The Train Bound for the Sabbath

It's quite a good work, but it uses too many modifiers and turning words in the previous article (maybe it was partly done using AI and not refined?), But it can be seen that the author is slowly making progress in revising it. The plot progresses steadily without any poisonous points, and the protagonist's growth is very in line with expectations without any breakdown in combat power. It can be called a good read in Tomato. I give the author a five-star praise and encouragement, hoping to maintain progress and complete it as a high-quality work. Later, it seems that the author has messed up the game, completely using AI and losing all the human touch, so that's all.

It combines Grammar, Victorian and entertaining novels. The readability is good, and you can feel that the author's level is constantly improving. Although the combat power does not increase quickly, the battle rhythm is very fast, events come one after another, and the protagonist basically solves the battle quickly. There are no procrastinating descriptions, which makes people feel very happy. I read a few more chapters, AI articles. There are a lot of flaws, but the plot is still watchable

It looks good, but why are there no quotation marks in the dialogue? From the moment the protagonist obtains the demon bloodline, there is a sense of AI from the beginning.

It's really well written. Although the combat power is suppressed, the narrative line is very good, except that there are no semicolons in the first few dozen chapters. .

The only fly in the ointment is that the dialogue does not have these punctuation points: "" [Exploration]

Maybe it's my imagination, but this AI flavor is a bit too strong [smile]

It's okay. There were a lot of extremes in some of the previous ones, but then the author changed it a little bit and it was a lot better. Also, he likes to emphasize how rational he is as a game planner. As long as you can bear it, the story is actually quite attractive.

The subject matter is great, the plot is not great, but it is not bad, the writing is very cool, and there is no blindly hiding and being a grandson. However, my profiling ability as a game chief planner in my previous life told me that the work has a strong AI flavor; based on my literary appreciation skills as a chief planner in my previous life, I believe that removing most of the unnecessary attributives can greatly increase the "human flavor" of the work; finally, due to the superb sense of humor I accumulated as a chief planner in my previous life, the recurring identity of the protagonist's previous life planner really amused me, comparable to Hawaii Technical School

It's quite exciting. The protagonist has never been soft on people, from a rat in the sewer at the beginning to a young eagle now. The system is also greedy capital. The character of Murphy, the greedy three-eyed crow with a bad mouth, is well portrayed. From the beginning, he is sarcastic and has a bad mouth. Later, the protagonist becomes stronger and obeys. There are too many authors but too few, but it is quite exciting.

The writing is good, but the dialogue and content are not separated, which affects the reading.