setting... Is relieved. He is a good boy, although his heart has grown up. Hermione is pretty good... I like it very much, but unfortunately I think there are a bit few emotional scenes, but I can only write about it when the children grow up... As for the reason for giving five stars, I have promised to help the author... What's more, the author can write... Right? — "Angelos" Volume 2: A different path against fate Chapter 47: Long time no see Angelos looked at Eton Fokray and bowed forward, full of sincerity. "I apologize to you Mr. Fookray, I shouldn't have questioned you..."

First of all, this comment was not intended to be offensive or malicious in any way. I personally also like the author's inspiration and creation. [Laughs] The main purpose is to express my personal views. 1. Over-grooming - simile What I am mainly talking about is a chapter I saw, Chapter 20 of Volume 3. There are 24 similes in this chapter, which averages out to once every 146 words. For example, the first two paragraphs of this chapter use similes three times. Once to describe Professor McGonagall's posture, once to describe the effects of her commands, and once to describe the logic of her language. My feeling is that it is too dense and repetitive. The first use is effective and simple, and it describes her majesty very intuitively. This also makes the second description of the scene too pale and weak. The third time, its effect is there, but it is more suitable to be brought out in a short way. Overall, too many similes can fatigue the reader (personal opinion). Original text: Professor McGonagall stood in front of the teacher's chair, pressing her hands on the edge of the table, as if using a gesture to stabilize the atmosphere of the entire auditorium. She spoke in a low voice, but her clear and commanding tone quickly overcame the humming in the auditorium, like a smooth knife cutting through a thickening layer of cloth, cleanly and without leaving any lingering sound. "We won't be going back to the dormitory tonight," Professor McGonagall said, speaking a little faster than she usually did in class, but still clearly, and every word seemed to have been planned in advance. "Everyone will stay in the auditorium for the night. The prefect will distribute sleeping bags. Please find your place and keep quiet." I will modify it privately: Professor McGonagall stood in front of the teacher's chair, pressing her hands on the edge of the table, as if using a gesture to stabilize the atmosphere of the entire auditorium. When she spoke, her voice was not loud, but her clear and commanding tone quickly overwhelmed the buzzing sound in the auditorium. "We won't be going back to the dormitory tonight," Professor McGonagall said, speaking a little faster than she usually did, but still being coherent. "Everyone will stay in the auditorium for the night. The prefects will distribute sleeping bags. Please find your place and keep quiet." 2. Processing of character behavior This point will make a long story short. The author especially likes to add some descriptions of tone during dialogue. It's not that it's bad, it's still the same point of view: too often. For example, the conversation between Percy and Dumbledore in the same chapter: Percy's voice was softer than he usually spoke, with the caution a prefect on duty might have when reporting to the headmaster. In a situation like this, isn't what he's describing exactly what's happening? Of course there are good situations, but I suggest that the author review how many times the description is "with a" followed by a complete situation and an adjective. The above two points are the issues I noticed while reading. I also saw in the comment area that the author used AI to run it. I don't dislike AI. In this environment, it can help us achieve many things that we couldn't do before. So you can use it to write a book, why can't you use it to revise it? Let other AI identify possible problems and then correct them yourself. But it may have an impact on the writing style. I haven't finished reading this book yet (I've only seen the chapter used as an example), and I'm looking forward to the plot behind it. Finally, I would like to thank the author very much for sharing your inspiration, and everyone is welcome to correct my mistakes. My original intention is just to share some of my opinions. This novel fits my aesthetic quite well, so I will review it.

It's very interesting. I beg the author not to stop updating [laughs]

A very novel setting, "a boy imprisoned by knowledge". But I think there is one thing I want to say. I don't know if it was written with AI. The text lacks a sense of "humanity", or the characters' emotions are not revealed, and it feels very bland, but it's not bad.

The writing is very good and it is a novel worth reading.

The author has no experience writing novels for the first time, so there may be some problems. I hope you can bear with me. I will correct the problems I pointed out when I see them. I am deeply sorry if it brings you a bad experience. If you think it is okay, please leave a comment to support me. Thank you all.

Is it Hermione, the single heroine?

This book is so well written, it's a manly thing

It's very beautiful. At least it ranks among the top Harry Potter fanfics I've read. I like the warm and plain style very much. I hope the author can continue to maintain it. I will keep reading it.